Then and Now
Flamboyantly yours...9 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Lovely, enjoyable rhymes and a very pleasingly original style of different fonts reflecting those changes over the years! I like the way your ego got bigger and bigger, finally deflating at the end of the last stanza. Some well selected words, particularly the alliterative ones which provide a nice fluency. I've never heard of 'annoyant' but, yes, it exists. However your 'flambouant' doesn't - flambo(y)ant (which I know was just a slip of the finger). Altogether, with thoughtful visual, a great entry! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Lovely, enjoyable rhymes and a very pleasingly original style of different fonts reflecting those changes over the years! I like the way your ego got bigger and bigger, finally deflating at the end of the last stanza. Some well selected words, particularly the alliterative ones which provide a nice fluency. I've never heard of 'annoyant' but, yes, it exists. However your 'flambouant' doesn't - flambo(y)ant (which I know was just a slip of the finger). Altogether, with thoughtful visual, a great entry! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 08-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Finger slip bandaged
Thanks for the
Good eye
Comment from kahpot
Your first stanza/paragraph is very well described as a young fellow trying to grow up and impress, and then it sinks in-we need to be more, with an
ego, a punch, and a song we rise, and we fall, then finally we seek that we have discarded and took for granted, an excellent read, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2025
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Your first stanza/paragraph is very well described as a young fellow trying to grow up and impress, and then it sinks in-we need to be more, with an
ego, a punch, and a song we rise, and we fall, then finally we seek that we have discarded and took for granted, an excellent read, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 23-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2025
Nice to find an acorn now and then, especially since I was getting thin in wins (2) in three years. But that doesn't matter. I have fun duin wat i due n-ie-weigh. Thank you
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You had some very interesting points about the times of your life. You seemed to have no need for an ego prop in your first three lives, but your last one seems a wee bit more lonely. Best of luck changing your life for the fifth time. There are a lot of people here who enjoy making friends.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2025
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You had some very interesting points about the times of your life. You seemed to have no need for an ego prop in your first three lives, but your last one seems a wee bit more lonely. Best of luck changing your life for the fifth time. There are a lot of people here who enjoy making friends.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2025
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The last one indicated growth that even though the majority of my life the world revolved around me I found with age it was the other way around. Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Is this written through the eyes of a cat here? As cats always remain haughty and aloof, I can imagine them remaining proud in any situation, always in command and in control of their faculties. I enjoyed your unique post, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2025
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Is this written through the eyes of a cat here? As cats always remain haughty and aloof, I can imagine them remaining proud in any situation, always in command and in control of their faculties. I enjoyed your unique post, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 22-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2025
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No. It's biographical. Even though I was bullied. I survived and once I was discovered through a petty officer to play basketball my life grew experientially to be proud
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the who U Were and R Today contest. Well, you definitely have no lack of self and you have a good sense of humor to get you through anything bad. I would say you're doing ok. thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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An excellent entry for the who U Were and R Today contest. Well, you definitely have no lack of self and you have a good sense of humor to get you through anything bad. I would say you're doing ok. thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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The one thing I am sure of is that the sun and/or
I will rise tomorrow! 👍
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is such a fun read! I love how it starts with playful energy. And then shifts into a moment of realization. The wordplay is fantastic! The lines "annoyant flambouant" and "magnificently resplendent" roll off the tongue beautifully. The ending is excellent. Such a clever poem!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Your poem is such a fun read! I love how it starts with playful energy. And then shifts into a moment of realization. The wordplay is fantastic! The lines "annoyant flambouant" and "magnificently resplendent" roll off the tongue beautifully. The ending is excellent. Such a clever poem!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Thanks M.L. I am glad it was enjoyable
Comment from lyenochka
I like your brilliantly illustrated poem. Such an elegant cat! I also liked your use of the ever changing font with the changes in life's season. I find it humorous that between the last and penultimate stanzas, the quotes changed from Ali's "I am the greatest" to Hamlet's "Woe is me!"
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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I like your brilliantly illustrated poem. Such an elegant cat! I also liked your use of the ever changing font with the changes in life's season. I find it humorous that between the last and penultimate stanzas, the quotes changed from Ali's "I am the greatest" to Hamlet's "Woe is me!"
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Clevery sometimes outdoes grammatically incorrectly but I am in this for enjoyment, for both the author and reader.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A great job of telling your tale in poetry. I like the use of different fonts to represent the different stages of your life. Likening yourself, so to speak, to a cat, you gave us a portrait in words of what made you you.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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A great job of telling your tale in poetry. I like the use of different fonts to represent the different stages of your life. Likening yourself, so to speak, to a cat, you gave us a portrait in words of what made you you.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Well the cat was supposedly generic for any and all contestants.
Cats are pickled like dills and gerkins each having a distinct taste that some like and others don't. If I was to name me as a flavor I'd select a sweet and sour variety. Thank you.
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I like sweet and sour!!! I make those type of pickles all the time. Of course, I usually throw in some jalapenos to spice it up a bit.
Comment from RodG
The stuck-on-himself Speaker in this poem is someone I would not have enjoyed knowing. It's nice to see he went through a transformation, but I don't sympathize with him. I'd like your poem more if you had not employed AABB rhyming in such short lines.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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The stuck-on-himself Speaker in this poem is someone I would not have enjoyed knowing. It's nice to see he went through a transformation, but I don't sympathize with him. I'd like your poem more if you had not employed AABB rhyming in such short lines.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Thanks for the read. As for the rhyming concern, I follow the lead my mind decides to go. I am but an arrow in its quiver (shiver). It was a fun piece to dot some i's and cross my t's. Be well. I appreciate the visit.
