The Christmas Baby
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "A Perfect Storm on Thanksgiving"Sam n Sarah get a baby with dire consequences
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your family story sounds innocent as you tall a tale everyday chord here, but there is an underlying theme of intrigue beneath the surface. A thriller indeed.
I think having designs on a pregnant girl's baby is a somewhat cruel way of thinking. A baby always belongs with its Mother and the trauma of giving up a child scars a woman for life and often the child feels betrayed as an adult too. There is some skulduggery going on here.
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Your family story sounds innocent as you tall a tale everyday chord here, but there is an underlying theme of intrigue beneath the surface. A thriller indeed.
I think having designs on a pregnant girl's baby is a somewhat cruel way of thinking. A baby always belongs with its Mother and the trauma of giving up a child scars a woman for life and often the child feels betrayed as an adult too. There is some skulduggery going on here.
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Thanks Dolly!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Sam seems to be walking on thin ice at times. But he honestly, sincerely seems to want to reconcile 100% with his wife after her miscarriage. Good lines here: "Please, Sarah. We will be a family. God has a plan. We just need to be together."
When in doubt, simple importuning from the heart works best.
Little fix: "Your foods getting cold again."
Just add apostrophe: "Your food's getting cold again."
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Sam seems to be walking on thin ice at times. But he honestly, sincerely seems to want to reconcile 100% with his wife after her miscarriage. Good lines here: "Please, Sarah. We will be a family. God has a plan. We just need to be together."
When in doubt, simple importuning from the heart works best.
Little fix: "Your foods getting cold again."
Just add apostrophe: "Your food's getting cold again."
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Thanks Crystie!
Comment from royowen
Poor Sam is between a rock and a hard place, looking after a drug induced teen aged girl that is addled by drugs, is not and easy gig, and chances are the baby will be likewise addicted to drugs, but the best thing is to give a child to people who want them. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : Your food(')s getting cold.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Poor Sam is between a rock and a hard place, looking after a drug induced teen aged girl that is addled by drugs, is not and easy gig, and chances are the baby will be likewise addicted to drugs, but the best thing is to give a child to people who want them. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : Your food(')s getting cold.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Thanks Roy!
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Welcome
Comment from Mistydawn
Your chapter is well-written very interesting. I could easily picture the scene in my mind. Loved the sarcastic humor about desert first, lol. That'd be something I'd say. I'd say he's treading on thin ice that's only going to get thinner if tells his wife about Taylor now. It'll be interesting to see what happens.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Your chapter is well-written very interesting. I could easily picture the scene in my mind. Loved the sarcastic humor about desert first, lol. That'd be something I'd say. I'd say he's treading on thin ice that's only going to get thinner if tells his wife about Taylor now. It'll be interesting to see what happens.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Thanks! I really appreciate your kind words and encouragement.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Stan.
Sam is grappling with intense emotional turmoil, uncertainty, and confusion. He's navigating the arrival of Taylor's baby, but his priority is his wife's happiness and reuniting their family. While he has family problems to deal with, his priority is supporting his grieving wife. Toward the end of the story, it became more positive between them. That should be his focus. Good narrative.
Robert
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Hello Stan.
Sam is grappling with intense emotional turmoil, uncertainty, and confusion. He's navigating the arrival of Taylor's baby, but his priority is his wife's happiness and reuniting their family. While he has family problems to deal with, his priority is supporting his grieving wife. Toward the end of the story, it became more positive between them. That should be his focus. Good narrative.
Robert
Comment Written 27-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Appreciate your in-depth focus on the plot. Thanks!
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You're welcome, Stan.
