Finally Found
After seeing the news tonight...16 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, a tragic ending to a girl's disappearance, Marjon. Your words are heartfelt and poignant. They create great imagery in the minds of readers, too. What a sad remembrance. I can tell of its huge impact bringing sadness to you.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Yes, a tragic ending to a girl's disappearance, Marjon. Your words are heartfelt and poignant. They create great imagery in the minds of readers, too. What a sad remembrance. I can tell of its huge impact bringing sadness to you.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Jan, for this kind review.
Comment from Alchera
Beautifully penned throughtout its three irregular unrhymed stanzaic structure form and its drammatic true narrative story lined content.Every day mostly girls disappear on far-off mediterranean shores or elsewhere captured and slave traded as fresh merchandise for harem, workers, prostitution and so many other destinations. This girl has drowned but who ever knows the truth? Great work !
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Beautifully penned throughtout its three irregular unrhymed stanzaic structure form and its drammatic true narrative story lined content.Every day mostly girls disappear on far-off mediterranean shores or elsewhere captured and slave traded as fresh merchandise for harem, workers, prostitution and so many other destinations. This girl has drowned but who ever knows the truth? Great work !
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Tony, thanks a lot for your review. See also"Lily" please. I love your reviews!
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Marjon, I already reviewed it on the third of September! Blessings! Tony
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Sorry. You are right. I am greedy
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Marjon I am glad you found compassion enough for this young woman to immortalize her in this poem, But I wish, because you have no restrictions as to meter or rhyme, that you change the last word to another word entirety. Just the word 'bad' does not fit the elegance of the rest of the words in the poem.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Dear Marjon I am glad you found compassion enough for this young woman to immortalize her in this poem, But I wish, because you have no restrictions as to meter or rhyme, that you change the last word to another word entirety. Just the word 'bad' does not fit the elegance of the rest of the words in the poem.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Yes, you have a point here. I just changed "bad" in "in enchantment".
What do you think?
Thanks for the review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Finally Found
by Marjon van Bruggen
Hello, Marjon,
A haunting image of the drowned girl in the lake. It's very sad. Good imagery and presentation. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Finally Found
by Marjon van Bruggen
Hello, Marjon,
A haunting image of the drowned girl in the lake. It's very sad. Good imagery and presentation. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Gypsy, thank you for the review.
Comment from estory
That's another powerful image there, the image of the girl floating in the lake with the serpent hair. I know this is about a murder victim, but the first thing that came to mind was the legend of Salmacis, the naiad queen who seduces Hermaphroditus, popularized by Genesis in their song, Fountains of Salmacis. In your poem there is a great sense of loss here, of trying to reach out and it is too late to make that connection, to save her. Its like a mourning of a life taken too soon. estory
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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That's another powerful image there, the image of the girl floating in the lake with the serpent hair. I know this is about a murder victim, but the first thing that came to mind was the legend of Salmacis, the naiad queen who seduces Hermaphroditus, popularized by Genesis in their song, Fountains of Salmacis. In your poem there is a great sense of loss here, of trying to reach out and it is too late to make that connection, to save her. Its like a mourning of a life taken too soon. estory
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for the review, Estory. The news and the images took me by surprise and I felt so shocked and hurt inside, as if I knew the girl myself and found her drowned. The impact made me write the poem. The legend of Salmacis...yes, now you mentioned it. But it was not in my mind when I wrote this poem.
Comment from To Write Is To Live
There is a sense of finality in the last three lines of your poem, "Finally Found," that juxtaposes well with the dreamy, watercolor lines of the first two stanzas--it is as if reality suddenly imposes itself on an otherwise restful reverie, "...the arms, soft and wide, are smiling... ."
Thank you for writing and sharing your haunting poem, "Finally Found."
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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There is a sense of finality in the last three lines of your poem, "Finally Found," that juxtaposes well with the dreamy, watercolor lines of the first two stanzas--it is as if reality suddenly imposes itself on an otherwise restful reverie, "...the arms, soft and wide, are smiling... ."
Thank you for writing and sharing your haunting poem, "Finally Found."
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much for the beautiful review. Most appreciated!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad true story and your story sends a shiver down my spine, such a tragedy, I think your last word should be (badly). A poignant write, Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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This is a sad true story and your story sends a shiver down my spine, such a tragedy, I think your last word should be (badly). A poignant write, Love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you Dolly for the review and the badly.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt and emotional poem about a missing girl finally found in a lake where she has drowned. It is always sad to learn about stories like this that seem to make no sense.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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A very well-written heartfelt and emotional poem about a missing girl finally found in a lake where she has drowned. It is always sad to learn about stories like this that seem to make no sense.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Sandra, thank you for the review.
Comment from Chelle_GH
Oh so sad... it breaks my heart... The poem was able to convey its message clearly. My eyes read it, my mind processed it, the thoughts went down to my heart and I felt it deeply.
Perfectly Written & Image/Art work fits with everything.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Oh so sad... it breaks my heart... The poem was able to convey its message clearly. My eyes read it, my mind processed it, the thoughts went down to my heart and I felt it deeply.
Perfectly Written & Image/Art work fits with everything.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the review, Chelle!Thank you for this loving review.
Comment from Gypsymooncat
A life lost, a girl who could've been forgotten, but finally found. Too many meet this sort of fate these days, it's mind-boggling. And a cause of great sorrow, as well as concern. I loved the wording of this poem, and how it described this poor girl's discovery, ending with "I wish it was just a fairy dream that ended bad". I share the same sentiment! Thanks for sharing xoxoxox
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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A life lost, a girl who could've been forgotten, but finally found. Too many meet this sort of fate these days, it's mind-boggling. And a cause of great sorrow, as well as concern. I loved the wording of this poem, and how it described this poor girl's discovery, ending with "I wish it was just a fairy dream that ended bad". I share the same sentiment! Thanks for sharing xoxoxox
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the loving review.
