Crying Time
Cinquain: 2-4-6-8-2 syllables22 total reviews
Comment from Valerie Fish
This is exceptional, conjures up a powerful image, yes society certainly is failing. Love tthe clever rhyming, and the aliteration.
A truly deserving winner.
Well done
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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This is exceptional, conjures up a powerful image, yes society certainly is failing. Love tthe clever rhyming, and the aliteration.
A truly deserving winner.
Well done
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your supportive comments. I appreciate the high rating.
Comment from dragonpoet
Lisa,
This cinquin was well deserving of the win. Congrats.
You provide clear images of the sad truth of the riots without the artwork.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
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Lisa,
This cinquin was well deserving of the win. Congrats.
You provide clear images of the sad truth of the riots without the artwork.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
Comment from Mary Furlong
Your win with this poem is well deserved. The thirst line sets up the auditory images - both rhyming and alliterative, making the switch to the visual especially striking. Congratulations.
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Your win with this poem is well deserved. The thirst line sets up the auditory images - both rhyming and alliterative, making the switch to the visual especially striking. Congratulations.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
Comment from kiwisteveh
Congratulations on your win!
Well-deserved with this stunning piece that is both powerfully topical and poetically beautiful. Clever use of rhyme, not a feature of traditional cinquain, adds sparkle.
Wow!
Steve
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Congratulations on your win!
Well-deserved with this stunning piece that is both powerfully topical and poetically beautiful. Clever use of rhyme, not a feature of traditional cinquain, adds sparkle.
Wow!
Steve
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much, Steve for this excellent review.
(I bet you enjoyed that debate, NOT.)
Comment from Contests
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
Comment from Michele Harber
I was thinking of entering the Cinquain contest but the Jewish holiday (when I'm not allowed to create anything new, hence not allowed to write) got in the way. Now I'm glad it did, because this is good and I wouldn't want to go up against it. This poem is sadly true - at least in my part of the world - and very well expressed. I like that you used the couple of rhymes even though they weren't required. They added an extra layer to your words. Good luck in the contest.
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I was thinking of entering the Cinquain contest but the Jewish holiday (when I'm not allowed to create anything new, hence not allowed to write) got in the way. Now I'm glad it did, because this is good and I wouldn't want to go up against it. This poem is sadly true - at least in my part of the world - and very well expressed. I like that you used the couple of rhymes even though they weren't required. They added an extra layer to your words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
Comment from Bill Schott
This cinquain, Crying Time, has the proper formatting and captures the current breakdown in society as BLM, Time's Up, pandemic, economy, and the otherwise divided political culture converge in the streets.
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This cinquain, Crying Time, has the proper formatting and captures the current breakdown in society as BLM, Time's Up, pandemic, economy, and the otherwise divided political culture converge in the streets.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
Comment from Patty Palmer
Yeh that is a scary time that would put anyone in tears. The sirens and the rioting going on in our big cities is more than just a shame. The people they are rioting, burning businesses and innocent people being shot for no reason, can't even call for the police because they have been run out. So, no one to call. It really is crying time. It scares me that this can be happening in our own company and not a damn person is taking steps to bring order back. Good job!
Patty
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Yeh that is a scary time that would put anyone in tears. The sirens and the rioting going on in our big cities is more than just a shame. The people they are rioting, burning businesses and innocent people being shot for no reason, can't even call for the police because they have been run out. So, no one to call. It really is crying time. It scares me that this can be happening in our own company and not a damn person is taking steps to bring order back. Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
Comment from poetwatch
With all the yelling in my ears I don't really want to hear, but it is happening everywhere, LisaMay. Everyone wants to be heard. I just wish there was a peaceful solution to this world's probems. This is a good offering to the Cinquain Poetry contest. Thank you for sharing. :)
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With all the yelling in my ears I don't really want to hear, but it is happening everywhere, LisaMay. Everyone wants to be heard. I just wish there was a peaceful solution to this world's probems. This is a good offering to the Cinquain Poetry contest. Thank you for sharing. :)
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
Comment from Mia Twysted
This is a very dark, alothough at first it may appear that way. But it tells of the future that is coming and that future is leading us into the darkness where we may never make it out.
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This is a very dark, alothough at first it may appear that way. But it tells of the future that is coming and that future is leading us into the darkness where we may never make it out.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020