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Comment from CrystieCookie999
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This chapter emphasizes how much like slavery this time of your life was. I thought "Thunder moved across his brow" was an especially descriptive line. The other revealing description includes "blackness in his eyes." I have often thought that people who abuse children must have very nearly the darkest eyes of all, depending on which kind of abuse it includes. It doesn't have anything to do with eye color, but their souls are under an extremely evil influence. To make a choice to go and live away from people in general must have been difficult as a survival choice.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
    You're absolutely right about that thank you so much for seeing that! Those kinds of things are important 41 who has not been believed Thank you for that great gift!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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How sad, but not surprising, that a dark forest was more inviting to 14 year old Lea than returning home. A weary brain and falling tears is not bad after writes like this. Well done Lea.
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
    Thank you for your encouragement and for your fine rating and great review. You're right about anything truly even when you don't know you're right, you're right, LOL if that makes sense. I'm truly honored by your fine rating thank you again have an awesome evening!
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Sadly, there are many who can feel your pain during those awful times. I left home for good at fifteen and never looked back, and many times I wondered which conditions were the worst. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
    Well, I think I have a kindred spirit here. You know the pain and the loss and the fear when you leave home, it's such a young age and the scars you take them with you.
    Thank you for reading Ric and hanging in there. I know it's a tough read but one that needs to be told and glad you're coming along for the ride. And that I am not alone. Thank you again I hope you have the best evening!
reply by Ric Myworld on 12-Oct-2023
    I just thank you for being so brave and sharing things that need to come out. Things that can help yourself and others needing to break out of their shells. Have a wonderful rest of your week!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
    You too Ric!
Comment from damommy
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I'm so sorry that was your life. No one deserves that. How old were you? I'm guessing older teenager. What did you do after that six months? I guess that will be told in future posts.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    Yes, there is much happening after I left the Bush. Thank you again so much for reviewing and reading and commenting your compassion and insight. I too appreciate that thank you again. I hope you have a great evening!
Comment from Jim Wile
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It sounds like you made the right decision at just the right time, Lea. How awful to put you in the position of staying and fearing for your very life or leaving to venture out on your own and attempt to survive as a runaway--by yourself in a tent in the woods--at such a young age. You had a lot of courage to do that.

This was so riveting, and I loved the way you repeated, "not a bad thing" several times at the end. This was a deeply moving chapter. - Jim

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    Thank you, Jim, that's a very fine review really, I very much appreciate it. It's so insightful it's like wow, I was suffering from I call terminal uniqueness for a while. It's the idea that nothing and no one could understand but that's not true. Thank you again mark to follow i'm happy to have you alone thank you!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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I think it would help arrange these "quilt squares" of your story for me if you could present your age, maybe at the beginning of each one? I make this request because one of yesterday's offerings I read was you at age five, so that makes this part especially difficult. I know you're not that kind of little, since funded your escape with babysitting money. But I don't know if you're in middle school, high school, etc.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    I'm going to do that for sure, thank you so much!
    I've gone ahead and disabled those future chapters. I'll bring them back in when at the right time. And I will go for there so far. I'm up to almost 15 years old. But I will have to make that change. Thanks for the awesome suggestion! Thank you for reviewing and reading and coming along on this journey with me. It's nice to not be alone. Thank you for that, it is a great gift! You are a gift!
Comment from BethShelby
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Did your family never look for you when you were away from home? I can't imagine that at least your mother wouldn't be concerned for your safety and what about your sisters/ How old were you when you lived in a pup tent? What was the weather like? Were you frightened? Was anyone aware you were liveing like that? There are so many questions.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    My family went through every effort to hide. Everything that went on in my home. So now she would not call the police and in my mind. At the time I was trapped nobody to help. Because that had been my experience up to that date. No one knew I was in the forest. They only knew that I was gone and there wasn't a single finger lifted just because of it.
    It was at times ot was difficult to believe I was someone who could be cared for but that is the damage they do to your psyche. I appreciate you reading your review your support and your compassion very much. Very much, needed, thank you! More to follow!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Another excellently and vividly expressed chapter, Lea! Your style is now so concise and punchy. Those short sentences powerfully convey your anger and drive and the urgent need to escape anywhere so that you could breathe again. I love that description of the mountains fidgeting and bouncing and the green arms of the forest. Sublime imagery, Lea! All of it engrossing your reader and pouring from your soul in what appears to be now an effortless, fluent stream of escaping emotion. Well done and a virtual six from me! Debbie

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    Once again, you honor me with your fine review, Debbie. You, Rachelle and others really have amazed me the last few days and renewed my Faith in the human spirit for which I thank you very much! I really hope this helps someone I really do. It would make all that I have lived through minor in comparison to the joy I would feel if that were to happen. Thank you so much again!
Comment from JSD
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An amazing thing to do but so necessary and your strength is so clear here. Well done you! One can only believe that out of all this horror came such a strong human being, and hopefully one with the knowledge that kindness and love are the only things to have in relationships. x

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 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    It is the only thing you take with you when you leave is your love. Everything else stays and becomes nothing once we cross over. Thank you again for reading and thank you again for your kind comments, your wisdom and your support. I shall see you out there my friend. Thank you again!
Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Lea,
there are so many things that could have gone wrong for you in the woods, or even getting caught for shoplifting. I suppose that would all pale in comparison. I lived in a cult- like situation myself for a number of years when I moved to Alaska. At one point I was so angry at one of the elders, the people who made the rules, I was going to kill myself. Then I thought about killing the elder that pissed me off. I gave it some thought and realized that trying to live in the elements would be almost impossible with my limited resources and lack of knowledge. Eventually I left that place, but it scared me that I could have been pushed to the point of murder. I'm glad you never went overboard, although how you kept from it I'll never know. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

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 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    Thank you so much, Tom. Oh, my Lord, I'm so sorry all that happened to you, you are survivor too definitely! I am glad you are still here. Otherwise, how are we supposed to have a conversation? A skull would have a tough time forming words without lips. Bad joke I know.. Thank you so much again for reviewing and offering your thoughts. But nothing ever remains the same. It's inevitable. My next journey will bring me back too a roof over my head. Thank you again for reviewing and commenting. Always insightful comments are nice and refreshing way to go thank you haven't awesome Evening!
reply by T B Botts on 11-Oct-2023
    I think that more than once I had to remind myself that nothing lasts forever- whether good or bad.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    Yes, it's too easy to fall into the trap Of sameness can get too comfortable and then reality comes along and boof!