Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "Job Solution and Country Days"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
12 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
You did well with this. The notice was a few pages back but glad I found it. I might cut back on fanned folks so I can see the favourites better. A couple of spags or suggestions. Just before[,] the Jordan Printing Company officially
Wondering if the following should skip the "r" and we b[r]ought fresh produce.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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You did well with this. The notice was a few pages back but glad I found it. I might cut back on fanned folks so I can see the favourites better. A couple of spags or suggestions. Just before[,] the Jordan Printing Company officially
Wondering if the following should skip the "r" and we b[r]ought fresh produce.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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I'm glad you found me. I sent you a message yesterday. Thank you for the great review and help with spags and especially the six stars.
Beth
Comment from Mastery
Hi Beth. Your story continues to draw my interest and I am ssure someday many of your grandchildren will appreciate the history.
You describe everything in detail and It is all "telling" rather than "showing" but I suppose it is difficult to use dialogue, for instance in a narrative like this. Good writing with very few if any typos. Bravo, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Hi Beth. Your story continues to draw my interest and I am ssure someday many of your grandchildren will appreciate the history.
You describe everything in detail and It is all "telling" rather than "showing" but I suppose it is difficult to use dialogue, for instance in a narrative like this. Good writing with very few if any typos. Bravo, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank Mastery, When I write fiction, I do more showing but my fans who read regularly seem to like the way I'm doing this one as conversation and my children are loving it, so I probably won't change on this one at this point. I appreciate you stopping by.
Beth
Beth
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Beth, you are writing this so very well. So much is happening in the children's life. I must say that the farm sounds like a place I would like to be. I can understand the dream your husband had. You make all this come to life. I love it. Looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Oh, Beth, you are writing this so very well. So much is happening in the children's life. I must say that the farm sounds like a place I would like to be. I can understand the dream your husband had. You make all this come to life. I love it. Looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much Ulla, I really appreciate the review and comments. It delights me to know that you really enjoy my story.
Beth
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I really do. I'm always glad to see when there's a new installment. :)))
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
When your children are your age, they will love reading their history and especially because is is written by you detailing highlights of their growing up years.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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When your children are your age, they will love reading their history and especially because is is written by you detailing highlights of their growing up years.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I hope your are right and I'm not writing all this for no reason.
Beth
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I would read your writings if I was your child. My mother is dead and I still read her letters I kept.
Comment from lyenochka
Another great chapter in your memories. What I found most touching about this one is the sacrifices one makes for our loved ones. You didn't really love the country home but you went with it because your husband loved it. And your kids went along with it, too. I moved here because my husband loves this place even though it's far from my grand kids. We just know what our loved ones need in life.
Question:
we payed for as the work (paid?) Is there a different meaning here than the "paid" you used earlier?
Suggestion:
Sometime change can be (Sometimes)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Another great chapter in your memories. What I found most touching about this one is the sacrifices one makes for our loved ones. You didn't really love the country home but you went with it because your husband loved it. And your kids went along with it, too. I moved here because my husband loves this place even though it's far from my grand kids. We just know what our loved ones need in life.
Question:
we payed for as the work (paid?) Is there a different meaning here than the "paid" you used earlier?
Suggestion:
Sometime change can be (Sometimes)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the review and the wonderful comments. I appreciate the notes of errors. Paid is correct for both. Payed is only correct in the nautical sense, whatever that means. LOL I think we get satisfaction as well by knowing we've made those we care about happy. Thank you also fo the 6 stars.
Beth
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Those trips to Mississippi sound extremely good. That house and acreage would be so peaceful. Your children were all growing and life seemed to be moving along smoothly. You covered a lot of ground in this interesting chapter. Sounds like your husband was truly attached to Mississippi.
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Ralf
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Those trips to Mississippi sound extremely good. That house and acreage would be so peaceful. Your children were all growing and life seemed to be moving along smoothly. You covered a lot of ground in this interesting chapter. Sounds like your husband was truly attached to Mississippi.
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call for one of the>> for s/b 'from'
that I would be was able >> eliminate 'was'
To began with there>>began s/b 'begin'
the two of the would>>the s/b 'them'
Ralf
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you Raif. I love your comments and appreciate your help. I'm glad we spent as much time as we did at the country place in Mississippi. I brought about many happy memories as well as quite a few conflicts as time went on.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
Another great episode of Beth and You name it in Jackson. Good one. Made me remember a few things as well. Christmas is special and it will always be something to remember with family.
Well done Beth.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Another great episode of Beth and You name it in Jackson. Good one. Made me remember a few things as well. Christmas is special and it will always be something to remember with family.
Well done Beth.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thanks Chuck, I truly appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Gert sherwood
More things that happen in 1973
Hello BethShelby Your chapter in your book Remembering Yesterday about
job solution and country days I liked and I found your events during the time you were looking for a job. I see that you got one that was not far from you lived. Smiles that director awarded Christi the first annual Pathfinder of the Year award.
Will be waiting for more things that happen in 1973.
Gert
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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More things that happen in 1973
Hello BethShelby Your chapter in your book Remembering Yesterday about
job solution and country days I liked and I found your events during the time you were looking for a job. I see that you got one that was not far from you lived. Smiles that director awarded Christi the first annual Pathfinder of the Year award.
Will be waiting for more things that happen in 1973.
Gert
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you Gert, I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
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You are welcome BethShelby
Gert
Comment from Mistydawn
I'm so glad you were able to find a good job, and so close to home too. I loved your memories of the Christmas holidays. Could picture it in my mind. Sounds like Don is growing into quite a little man, a bit of a daredevil too. My first experience with a bike, I ran into a tree. Not sure who got the worst end of that deal, me, the tree, or the bike. Think I would've went crazy hearing the doctor's diagnosis. Glad you were able to keep a clear head. I do hope the children adjusts to their new school. Your story is well-written, very interesting. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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I'm so glad you were able to find a good job, and so close to home too. I loved your memories of the Christmas holidays. Could picture it in my mind. Sounds like Don is growing into quite a little man, a bit of a daredevil too. My first experience with a bike, I ran into a tree. Not sure who got the worst end of that deal, me, the tree, or the bike. Think I would've went crazy hearing the doctor's diagnosis. Glad you were able to keep a clear head. I do hope the children adjusts to their new school. Your story is well-written, very interesting. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comment. Don's bike didn't make out too well either. Especially after he landed it in a ditch full of water.
Beth
Comment from zanya
Fond, happy memories here of family life and wonderful Christmas memories with a growing family enhanced by that sense of immediacy so effectively created
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Fond, happy memories here of family life and wonderful Christmas memories with a growing family enhanced by that sense of immediacy so effectively created
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. We did have some good memories which stayed with all of us through the years. I appreciate you continuing to read my story.
Beth
