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Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Dark Noise"Biography/Supernatural
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
A residual tremble runs through my body in remembrance of what was... and what's yet to come.
You were brave when you were young,Lea and you still are to be writing your story for therapy for yourself and to help others. Such a road you've travelled.
Valda
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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A residual tremble runs through my body in remembrance of what was... and what's yet to come.
You were brave when you were young,Lea and you still are to be writing your story for therapy for yourself and to help others. Such a road you've travelled.
Valda
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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I'm glad thank you. I hope this helps someone maybe save a child's childhood. Thank you Valda for recognizing the road. Thanks again!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
It sounds like a nightmare, hearing people tramping through the woods invading "your" territory. With the coming of summer, I would think that more people would be taking to the woods. I imagine you must have thought of that. Did you want to stay in the area close to your friends or did you consider going deeper into the woods? Sounds like you're doing OK at this point, but who knows what else could happen. Interesting gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Hello Lea,
It sounds like a nightmare, hearing people tramping through the woods invading "your" territory. With the coming of summer, I would think that more people would be taking to the woods. I imagine you must have thought of that. Did you want to stay in the area close to your friends or did you consider going deeper into the woods? Sounds like you're doing OK at this point, but who knows what else could happen. Interesting gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 18-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Good morning again, hope you're having a good breakfast and the sun is shining where you are! Yes, summer months does bring the advent of more people. However, it did cross my mind. So this was the one reason that I was on the other side of the park instead of the side where there were people in camp fires and people Campi like a municipal park so I stayed opposite to that most of the people went to that area but the 1 like the walking stick lady well she had to be dealt with. thank you again. I would appreciate your review and lexing your name. Come up always understanding and passionate. I appreciate it how yourself a wonderful day!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Another heart-beating-in-my-throat kind of read, this one! The walking-stick woman seems tenacious about finding you...but she doesn't have your level of motivation to not be found.
Were you able to keep track of the date? (I mean, I have every means of that available to me, and yet I struggle daily... What must it have been like for you in the forest?! Or maybe, it was of no consequence to you, since you had SERIOUS things to concern yourself with --survival, food, shelter...those kinds of incidentals...)
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
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Another heart-beating-in-my-throat kind of read, this one! The walking-stick woman seems tenacious about finding you...but she doesn't have your level of motivation to not be found.
Were you able to keep track of the date? (I mean, I have every means of that available to me, and yet I struggle daily... What must it have been like for you in the forest?! Or maybe, it was of no consequence to you, since you had SERIOUS things to concern yourself with --survival, food, shelter...those kinds of incidentals...)
Comment Written 18-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
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Hi! My friends were coming every Saturday and from that day, I would count to 7 and begin again. Not a perfect system but it kept me close enough.
Thank you, thank you again for reviewing and offering your comments. I pay attention to everything you said. I'm trying to answer whatever questions need. Answering at this point? What does an interesting balance? I must much deeper than this. You and I both know. And we will get to that place but the timing has to be right. So thank you again, I so appreciate you. I hope you're feeling good and I hope you have an awesome sleep tonight if I don't talk to you that is.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a captivating story full of mystery and suspense. You have a few sentences that need editing, and a few small words omitted, but you KNOW how to tell an imaginative story. You know how to pace the story and make it flow. You include story and reflection, and always end with a cliffhanger that keeps the reader engaged. I'm moving on to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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This is a captivating story full of mystery and suspense. You have a few sentences that need editing, and a few small words omitted, but you KNOW how to tell an imaginative story. You know how to pace the story and make it flow. You include story and reflection, and always end with a cliffhanger that keeps the reader engaged. I'm moving on to the next chapter.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Thank you yes, i did around and we'll be reading to a couple of edits. I imagine there is to be tweaked once I finished writing the book. I think they call it rewbites. But as I say, I don't know a lot about it. But it is just good to read it and have this support from you and others, thank you again!
Comment from Jim Wile
This is such a sad couple of sentences, Lea: "Angry for crying, feeling tired and weak. It's because it's not what I've come to expect from myself." If anyone deserves to feel sad, tired, and weak--it's you. You put a lot of pressure on yourself, but perhaps that's what enabled you to do what you were doing and to survive for as long as you have.
I decided to take control back. I will be the stalker instead of the stalker. (Do you mean "stalked" for the second "stalker?") What an attitude--good for you! That's what survivors do. - Jim
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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This is such a sad couple of sentences, Lea: "Angry for crying, feeling tired and weak. It's because it's not what I've come to expect from myself." If anyone deserves to feel sad, tired, and weak--it's you. You put a lot of pressure on yourself, but perhaps that's what enabled you to do what you were doing and to survive for as long as you have.
