Thoughts About Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Love Confusion"My Collection of Love Poetry
10 total reviews
Comment from Carola Fernandez
Wow! I love it! Powerul words. Nice rhyming. The "funny farm" took me by surprise, I don't think it's he best fit - I know you are looking for rhyming words which is challenging to do - but the whole poem is great! I really like the last couple of lines.
Best of luck with your writing piece!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Wow! I love it! Powerul words. Nice rhyming. The "funny farm" took me by surprise, I don't think it's he best fit - I know you are looking for rhyming words which is challenging to do - but the whole poem is great! I really like the last couple of lines.
Best of luck with your writing piece!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much! I?m glad you enjoyed my sad truths.Your gift of six stars is amazing and generous.
Hugs, Trisha
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Wow! I am so honored by the nomination and by you taking my feedback as being that constructive. I just read the changes you made. Your poem is complete now! Best of luck again!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Whoa, this is heavy! You have written a piece that I hope, finds you some peace. It is sad that you are still together, but mine is not to judge. You have your reasons, as we all do, to stay in an unsatisfactory relationship. The poem is very well written and tells the story well of how you began, and then began to unravel, as time rolled on. I love your flow, meter, and the choice of form for this piece. The rhyme scheme is well done. My favorite line is in the fourth stanza, line 3 which says, "He went into rages in different phases," the internal rhyme is excellently scribed, and the meaning is explained nicely in this particular line. I love it all, though, and have given you a sixer, because I believe you have deserved it, not only for how you wrote but, for what you chose to write about. Your honesty is almost disarming if, I couldn't relate to it so much. I have been where you are talking about in many different relationships. And, as you say in your Author's notes, Narcissistic people won't seek help, and if they do, they don't work on their side of the issues. They blame everyone but themselves. Brava for writing this revealing story, in the form of a poem.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Whoa, this is heavy! You have written a piece that I hope, finds you some peace. It is sad that you are still together, but mine is not to judge. You have your reasons, as we all do, to stay in an unsatisfactory relationship. The poem is very well written and tells the story well of how you began, and then began to unravel, as time rolled on. I love your flow, meter, and the choice of form for this piece. The rhyme scheme is well done. My favorite line is in the fourth stanza, line 3 which says, "He went into rages in different phases," the internal rhyme is excellently scribed, and the meaning is explained nicely in this particular line. I love it all, though, and have given you a sixer, because I believe you have deserved it, not only for how you wrote but, for what you chose to write about. Your honesty is almost disarming if, I couldn't relate to it so much. I have been where you are talking about in many different relationships. And, as you say in your Author's notes, Narcissistic people won't seek help, and if they do, they don't work on their side of the issues. They blame everyone but themselves. Brava for writing this revealing story, in the form of a poem.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 11-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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My serenity is from indifference. I?m not a ?cold? person, but it?s the only way I?m able to escape the heartaches of the situation every day. It?s almost impossible to deal with feeling unloved. Heartfelt wishes for your
Situation. Thanks so much for your warm and kind review.
Hugs, Trisha
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My escape is from indifference. I?m not a ?cold? person, but it?s the only way I?m able to escape the heartaches of the situation every day. It?s almost impossible to deal with feeling unloved. Heartfelt wishes for your
Situation. Thanks so much for your warm and kind review, and six stars
Hugs, Trisha
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Hello Trisha
I am so sorry for the heartaches you must escape every day. Yes, it is hard to deal with feeling unloved. My situation is over, and I have been living alone for many years. I long to feel loved. You are so welcome for the warmth and kindness I send your way.
Jesse
Comment from Debbie Pope
How quickly lust can slip into a hurtful, demeaning situation. Impossible to get out of except for the very brave. Sometimes too many people will be hurt by the breakup, so couples stay together for the sake of others. You learn ways to cope. Not a good way to live a life.
You say all of this beautifully in your poem. You even manage to make it rhyme.
Sounds autobiographical. I hope not. Good job. I am out of six stars or you would definitely have one.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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How quickly lust can slip into a hurtful, demeaning situation. Impossible to get out of except for the very brave. Sometimes too many people will be hurt by the breakup, so couples stay together for the sake of others. You learn ways to cope. Not a good way to live a life.
