Sharon And The Wheelie Bin
(957 words) A meeting in strange circumstances.21 total reviews
Comment from Lynette Martin
Excellent, I love the Flintstones, this is a "hats off to you mate" good feel story. This is my first time to read your work, do you mind if I read your former works? I hope to learn a lot from you.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Excellent, I love the Flintstones, this is a "hats off to you mate" good feel story. This is my first time to read your work, do you mind if I read your former works? I hope to learn a lot from you.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Hi Lynette. Thanks for reviewing... I'm pleased you enjoyed my story. Of course you can dip into my portfolio - I am prolific so you will find lots to read.
Comment from Mia Twysted
Interesting story. She is going through so much and just wants to have her freedom and someone to take out the trash. I likehow there are helpful neighbors who will learn in the morning that she is not homeless. I wonder what will happen then.
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Interesting story. She is going through so much and just wants to have her freedom and someone to take out the trash. I likehow there are helpful neighbors who will learn in the morning that she is not homeless. I wonder what will happen then.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
Comment from Debbie Pope
I was engaged with every word of this. I love all the details of Sharon's new life. You paint a realistic picture of a woman in a temporary crisis. So much revolves around trash, symbolic of her trashed life. Sharon is holding it together with her sense of humor. She needy, but creative at the same time.
Great character portrayal. You give us a good first chapter to a romantic comedy.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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I was engaged with every word of this. I love all the details of Sharon's new life. You paint a realistic picture of a woman in a temporary crisis. So much revolves around trash, symbolic of her trashed life. Sharon is holding it together with her sense of humor. She needy, but creative at the same time.
Great character portrayal. You give us a good first chapter to a romantic comedy.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thanks for this terrific review and for 'reading' the character so well.
I wrote it as a stand-alone story, but your comment about it being a potential beginning to a romantic comedy gives food for thought. (Trouble is, i am a great starter but a poor finisher - I keep getting distracted by other ideas.)
Comment from JudyE
Loved this. What else could Sharon do but give in and stay the night? Maybe the kind man would haul her bin back up the hill for her next morning. What a shame this wasn't an entry in a flash fiction contest. It's a fun read.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Loved this. What else could Sharon do but give in and stay the night? Maybe the kind man would haul her bin back up the hill for her next morning. What a shame this wasn't an entry in a flash fiction contest. It's a fun read.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thanks for the great review, Judy. Part of this story is true - i did actually fall over in the street when putting the wheelie bin out and that was the trigger for invention. (I swear I was NOT drunk at the time!)
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Sharon and the Wheelie Bin, is a study in the personality of a divorcee who is being everything she suppressed during her failed marriage. The events of this evening, with the trash can mishap, is so funny as I imagined it in reality. A fun scene from this glimpse at Sharon's new life.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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This story, Sharon and the Wheelie Bin, is a study in the personality of a divorcee who is being everything she suppressed during her failed marriage. The events of this evening, with the trash can mishap, is so funny as I imagined it in reality. A fun scene from this glimpse at Sharon's new life.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your comments, Bill. The trash can mishap did actually happen to me - but I wasn't drunk at the time, I swear! and it wasn't at night and I don't have new neighbours, but how boring would that be if I just stuck to the truth.
Comment from Michele Harber
I expect you're basically describing your own neighborhood, as you've told me about the steep hill on which you live. All I can say is that I want to move to any neighborhood where residents are so kind that they'd take a seemingly homeless alcoholic into their home and give her food and shelter.
I love your description of how Sharon chose to use her newfound wealth and freedom, eschewing healthy food for alcohol and the all-important chocolate bar. It's a very real expression of how many of us deal with problems or change or anything with which we need to cope. When Covid isolation became a necessity, I turned to food as my coping strategy and, believe me, it wasn't tofu and high-fiber cereal.
Your story is fun and funny, with a very human protagonist. You used just the right amount of detail, and I enjoyed your spots of humor, as in the "Fred" and "Wilma" references.
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I expect you're basically describing your own neighborhood, as you've told me about the steep hill on which you live. All I can say is that I want to move to any neighborhood where residents are so kind that they'd take a seemingly homeless alcoholic into their home and give her food and shelter.
I love your description of how Sharon chose to use her newfound wealth and freedom, eschewing healthy food for alcohol and the all-important chocolate bar. It's a very real expression of how many of us deal with problems or change or anything with which we need to cope. When Covid isolation became a necessity, I turned to food as my coping strategy and, believe me, it wasn't tofu and high-fiber cereal.
Your story is fun and funny, with a very human protagonist. You used just the right amount of detail, and I enjoyed your spots of humor, as in the "Fred" and "Wilma" references.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written humorous story. It will be extremely funny to see the neighbor's faces when they learn the homeless drunk is a nearby neighbor. Lol.
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A very well-written humorous story. It will be extremely funny to see the neighbor's faces when they learn the homeless drunk is a nearby neighbor. Lol.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Loved this story, LisaMay! From the agony of mourning her divorce, the "sozzled" (love the word!) Sharon has ended up meeting her new neighbors. Wonder how she will explain who she is in the morning. I think you need to continue the story!
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Loved this story, LisaMay! From the agony of mourning her divorce, the "sozzled" (love the word!) Sharon has ended up meeting her new neighbors. Wonder how she will explain who she is in the morning. I think you need to continue the story!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
Comment from Beverly A McBride
Love this story. I relate to Sharon, I hate Wed. mornings, as I listen to the garbage truck noisily drive by while I'm still in bed, and forgot to get up in time to take it out! That is a real problem. The neighbors are on to me. No one is jumping out to take over for me, however. I've seen days when I'd like someone to take care of me a little while, and explain later.....Her little food rebellion...well I relate to that too. Sharon is my kind of gal. She should call me and we'll boo hoo over wine.
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Love this story. I relate to Sharon, I hate Wed. mornings, as I listen to the garbage truck noisily drive by while I'm still in bed, and forgot to get up in time to take it out! That is a real problem. The neighbors are on to me. No one is jumping out to take over for me, however. I've seen days when I'd like someone to take care of me a little while, and explain later.....Her little food rebellion...well I relate to that too. Sharon is my kind of gal. She should call me and we'll boo hoo over wine.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
SSSSSStupendous! Hilarious--delightful tale; priceless finale--wry and witty--bingeing details ring all too true--snide and snarky re dickhead Jo-Nathan. Cheerssssss. LIZ
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SSSSSStupendous! Hilarious--delightful tale; priceless finale--wry and witty--bingeing details ring all too true--snide and snarky re dickhead Jo-Nathan. Cheerssssss. LIZ
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
