The Christmas Baby
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "A Cold Draft Between Them"Sam n Sarah get a baby with dire consequences
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Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hey Stan.
Things are looking up for Sam and his Wife as they work on their marriage. The two are evidently working to overcome a challenging past. Just as they were getting ready for the night, you skillfully introduced a tense moment by having Sam's phone ring. There are a lot of emotions at the surface between the two of them anyway, but the phone ringing Is a masterful shift in the story. You did a great job in that transition. It was not only well thought out, but it was a clever twist.
Robert
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Hey Stan.
Things are looking up for Sam and his Wife as they work on their marriage. The two are evidently working to overcome a challenging past. Just as they were getting ready for the night, you skillfully introduced a tense moment by having Sam's phone ring. There are a lot of emotions at the surface between the two of them anyway, but the phone ringing Is a masterful shift in the story. You did a great job in that transition. It was not only well thought out, but it was a clever twist.
Robert
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks again Robert.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This girl sounds like trouble with a capital T here and I am not sure she can be trusted and I certainly wouldn't offer her a room when she can go to the shelter. Beggars can't be choosers as they say, an interesting story, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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This girl sounds like trouble with a capital T here and I am not sure she can be trusted and I certainly wouldn't offer her a room when she can go to the shelter. Beggars can't be choosers as they say, an interesting story, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks Dolly!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Sam needs to tell Rebecca about Taylor right this very minute and he needs to get her into a shelter. Was it Chris who was in the house? I love this story.
Sam crawled on the couch next to her (couch beside her.)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Sam needs to tell Rebecca about Taylor right this very minute and he needs to get her into a shelter. Was it Chris who was in the house? I love this story.
Sam crawled on the couch next to her (couch beside her.)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Thanks so much. Trying to build on those unknowns. Sometimes we can get lost in the wilderness, when we go too far reaching out to help others. Blessings and best to you on your interesting plot of a novel.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Such a well written piece, Stan! There were a lot of good literary elements in play, and the suspense was palpable! At this point, I'm sure not wanting Taylor to get in the way, but I don't know how this isn't going to get dicey for Sam and Sarah.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Such a well written piece, Stan! There were a lot of good literary elements in play, and the suspense was palpable! At this point, I'm sure not wanting Taylor to get in the way, but I don't know how this isn't going to get dicey for Sam and Sarah.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks again Rhonda. Humbly grateful.
Comment from Mistydawn
The last part left me wondering if the baby is his, hmm. Your story is well, written, very interesting, drew me right in. Your characters seem real, relatable. Makes me sad seeing Sarah so upset. I hope she heals with time. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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The last part left me wondering if the baby is his, hmm. Your story is well, written, very interesting, drew me right in. Your characters seem real, relatable. Makes me sad seeing Sarah so upset. I hope she heals with time. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Thanks so much Misty. Not sure we've met before. I appreciate you taking a look with some real depth.
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I was on fan story a few years back.
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That name definitely rang in my head from years back. This was a good mind check for me. Blessings ahead.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and I am very much enjoying listening to the story when I see your name come up and I see the stories going on. I want to continue to read and hear the story that you have so cleverly created it. Patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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This is very well written, and I am very much enjoying listening to the story when I see your name come up and I see the stories going on. I want to continue to read and hear the story that you have so cleverly created it. Patricia.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Thanks so much Pat.
Comment from Jim Wile
I could really feel both Sam's and Sarah's discomfiture throughout this chapter, Stan. Both seem to be walking on tenterhooks. Sarah because she feels like such a failure in being able to provide children for the happy home she envisions, and Sam for the secret he holds about Taylor. He's unsure of just when he should tell Sarah about her and broach the subject of adoption. Then, when they finally relax on the sofa drinking tea in front of a fire, the phone call comes, and Sam has to play it cool.
I wonder what Sarah overheard. Will this lead to the scene where Sam finally relates the situation to Sarah? I'm anxious to find out. Very nicely written.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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I could really feel both Sam's and Sarah's discomfiture throughout this chapter, Stan. Both seem to be walking on tenterhooks. Sarah because she feels like such a failure in being able to provide children for the happy home she envisions, and Sam for the secret he holds about Taylor. He's unsure of just when he should tell Sarah about her and broach the subject of adoption. Then, when they finally relax on the sofa drinking tea in front of a fire, the phone call comes, and Sam has to play it cool.
I wonder what Sarah overheard. Will this lead to the scene where Sam finally relates the situation to Sarah? I'm anxious to find out. Very nicely written.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Wow Jim. I appreciate the depth and helpful feedback here. It means more anything. Let's me know you care.
Comment from royowen
Now that could be awkward if she'd, Taylor had made it public that she and Sa were an item, a good opportunity for Sam to allow God to be his defender, but what about Sarah? She may not understand. Well done Stan, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Now that could be awkward if she'd, Taylor had made it public that she and Sa were an item, a good opportunity for Sam to allow God to be his defender, but what about Sarah? She may not understand. Well done Stan, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Thanks Roy I appreciate you and how you've stuck with this.
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Well done
Comment from Lindsey Russell
This is such a great start to a story. I love your writing style and how you made a story centered around faith and family into a thriller. Great work! Good luck and thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025
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This is such a great start to a story. I love your writing style and how you made a story centered around faith and family into a thriller. Great work! Good luck and thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025
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Thanks again for this. It renewed my drive to finish this project.
Comment from Mrs Anna Howard
Whoa! Sam is in trouuuble! And that cliff hanger just want me to continue to the next chapter. Interesting story line with good pace. I am looking forward to reading more!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Whoa! Sam is in trouuuble! And that cliff hanger just want me to continue to the next chapter. Interesting story line with good pace. I am looking forward to reading more!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Appreciate so much what you said. I will make you my fan.
