Willing Hearts
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Comment from royowen
When Sami arose she noticed that Sarah had been sleeping on the couch and Bob and her bedroom door was closed, something wasn't quite right! Noah chuckled and thought it amusing. Noah goes for a run with Sarah. Noah is under the impression that Sami has him wrapped around her her finger, girls definitely have that ability, well done Barbara, good writing, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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When Sami arose she noticed that Sarah had been sleeping on the couch and Bob and her bedroom door was closed, something wasn't quite right! Noah chuckled and thought it amusing. Noah goes for a run with Sarah. Noah is under the impression that Sami has him wrapped around her her finger, girls definitely have that ability, well done Barbara, good writing, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Noah is correct about Sami being wrapped around his little finger. Now what's he going to do about it? Thank you for the kind review.
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Comment from Sankey
Another great chapter. I saw a funny word in there but I should have written it down. Not an error. Keep this going. You are doing so well. Not a spag anywhere.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Another great chapter. I saw a funny word in there but I should have written it down. Not an error. Keep this going. You are doing so well. Not a spag anywhere.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jim vecchio
Noah and Sami's relationship is getting more and more interesting. Do I sense that a little green monster may be running in Noah's mind? Sorry, today was a rough day. By the time i got to this, I had no more sixes. There was so much great writing today.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Noah and Sami's relationship is getting more and more interesting. Do I sense that a little green monster may be running in Noah's mind? Sorry, today was a rough day. By the time i got to this, I had no more sixes. There was so much great writing today.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Do worry about the six. I'm not. We never get enough.
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I should s Tom for a whole bunch of "Barbara" sixes for the week.
Comment from nomi338
This should prove to be very, very interesting. It appears that once again Sami has been underestimated. I think this plan should prove to be just what the team needs. I look forward to a successful operation.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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This should prove to be very, very interesting. It appears that once again Sami has been underestimated. I think this plan should prove to be just what the team needs. I look forward to a successful operation.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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It is what the team needs but may cause problems with Noah's emotions. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed this chapter. Sami sees to know she has an advantage and doesn't let the Noah get away with telling her what to do. When the group learned who she knew and how much time she has spent with I think he might have indicated a bit of jealously there.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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I enjoyed this chapter. Sami sees to know she has an advantage and doesn't let the Noah get away with telling her what to do. When the group learned who she knew and how much time she has spent with I think he might have indicated a bit of jealously there.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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I feel he did as much as he could at the time. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nice chapter, Barb. Quite a bit going on to hold the reader's interest. You should make a change with the "five kilometer marathon". A five kilometer race is a little over three miles. A marathon is a little over twenty-six miles.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Very nice chapter, Barb. Quite a bit going on to hold the reader's interest. You should make a change with the "five kilometer marathon". A five kilometer race is a little over three miles. A marathon is a little over twenty-six miles.
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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True, I messed up and got careless. I'm glad you caught it. I have corrected it. I always appreciate help.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Barbara
I'm excited to read your next chapter in this Noah/Sami saga. I'm trying to figure out who the traitor(s) are going to be. I can't wait
I'm surprised that Noah let Sami Do so many things that could endanger her life. Somebody else could hosef down the dog. And she should not have been allowed to go running. There are such things as high-powered rifles where the shooter could be hundreds of yards away.
Here maybe released 'a' deep breath?
"Outside, he released deep breath. "
Here maybe the possessive. 'Noah's'
" Noah eyes met hers then"
Here, it is a bit awkward. There are four people looking at the computer screen. But only three people were mentioned: Sami, Sarah and Bob and they weren't on the computer. They were in Sarah and Bob's bedroom.
" After breakfast, Sami spent a few hours in her room before she stood in the doorway of Bob and Sarah's bedroom. The four of them studied the computer screen."
Maybe this is a duplicate if so, I'm sorry. But I think I remember one example from earlier and now this example.
Here it should be possessive "Noah's eyes'
" Noah eyes met hers then went back to the screen. "
Here
I think 'not the same as 'for' the boys
" it was nothing like boys."
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Hi, Barbara
I'm excited to read your next chapter in this Noah/Sami saga. I'm trying to figure out who the traitor(s) are going to be. I can't wait
I'm surprised that Noah let Sami Do so many things that could endanger her life. Somebody else could hosef down the dog. And she should not have been allowed to go running. There are such things as high-powered rifles where the shooter could be hundreds of yards away.
Here maybe released 'a' deep breath?
"Outside, he released deep breath. "
Here maybe the possessive. 'Noah's'
" Noah eyes met hers then"
Here, it is a bit awkward. There are four people looking at the computer screen. But only three people were mentioned: Sami, Sarah and Bob and they weren't on the computer. They were in Sarah and Bob's bedroom.
" After breakfast, Sami spent a few hours in her room before she stood in the doorway of Bob and Sarah's bedroom. The four of them studied the computer screen."
Maybe this is a duplicate if so, I'm sorry. But I think I remember one example from earlier and now this example.
Here it should be possessive "Noah's eyes'
" Noah eyes met hers then went back to the screen. "
Here
I think 'not the same as 'for' the boys
" it was nothing like boys."
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the catches. I have made the corrections. I appreciate the help. I have a bad habit of leaving out the little words and when I edit, I read as if the words are there.
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I know. I do the same thing.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, it's a great chapter and I really enjoy reading this story. Every time gets tok ow a little bit more and getting more cautious. But he can't hide his feelings. Looking forward to what's next. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Hi Barbara, it's a great chapter and I really enjoy reading this story. Every time gets tok ow a little bit more and getting more cautious. But he can't hide his feelings. Looking forward to what's next. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
Do I sense a bit of the "green eye monster" hiding inside Noah? Everytime someone gets close to Sami or he learns something from her past he seems to start wondering about things. Excellent chapter!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Do I sense a bit of the "green eye monster" hiding inside Noah? Everytime someone gets close to Sami or he learns something from her past he seems to start wondering about things. Excellent chapter!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Ah, I so enjoyed the boss, Calvin, getting taught a valuable lesson to never underestimate a person's abilities based on appearance. Seems he had Sami pegged for a damsel in distress. Noah is starting to relax around the whole group as his feelings for Sami grow. Enjoyed this chapter immensely. Gretchen
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Ah, I so enjoyed the boss, Calvin, getting taught a valuable lesson to never underestimate a person's abilities based on appearance. Seems he had Sami pegged for a damsel in distress. Noah is starting to relax around the whole group as his feelings for Sami grow. Enjoyed this chapter immensely. Gretchen
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
