Polar Opposite
A short and shocking revelation about Xmas16 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Wordless we may be, but FanStory requires one hundred and fifty characters to qualify as a review. Sometimes that is a challenge for short pieces.
This is a first for me. I've not seen any other with an audio feature. Is that your voice? How did you find appropriate music?
Good luck in the contest. I predict a good showing.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2025
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Wordless we may be, but FanStory requires one hundred and fifty characters to qualify as a review. Sometimes that is a challenge for short pieces.
This is a first for me. I've not seen any other with an audio feature. Is that your voice? How did you find appropriate music?
Good luck in the contest. I predict a good showing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2025
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Yup that's my voice! I played with the idea of making the media more rich. It took so much time! The music was a lot of effort, too.
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You did a great job!
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
First and foremost welcome to FS. I hope you like it here as much as I do. There are many talented authors here who are willing to help. One word of advice the more people you follow the more successful you will be.
This is a great story. It's a good idea for bad kids to become toys. LOL
Well done.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2025
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First and foremost welcome to FS. I hope you like it here as much as I do. There are many talented authors here who are willing to help. One word of advice the more people you follow the more successful you will be.
This is a great story. It's a good idea for bad kids to become toys. LOL
Well done.
Cecilia
Comment Written 23-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2025
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thanks so much!!!! That's some amazing advice.
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You're welcome
Comment from papa55mike
Welcome! This story sounds a little like Pinocchio, where the bad boys get turned into donkeys. This is a wonderfully written story. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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Welcome! This story sounds a little like Pinocchio, where the bad boys get turned into donkeys. This is a wonderfully written story. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025
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a little alignment there yeah! Or like Santa is Krampus, too!
Lot's of interesting similarities in punishing bad kids.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Nice story with an unexpected ending: "Santa sneers, "Bad children make the best toys!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Nice story with an unexpected ending: "Santa sneers, "Bad children make the best toys!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Thanks!
Comment from Cass Carlton
Well it's certainly different isn't it?
Somehow envisioning Santa Claus as a nasty old man just doesn't 'do' it for me. I admire your choice of language though and the image you convey of scared children and an ugly natured Santa. Down with the Grinch!!
Cass Carlton
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Well it's certainly different isn't it?
Somehow envisioning Santa Claus as a nasty old man just doesn't 'do' it for me. I admire your choice of language though and the image you convey of scared children and an ugly natured Santa. Down with the Grinch!!
Cass Carlton
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The two-pronged tail that you have crafted is an outstanding end to your short-story. I think you will do well on FS. Certainly I hope you enjoy life here as much as I do, and welcome you to the club. kay
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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The two-pronged tail that you have crafted is an outstanding end to your short-story. I think you will do well on FS. Certainly I hope you enjoy life here as much as I do, and welcome you to the club. kay
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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thanks so much Kay!!!
Comment from Harambe iz ur Daddy
Nice twist on the Polar Express. And you made the font nice and big too. A efficient use of words, your entry should be a formidable contender in the contest. Best of luck and I'll look for it when the voting starts.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Nice twist on the Polar Express. And you made the font nice and big too. A efficient use of words, your entry should be a formidable contender in the contest. Best of luck and I'll look for it when the voting starts.
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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thanks so much!
Comment from Gayla putnam
Your first paragraph immediately sucked me into the story. "A magical journey awaits." Should I feel excitement as tingles raced up my spine? The answer is yes. The story was impactful with just a few paragraphs. I liked the pleas hidden beneath the jingle bells, but magic does have a price. It was a creepily delightful story. Watch out, bad children; the elf on a shelf is real. Great job. gayla
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Your first paragraph immediately sucked me into the story. "A magical journey awaits." Should I feel excitement as tingles raced up my spine? The answer is yes. The story was impactful with just a few paragraphs. I liked the pleas hidden beneath the jingle bells, but magic does have a price. It was a creepily delightful story. Watch out, bad children; the elf on a shelf is real. Great job. gayla
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Hahaha, I'll have to go after the elf on a shelf next.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That would scare the living daylights out of any child, so it might be a good idea to get this message out there! We could end up with a world full of good children! Well done, this was an excellent flash story for the contest. Good luck!! And welcome to the Fanstory world! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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That would scare the living daylights out of any child, so it might be a good idea to get this message out there! We could end up with a world full of good children! Well done, this was an excellent flash story for the contest. Good luck!! And welcome to the Fanstory world! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much! Glad to be here.
Comment from Lana Marie
Ohhhh you did get me at the end just like your author notes say that you would leave the reader thrilled and worthless, but I can't be worthless on this review so good job.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Ohhhh you did get me at the end just like your author notes say that you would leave the reader thrilled and worthless, but I can't be worthless on this review so good job.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much! He's making a list and checking it twice :)
