A true story about messed up dreams
I need so many things;66 total reviews
Comment from Lulube
A life's journey through wanting it all. time goes by and we age and find, for the most of us, that all is never going to be filled but you can still be happy. whether or not you are spiritual it is through you to make your own happiness.
lulube
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A life's journey through wanting it all. time goes by and we age and find, for the most of us, that all is never going to be filled but you can still be happy. whether or not you are spiritual it is through you to make your own happiness.
lulube
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
Comment from lyenochka
Wonderful message! It's not the physical or material blessings that can bring true and lasting joy - not even "bought" friendship but the personal walk with God that enables us to "bathe in light" and experience true peace.
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Wonderful message! It's not the physical or material blessings that can bring true and lasting joy - not even "bought" friendship but the personal walk with God that enables us to "bathe in light" and experience true peace.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
Comment from Mame
So perfect with skilfully constructed verse. These sentiments resonate with my own skewed yearnings. Is the picture one you took yoursel? The colours also fit the display. Well done!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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So perfect with skilfully constructed verse. These sentiments resonate with my own skewed yearnings. Is the picture one you took yoursel? The colours also fit the display. Well done!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Hey Mama.... so sorry for this late review... I am so grateful, humbled and honored by your stellar/plus-one review... speechless really... yours, diana
Comment from CathyM
We all look for happiness in different ways until we find what truly makes us happy. Your poem shows that with a stark reality feel to it. I like this poem for the fact the person in it has found what makes them happy in the end.
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We all look for happiness in different ways until we find what truly makes us happy. Your poem shows that with a stark reality feel to it. I like this poem for the fact the person in it has found what makes them happy in the end.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from LIJ Red
I am not sure I understand the prompt, so I'll not try to wear the judge's shoes.
A monorhyme sestet between six quatrains(and dreams with two esses) that seems to say possessions and parties left you flat...some try children and God and power for the ultimate good...excellent poem...
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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I am not sure I understand the prompt, so I'll not try to wear the judge's shoes.
A monorhyme sestet between six quatrains(and dreams with two esses) that seems to say possessions and parties left you flat...some try children and God and power for the ultimate good...excellent poem...
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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I love words we read and ingests and spill out words on a page... a completely accurate assessment of my material world poem... thanks so much LIJ Red... grateful and humbled by your meteor shower...
Comment from kiwijenny
Yes things cannot bring you happiness..
The answer isn't the tile on my floor.
It's the love and life I welcome to my door...yes things are empty and addicting..love lasts for ever
God bless
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Yes things cannot bring you happiness..
The answer isn't the tile on my floor.
It's the love and life I welcome to my door...yes things are empty and addicting..love lasts for ever
God bless
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from patcelaw
There are no longer a lot of things I need, Those things you can buy really have not much meaning to me. What I need is love, peace, friendship and understanding. May your week be blessed. Patricia
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There are no longer a lot of things I need, Those things you can buy really have not much meaning to me. What I need is love, peace, friendship and understanding. May your week be blessed. Patricia
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from Paula Marie
Wonderful poem and message about how people think things will make them happy. But its not about the things its about people loving each other. That is truly what we long for and what makes us happy. Money can't buy us love.
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Wonderful poem and message about how people think things will make them happy. But its not about the things its about people loving each other. That is truly what we long for and what makes us happy. Money can't buy us love.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from royowen
When I first became a Christian, I hopefully said goodbye to all the pretence, the trying to live up to someone else's expectations not my own, and discovered a completely different world. Beautifully written in varying meter and strategic rhyme. Articulate and discerning, expressive and well headlined with single lines between stanzas, well done, excellent job and entry, blessjngs, Roy
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When I first became a Christian, I hopefully said goodbye to all the pretence, the trying to live up to someone else's expectations not my own, and discovered a completely different world. Beautifully written in varying meter and strategic rhyme. Articulate and discerning, expressive and well headlined with single lines between stanzas, well done, excellent job and entry, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from Janet Foor
I Need So Many Things is an interesting and thought provoking story in a poem.
Great picture and presentation.
One little nit in this line "God, please, help me towalk away." towalk should be two separate words.
Well done and good luck.
Janet
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I Need So Many Things is an interesting and thought provoking story in a poem.
Great picture and presentation.
One little nit in this line "God, please, help me towalk away." towalk should be two separate words.
Well done and good luck.
Janet
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