Comment from patcelaw
There's all sorts of emotions that are running through me at this time when I'm reading the story and I have kept up with it. I think through the whole thing and it's a wonderful story. It's a heartwarming and touching story but at the same times it is tugging at the heart. Patricia.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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There's all sorts of emotions that are running through me at this time when I'm reading the story and I have kept up with it. I think through the whole thing and it's a wonderful story. It's a heartwarming and touching story but at the same times it is tugging at the heart. Patricia.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Thanks Pat!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I would be afraid of getting Sarah's hopes up at this point. I think Sam needs to wait a bit before saying anything to Sarah. I really like this story.
he breathed a sigh, knowing his sister-in-law Kate would be there with her husband Jack (sister-in-law, & husband,)
He sat next to his wife until she stood. (He sat beside his wife)
he sat down & Rita said, as she sat down (you don't need 'down' it's understood and an extra word)
side next to her husband Jack. (husband,)
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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I would be afraid of getting Sarah's hopes up at this point. I think Sam needs to wait a bit before saying anything to Sarah. I really like this story.
he breathed a sigh, knowing his sister-in-law Kate would be there with her husband Jack (sister-in-law, & husband,)
He sat next to his wife until she stood. (He sat beside his wife)
he sat down & Rita said, as she sat down (you don't need 'down' it's understood and an extra word)
side next to her husband Jack. (husband,)
Comment Written 27-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Thanks so much Barbara
Comment from Jim Wile
Hello, Stan. This is the first chapter I've read of your story and was immediately intrigued by it. I went back and read some of your recaps, so I think I've got the gist of it.
You've done a good job showing Sam's great desire to have Sarah return home with him, but it will be interesting to see how she reacts to having a drug-addicted pregnant woman from the shelter living in her house, who her husband has been keeping there for a while. Quite a situation to come home to!
I loved this description of his MIL:
Rita answered the door wearing bloody red lipstick contrasted with her pasty appearance. Her sharp tongue seemed ready to strike like an adder.
Gives us a great thumbnail of her personality and relationship with Sam.
You've got me hooked, and I'm interested to keep reading. - Jim
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Hello, Stan. This is the first chapter I've read of your story and was immediately intrigued by it. I went back and read some of your recaps, so I think I've got the gist of it.
You've done a good job showing Sam's great desire to have Sarah return home with him, but it will be interesting to see how she reacts to having a drug-addicted pregnant woman from the shelter living in her house, who her husband has been keeping there for a while. Quite a situation to come home to!
I loved this description of his MIL:
Rita answered the door wearing bloody red lipstick contrasted with her pasty appearance. Her sharp tongue seemed ready to strike like an adder.
Gives us a great thumbnail of her personality and relationship with Sam.
You've got me hooked, and I'm interested to keep reading. - Jim
Comment Written 27-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Thanks so much Jim. This is encouraging. I love writing redemption stories and how far an ordinary man can go dangerously forward to try and fix lives. Appreciate it.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Yay!!! Another chapter. Sorry I'm out of sixes. This one truly deserves one.
I was so happy about the way things seemed to be going between Sam and Sarah. Finally, she's allowing his touch and talking about going home. Then... he has to think about the homeless girl and the baby. Not a good time, Sam. But, folks just don't listen, do they?
Glad to see your chapter!
Rhonda
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Yay!!! Another chapter. Sorry I'm out of sixes. This one truly deserves one.
I was so happy about the way things seemed to be going between Sam and Sarah. Finally, she's allowing his touch and talking about going home. Then... he has to think about the homeless girl and the baby. Not a good time, Sam. But, folks just don't listen, do they?
Glad to see your chapter!
Rhonda
Comment Written 27-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Thanks Rhonda!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really got pulled into your story right away! This was a strong chapter. Sam's emotions felt so real. I could feel his guilt and love for Sarah. The tension with his mother in law was was done. I loved the way you described her with bloody red lipstick and all! What a perfect ending. I'm hooked and need to know what happens next!
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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I really got pulled into your story right away! This was a strong chapter. Sam's emotions felt so real. I could feel his guilt and love for Sarah. The tension with his mother in law was was done. I loved the way you described her with bloody red lipstick and all! What a perfect ending. I'm hooked and need to know what happens next!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Thanks Michael! Your strong encouragement has made me get off my duff and get after it.
