Willing Hearts
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Chapter 11 A"Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?
36 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
I don't know how I missed this one. I''ve gotten way behind with my reviews but I thought I'd read all of yours. This is good, I'm glad I found it hecause there is a lot happening in this one.
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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I don't know how I missed this one. I''ve gotten way behind with my reviews but I thought I'd read all of yours. This is good, I'm glad I found it hecause there is a lot happening in this one.
Comment Written 12-May-2024
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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Not a problem. I'm sorry you had to read it when no monies attached. I do appreciate you reading. Thank you.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh wow, what an exciting chapter. You've woven several scenes together and that's always difficult, but you handled it well.
So... what is Ryan Brown doing where he doesn't belong??? Up to no good, I'd say.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Oh wow, what an exciting chapter. You've woven several scenes together and that's always difficult, but you handled it well.
So... what is Ryan Brown doing where he doesn't belong??? Up to no good, I'd say.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 09-May-2024
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Ryan is up to no good. Thank you for the kind review.
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I had that feeling!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Most dogs do not like storms. They perceive the potential dangers storms can produce.
Seems Sami is blaming herself for Myra's disappearance.
Appears Noah is quite the controller in almost everything done and what the others are allowed to say.
Even in the safe house, with Noah's army present, perhaps Sami is not safe.
Ending heightens the story line.
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Most dogs do not like storms. They perceive the potential dangers storms can produce.
Seems Sami is blaming herself for Myra's disappearance.
Appears Noah is quite the controller in almost everything done and what the others are allowed to say.
Even in the safe house, with Noah's army present, perhaps Sami is not safe.
Ending heightens the story line.
Comment Written 09-May-2024
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Noah has a control issue. I think Sami is capable of softening it.
Comment from lyenochka
That's a hilarious picture! And it is true even the big dogs have their own phobias. The storm was able to give Noah and Sami some time alone together!
I wonder who this Brown is. Did he come as part of the "tech team"? Is he somehow related the the human trafficking group?
It's good that Sami remembered him.
I'm glad you brought up Myra and her birthday to keep the thread of the story going.
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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That's a hilarious picture! And it is true even the big dogs have their own phobias. The storm was able to give Noah and Sami some time alone together!
I wonder who this Brown is. Did he come as part of the "tech team"? Is he somehow related the the human trafficking group?
It's good that Sami remembered him.
I'm glad you brought up Myra and her birthday to keep the thread of the story going.
Comment Written 09-May-2024
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Noah will handle Ryan. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Esther Brown
That was a 6 but I didn't have one. I really like your style and easy narrative. Your writing reminds me of Charles Martin, one of my favorites who also tackles this subject. I did not see anything that needed to be changed but expect you are going to edit anyways....Great captivating story and characters. Esther
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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That was a 6 but I didn't have one. I really like your style and easy narrative. Your writing reminds me of Charles Martin, one of my favorites who also tackles this subject. I did not see anything that needed to be changed but expect you are going to edit anyways....Great captivating story and characters. Esther
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement. A virtual six is just as good.
Comment from lancellot
Well written in your classic style. Everyone is friendly and concerned about your MC and the dog all at the same time. Super nice. You have some danger at the end. I was surprised at the lack of handcuffs on their person.
Very nice writing.
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Well written in your classic style. Everyone is friendly and concerned about your MC and the dog all at the same time. Super nice. You have some danger at the end. I was surprised at the lack of handcuffs on their person.
Very nice writing.
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Damn, I used all of my sixes. This was one of the best chapters so far. The talk about Myra between Sami and Sarah brought the focus back on the missing girls. Then the two very distinct faces of Jasper. Terrified and whimpering because of the storm, then baring his teeth at the tech guy. This was a well rounded chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Damn, I used all of my sixes. This was one of the best chapters so far. The talk about Myra between Sami and Sarah brought the focus back on the missing girls. Then the two very distinct faces of Jasper. Terrified and whimpering because of the storm, then baring his teeth at the tech guy. This was a well rounded chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, I needed a reminder of why Sami's in this situation.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Another fine addition to the Sami Saga. Ha!
It has been a tough week. Your story brightened things up.
This paragraph cracked me up:
Noah stood as he studied his team, before he could say anything, Bob said, "We already know this will never be discussed."
Great job.
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reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Another fine addition to the Sami Saga. Ha!
It has been a tough week. Your story brightened things up.
This paragraph cracked me up:
Noah stood as he studied his team, before he could say anything, Bob said, "We already know this will never be discussed."
Great job.
D
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Noah and mess up his tough guy image. LOL
Comment from Sharon Elwell
Good ending that leaves the reader wondering what will happen next! I only got snagged in a couple of places.
"When she answered, she asked, 'I'm glad to see you but I figured..." It too me a minute to figure out that it was probably Sami doing the asking.
"It had to deal with me wanting to help teenage girls." Should it be "..had to do with..."?
"If we knew, we could've arrested them." Seems like it should be, "If we had known..."
Good work! I feel what you're saying about changing a text every time you look at it. But all that polishing pays off.
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Good ending that leaves the reader wondering what will happen next! I only got snagged in a couple of places.
"When she answered, she asked, 'I'm glad to see you but I figured..." It too me a minute to figure out that it was probably Sami doing the asking.
"It had to deal with me wanting to help teenage girls." Should it be "..had to do with..."?
"If we knew, we could've arrested them." Seems like it should be, "If we had known..."
Good work! I feel what you're saying about changing a text every time you look at it. But all that polishing pays off.
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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I'm going through a novel right now from my publisher's editor and still wanted to change a few things as I read.
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's often hard how to best decide who is in charge, but I'm come to the conclusion years ago that the person holding the gun is in charge, at least for the time being. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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It's often hard how to best decide who is in charge, but I'm come to the conclusion years ago that the person holding the gun is in charge, at least for the time being. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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I tend to agree with you. I think the gun trumps. Thank you for the kind review.