I decided to take control back. I will be the stalker instead of the stalker. (Do you mean "stalked" for the second "stalker?") What an attitude--good for you! That's what survivors do. - Jim
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Thank you again, Jim. I went ahead and made that change as well. You have an Eagle Eye that I so appreciate excellent!
I was 8 months out of army boot camp for younger folks. Army cadets in this cace. Please tell me a lot about survival skills, map, and compass. Of course, how to use a firearm and self-defense? But tell me about survival using the resources around me using what I had on me in a genius. Different ways they taught me how to think out of the box. It interested me so I did. To this day I carry what's called a PAL license. I am authorized to carry, use and assist hunters and/or gun enthusiasts. I learned to survive outside during and after I learned how to survive inside. I never thought it that way but today I do. Again thank you so much a small little joke for you.
What did one ocean say to the other? Nothing they just waved. Lolololol
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Boo! Dad joke.
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Lol....it can get a lot worse
Comment from BethShelby
They didn't find you yet but this doesn't mean they want come looking again. I'm wondering how you'll go about finding out about this lady. How long have you been at this site at this point? You certainly seem to know a lot about surviving in the wild. Are there any dangerous animal you have to worry about?
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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They didn't find you yet but this doesn't mean they want come looking again. I'm wondering how you'll go about finding out about this lady. How long have you been at this site at this point? You certainly seem to know a lot about surviving in the wild. Are there any dangerous animal you have to worry about?
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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The most dangerous animal that I would encounter in that particular forest would be whiskey Jack if I put a piece of bread on my head they will land on it and eat it. That is the extent other than a few chipmunks and some rodents at about it. The park forest was too close to town for some animals. I'm about halfway through my stay there but there's so much to impart. What led me to leave and where? I ended up when I had to learned a lot. When I was in army cadets about never getting lost. Using the elements around you to survive. And using what you had on you to create shi. Teach you about map and compass. How to tell which direction you're in? If you have nothing all kinds of survival, things that really was useful to me. It was very fresh in my mind too. As I wasn't long. Maybe 8 months after I got out of army boot camp. I still much of that knowledge in my head.
The other thing was on the other side of the park. Whenever it's camping, I'm parties. Bonfire party did not go to the other side. So what's that wasn't up? Thank you again so much for your interest. And so happy to have you here with me. I thank you again for your review and your thoughtful comments. Enjoy your evening!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another great chapter providing real tension to your story. You're in a different mode here. It's as if your success so far and the excitement that accompanied it is fading and being replaced by apprehension that it could all be so easily lost. Your practical knowledge is proving its worth and fueling your confidence to some extent but there's more needing to be done to ensure your safety. There are some minor edits: "I tried to see (if) something (this sentence doesn't make sense with 'if' left; "this I choose (not to do) would sound better (split infinitives are not actually grammatically correct and it's awkward here). But, wow, you lure the reader so effectively into your world! Well done, Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Another great chapter providing real tension to your story. You're in a different mode here. It's as if your success so far and the excitement that accompanied it is fading and being replaced by apprehension that it could all be so easily lost. Your practical knowledge is proving its worth and fueling your confidence to some extent but there's more needing to be done to ensure your safety. There are some minor edits: "I tried to see (if) something (this sentence doesn't make sense with 'if' left; "this I choose (not to do) would sound better (split infinitives are not actually grammatically correct and it's awkward here). But, wow, you lure the reader so effectively into your world! Well done, Debbie
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Debbie, thank you so much for spotting those you're so good at that it's very helpful, too, These things that you find are valuable to me have no doubt correction along the way. So let's have to do later so thank you. I appreciate your reviews more than I can. I'm so glad you're reading along with me. I know I might be repeating myself like a broken record. Thank you again for an awesome review. I went ahead and made the corrections. Haven't great evening and thanks again!
Comment from JSD
Joining you, happily, on your journey, my dear Lea. And praying for you as you travel. Such resourcefulness and wonderful survival instincts. Brilliant writing. Well done, again. x
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Joining you, happily, on your journey, my dear Lea. And praying for you as you travel. Such resourcefulness and wonderful survival instincts. Brilliant writing. Well done, again. x
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Thank you, you're kind words always lift me up. I learned much when I was in the army to get and much about survival at home. It was do-or-die, really, however.
I'm grateful for your support and others. I respect all that you say and your opinion matters to me. Thank you again for the most awesome review!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
How terrifying this must have been. At least you are vigilant and alert, but you are right to be fearful, a young girl living in the forest lives on her wits.
one small edit for you:
(. . . easily done (something) terrible to me and . . .)
A fine continuing trues story Lea, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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How terrifying this must have been. At least you are vigilant and alert, but you are right to be fearful, a young girl living in the forest lives on her wits.
one small edit for you:
(. . . easily done (something) terrible to me and . . .)
A fine continuing trues story Lea, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Thank you again this is amazing I appreciate it so much!
