Comment from rhonnie69

Exceptional

Ciao, poet: Your 1-6-1- poem on tasty fun in the sun reminds me of my childhood happy playground days. In my neighborhood we had an ice cream man, who we called "Mr. Softee." On nice days he was cruising around town in his ice cream truck...to the tingle-jingle of his theme song. We could hear his jingle from blocks away, because we were all waiting and anticipating for him to show through. If you had broke your piggy bank...you were broke too. So you had to, "sponge," off your friends and pay 'em back tomorrow. I lost more friends that way. But we were all friends again the next day. Again...I thank you for inviting me to your ice cream party. You are appreciated. God bless you, my friend. Cordially: rhonnie69.

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2021

Comment from Carlos' girl

Excellent

I scream you scream we all scream for ice cream? Nice illustration presentation what else rhymes with ice cream? If you want a near rhyme you could get really originally take a shot like Kareem?

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021

I like you feedback .. I would like to put Kareem ( lovely name ) in place of kid ..if that?s okay with you?

reply by Carlos' girl on 05-Oct-2021

I am honored! It gives your writing an air of mystery with the new title...so poetic how you used the name . great job

reply by Carlos' girl on 05-Oct-2021

I upgraded you to five stars... For a great edit

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021

Thanks Carlo?s Girl I just notice you upgraded my entry.. there was no need

I really appreciate the help you gave me..

Keep safe!

reply by Carlos' girl on 05-Oct-2021

No problema

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021

Sei spagnola?

reply by Carlos' girl on 05-Oct-2021

I do

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This Rhyme That 1-6-1 writing prompt entry speaks good imagery of ice cream and the yummy ice cream screams in rhymes; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021