A true story about messed up dreams
I need so many things;66 total reviews
Comment from QC Poet
The hole in one's soul gets bigger and requires love not things to feel Continent and Happiness. Thank you for sharing this poem and Good Bless you Good Luck in the contest.
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The hole in one's soul gets bigger and requires love not things to feel Continent and Happiness. Thank you for sharing this poem and Good Bless you Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Nice! I liked having a ring-side seat to this spiritual evolution. You chose your words and rhymes well and kept the cadence flowing. As a bonus, the picture was just right! Good luck in the contest!
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Nice! I liked having a ring-side seat to this spiritual evolution. You chose your words and rhymes well and kept the cadence flowing. As a bonus, the picture was just right! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Miss Sherry
Very intriguing poem. We often think we need stuff, material possessions, true - but what we really need is a life with meaning. Your poems ends on that very positive note. Peace and walking with Higher Power can be very fulfilling. You have a done a fine job here. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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Very intriguing poem. We often think we need stuff, material possessions, true - but what we really need is a life with meaning. Your poems ends on that very positive note. Peace and walking with Higher Power can be very fulfilling. You have a done a fine job here. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from victor 66
Good story in a poem. But I doubt if many shallow people rich or not change their needs that often. I'd like to be wrong, I just haven't seen it. The few rich people I've met, I've met through my wife. They are distant relatives of hers and what I've learned; it's like visiting the elephants at a zoo, they're fun to look at, but I wouldn't want to be one of them. Best wishes.
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Good story in a poem. But I doubt if many shallow people rich or not change their needs that often. I'd like to be wrong, I just haven't seen it. The few rich people I've met, I've met through my wife. They are distant relatives of hers and what I've learned; it's like visiting the elephants at a zoo, they're fun to look at, but I wouldn't want to be one of them. Best wishes.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Ross E Silke
Hi, I like your poem here; I like the colours you've chosen, the picture you've selected matches the colour scheme below. Is that a picture of yourself? If so, it's well taken; good pic! Each line seems to fit well together and your ideas come across sound. You illuminate your heart and soul in this piece in all humility and honesty to the reader. A blank face on each person's stare as you try to know the true person behind each 'mask' really is a daunting task indeed. Am I getting the meaning behind it right? Best,
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Hi, I like your poem here; I like the colours you've chosen, the picture you've selected matches the colour scheme below. Is that a picture of yourself? If so, it's well taken; good pic! Each line seems to fit well together and your ideas come across sound. You illuminate your heart and soul in this piece in all humility and honesty to the reader. A blank face on each person's stare as you try to know the true person behind each 'mask' really is a daunting task indeed. Am I getting the meaning behind it right? Best,
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a beautiful poem you have crafted for the Story/Poem contest. I enjoyed reading as she circled through the different things and found that happiness cannot be bought. Well done.
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This is a beautiful poem you have crafted for the Story/Poem contest. I enjoyed reading as she circled through the different things and found that happiness cannot be bought. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Mystery Author,
Very nicely done. A nice look into the superficial gross consumerism that has been rampant for so long.
Your verse flows well and I believe you have a strong contender here for the contest.
Best of luck in the voting and thanks for sharing,
Jan
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Hi Mystery Author,
Very nicely done. A nice look into the superficial gross consumerism that has been rampant for so long.
Your verse flows well and I believe you have a strong contender here for the contest.
Best of luck in the voting and thanks for sharing,
Jan
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is how it is today, we yearn for possessions and fill up our homes with gadgets and the latest TV, phones, computers! Diamond rings, designer clothes and flashy cars! None of it matters a jot with people! I wish you luck with the contest, I enjoyed the sentiments here, love Dolly x
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This is how it is today, we yearn for possessions and fill up our homes with gadgets and the latest TV, phones, computers! Diamond rings, designer clothes and flashy cars! None of it matters a jot with people! I wish you luck with the contest, I enjoyed the sentiments here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Dawn Munro
What an incredibly novel story-poem. Very nicely done, with a beautiful moral. Yes, men and women throughout the ages have chased empty hope in material things to finally realize (if they're very lucky) that it's love that satisfies.
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What an incredibly novel story-poem. Very nicely done, with a beautiful moral. Yes, men and women throughout the ages have chased empty hope in material things to finally realize (if they're very lucky) that it's love that satisfies.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from meeshu
I give this five stars because the message is a good one and the language is fine. a couple reservations I have: it is not terribly smooth or rhythmic and I don't really buy the actors transformation. but that may be my bias. I do like concept of the shallow finding the way. good luck in the contest, I wish you well..
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I give this five stars because the message is a good one and the language is fine. a couple reservations I have: it is not terribly smooth or rhythmic and I don't really buy the actors transformation. but that may be my bias. I do like concept of the shallow finding the way. good luck in the contest, I wish you well..
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
