Polar Opposite
A short and shocking revelation about Xmas16 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
First of all, congratulations on your first milestone post. This is an excellent entry for the Newbie Flash Fiction Contest. Great surprise/twist ending as expected in a flash piece. Lastly, it's nice to meet another horror writer and I would like to invite you to join my club on this site called the Little Workshop of Horrors. We do prose and poetry writing prompts once a week and there is no requirement to participate. Just write when you feel the spirit (or spirits) move you. Good luck in the contest for this little treasure.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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First of all, congratulations on your first milestone post. This is an excellent entry for the Newbie Flash Fiction Contest. Great surprise/twist ending as expected in a flash piece. Lastly, it's nice to meet another horror writer and I would like to invite you to join my club on this site called the Little Workshop of Horrors. We do prose and poetry writing prompts once a week and there is no requirement to participate. Just write when you feel the spirit (or spirits) move you. Good luck in the contest for this little treasure.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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That sounds great! I'll join now!
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awesome!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Such a twist on this story 'Polar Express'. I just watched a movie, 'Polar Opposites' and it was nothing like this contest entry either. This is very creative. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Such a twist on this story 'Polar Express'. I just watched a movie, 'Polar Opposites' and it was nothing like this contest entry either. This is very creative. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much!
Comment from pome lover
well, you left this reader rather horrified.That is quite a novel approach to dear old St Nick. As to the emotional ride - mostly wordless, well, maybe not wordless, more astonished.
So, looks like you're saying Santa's jolly little elves were originally bad little kids. could we put politicians on the train???
Very original. Welcome to FS.
Katharine
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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well, you left this reader rather horrified.That is quite a novel approach to dear old St Nick. As to the emotional ride - mostly wordless, well, maybe not wordless, more astonished.
So, looks like you're saying Santa's jolly little elves were originally bad little kids. could we put politicians on the train???
Very original. Welcome to FS.
Katharine
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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"could we put politicians on the train???" LOL I wish!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
So creative! I really enjoyed the twist you brought to this classic tale! The sense of wonder at the beginning quickly gives way to a chilling atmosphere. Your description of the process - Jacob's cries drowned by jingling bells - is haunting.
Great work!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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So creative! I really enjoyed the twist you brought to this classic tale! The sense of wonder at the beginning quickly gives way to a chilling atmosphere. Your description of the process - Jacob's cries drowned by jingling bells - is haunting.
Great work!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much!
Comment from lancellot
So, Santa turned the bad children into toys or perhaps dolls or action figures. I'm not sure, but that's what I got from the final words.
It is a good entry, and you do have flash ending with Santa doing the unexpected.
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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So, Santa turned the bad children into toys or perhaps dolls or action figures. I'm not sure, but that's what I got from the final words.
It is a good entry, and you do have flash ending with Santa doing the unexpected.
Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thank you!!!
Comment from Miranda Langston
Not gonna lie... this is honestly the best story I've read so far this year. I love the dark twist on a Christmas classic. This is extremely creative and I love how you were able to stick to such a strict word count. Keep up the amazing work! I look forward to reading more from you
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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Not gonna lie... this is honestly the best story I've read so far this year. I love the dark twist on a Christmas classic. This is extremely creative and I love how you were able to stick to such a strict word count. Keep up the amazing work! I look forward to reading more from you
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much! <3 that means the world to me.
