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Our Town

In a matter of a few years, big changes in our village..

3 total reviews 
Comment from Michaela Moore
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I often cringe when poems rhyme (comes from being an English teacher of high school students, I suppose). But your rhyming actually gives your word choice even more heightened perfection. And I love when authors can use allusions in extraordinary ways to bring forth deeper meanings. You have the gift of knowing how to construct great metaphors, similes, and allusions and you also seem to be able to juxtapose them in contradictions that bring your poem to an even more genius level. Write on, good Sir, write on!

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
    Thank you so much for your encouraging response. Means even more from an English teacher. Thank you for your service.
Comment from Fleedleflump
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lol, this is a comprehensive indictment of the oppressive urban landscapes that seem to be spreading ever further. I love the line about filing cabinets piercing the sky - that about sums it up and also speaks beyond the initial scope of the words.

Excellent piece :-)

Mike

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
    Thanks for taking the time to read and for the encouraging response. Much appreciated.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
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Wow! this is a good poem to me. It has a clear message that you present in a logical order. You use several poetic devices effectively~ metaphor/ personification. The only thing I noticed that I am sure you have changed is using the same end rhyme words back-to-back in a poem~sky and hour. Basically, this is a good older writing.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
    You are spot on. When I re-read it, I thought the same thing. But I could not change because of the challenge. Thanks for taking the time to read and respond.
reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 13-Jul-2022
    I know, but it is still good.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
    Thank you, again.
reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 13-Jul-2022
    Of course.