You say all of this beautifully in your poem. You even manage to make it rhyme.
Sounds autobiographical. I hope not. Good job. I am out of six stars or you would definitely have one.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Your review is enough! You. It is biographical and this poetry hobby has saved my everything. You give good reasons people endure!
I appreciate your kind review and heartfelt compliments.
Hugs, Tisga
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Bucklist
You did very well using the Sestets format with aa bb rhyming and six lines in each stanza; telling us of what your
Love Confusion along with your authors note. Gert
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Hello Bucklist
You did very well using the Sestets format with aa bb rhyming and six lines in each stanza; telling us of what your
Love Confusion along with your authors note. Gert
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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I?m happy you enjoyed my poem, sad situation that it is. Thanks for your kind review.
Hugs, Trisha
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You are welcome Buckelist Gert
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You are welcome Barb.
Gert
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the confusion of love sets in when the passion fades and the lovers have to learn to know each other and live together in peace become a daily struggle because their personalities are complete opposites left two unhappy people forced to live together.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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A very well-written poem about the confusion of love sets in when the passion fades and the lovers have to learn to know each other and live together in peace become a daily struggle because their personalities are complete opposites left two unhappy people forced to live together.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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I?m happy you enjoyed my poem, sad situation that it is. Thanks for your kind review.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Trisha,
It is so sad when mental illness causes these types of problems. It is hurtful to the victim the most - because they can see and feel what is going on. The person who needs help lives in their own insularity world and they have no idea of how much pain exists.
Thank you for sharing this well-written poem - the artwork was a lovely touch,
~patty~
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Hi, Trisha,
It is so sad when mental illness causes these types of problems. It is hurtful to the victim the most - because they can see and feel what is going on. The person who needs help lives in their own insularity world and they have no idea of how much pain exists.
Thank you for sharing this well-written poem - the artwork was a lovely touch,
~patty~
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Patti unfortunately this is personal and I don?t think he?s any happier either. We?re just old fashioned about splitting. I really appreciate your caring review,
Hugs, Trisha
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I'm so sorry - I will keep both of you in my prayers and thoughts.
~MP~
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Thank you for your support
Comment from Sugarray77
You have written a sad story/poem that just aches for the abuser to find help and counseling. I have a feeling this is a real situation you have described... especially after reading your notes. I am hoping for the best.
Melissa
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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You have written a sad story/poem that just aches for the abuser to find help and counseling. I have a feeling this is a real situation you have described... especially after reading your notes. I am hoping for the best.
Melissa
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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It is.I?m happy you enjoyed my poem, sad situation that it is. Thanks for your kind review.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Your love story, married life had many ups and downs, you married in a hurry, after long years divorced, lived isolated, again as a roommate, love confusion is always there; well said, well done. Write inspire change for 1234 Years--- DR ALCREATOR
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Your love story, married life had many ups and downs, you married in a hurry, after long years divorced, lived isolated, again as a roommate, love confusion is always there; well said, well done. Write inspire change for 1234 Years--- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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I?m happy you enjoyed my poem, sad situation that it is. Thanks for your kind review.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from jeSSaNN
Wow!... Excellent
I believe alot of women feel exactly this way. And there are.SO many women who need to hear this. It puts so much in perspective.
Resentments, blame and communication breakdowns...very deep and fundamental viewpoint much needed to be heard! Great job.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Wow!... Excellent
I believe alot of women feel exactly this way. And there are.SO many women who need to hear this. It puts so much in perspective.
Resentments, blame and communication breakdowns...very deep and fundamental viewpoint much needed to be heard! Great job.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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I?m happy you enjoyed my poem, sad situation that it is. Thanks for your kind review.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Six-Star Writer
Good poem structure, but I didn't like the message, as it was one-sided and accusatory. But the poem flowed well and had a nice rhythm.Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Good poem structure, but I didn't like the message, as it was one-sided and accusatory. But the poem flowed well and had a nice rhythm.Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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I have my faults and and I write from my heart, isn?t all poetry one sided? I I appreciated you reading it,
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No, just as with relatioships, poetry isn't always one sided.
