Constantine in Hell
Everything has a price19 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Warren
Oh, that's creepy! Sandra was foolish, and got more than she bargained for. Why would a demon be interested in helping her? It's a demon, after all, not her hired flunky. I'm not surprised it didn't end well for her.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Oh, that's creepy! Sandra was foolish, and got more than she bargained for. Why would a demon be interested in helping her? It's a demon, after all, not her hired flunky. I'm not surprised it didn't end well for her.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from estory
I think its a great supernatural tale, and you did it in a very short space. Great attention to detail, in the descriptions of place and landscape and characters, made it come alive. I love how you describe the frustrations of navigating hell, running into all the walls. And then the demon, with the naked girl, sitting on the pile of bones was vivid. A great twist in the man pulling the gun on the demon, cheating, as all sinners would, and winning the duel. estory
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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I think its a great supernatural tale, and you did it in a very short space. Great attention to detail, in the descriptions of place and landscape and characters, made it come alive. I love how you describe the frustrations of navigating hell, running into all the walls. And then the demon, with the naked girl, sitting on the pile of bones was vivid. A great twist in the man pulling the gun on the demon, cheating, as all sinners would, and winning the duel. estory
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the Supernatural Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Long for flash Fiction for my taste but within rules. I like the story, I've seen Constantine in the movies and read the comic books. You did a good job with the story and the character. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the Supernatural Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Long for flash Fiction for my taste but within rules. I like the story, I've seen Constantine in the movies and read the comic books. You did a good job with the story and the character. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from equestrik
This is a tough story! A good write for the 'Supernatural Flash fiction' contest. You have a good bit of wisdom there at the end: "Like many, Sandra believed in something for nothing. Everything has a price,"
Nice writing.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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This is a tough story! A good write for the 'Supernatural Flash fiction' contest. You have a good bit of wisdom there at the end: "Like many, Sandra believed in something for nothing. Everything has a price,"
Nice writing.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a well told story. The only thing I would advise is,
'The talisman pointed left, but that led him to a brick wall. "Bloody hell." John (had to smile at the pun since he was in Hell, and it cost him blood.) I would just say, (smiled at his pun.) I think we get the pun hence, there is no need to explain it.
Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
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This is a well told story. The only thing I would advise is,
'The talisman pointed left, but that led him to a brick wall. "Bloody hell." John (had to smile at the pun since he was in Hell, and it cost him blood.) I would just say, (smiled at his pun.) I think we get the pun hence, there is no need to explain it.
Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Quite an intriguing story: I will follow you to hell and back, save from demons attacks, but I can't give your mind back. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest
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Quite an intriguing story: I will follow you to hell and back, save from demons attacks, but I can't give your mind back. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
Comment from Shirley McLain
I like this flash fiction. It is full of tension and action and kept me wanting more. That would be a great full-fledged story. You did a great job. Shirley
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I like this flash fiction. It is full of tension and action and kept me wanting more. That would be a great full-fledged story. You did a great job. Shirley
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is an interesting entry for the Supernatural Flash Fiction writing prompt.
This short story is well told and clear.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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I think this is an interesting entry for the Supernatural Flash Fiction writing prompt.
This short story is well told and clear.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from amada
The first couple of lines head a spell on me. I take the talisman spinning and the hand. The lines were short and cutting. Just like the story you were telling. I lided the first part.
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The first couple of lines head a spell on me. I take the talisman spinning and the hand. The lines were short and cutting. Just like the story you were telling. I lided the first part.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
Comment from Tpa
I thought the story was good, Your action were well described.
You were off to a great mysterious opening. Why did John trust the bloody thing? I missed something, which why I asked the question. enjoyed the tale
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I thought the story was good, Your action were well described.
You were off to a great mysterious opening. Why did John trust the bloody thing? I missed something, which why I asked the question. enjoyed the tale
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
