Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 58 "Growing Waist & Flaring Tempers"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a very interesting chapter. I love the descriptions of the French Quarter and other places of interest in Louisiana. You do a fine job bringing it all to life for the reader. Your children must be enjoying this conversation you are having with your deceased husband.
I like the last line...
"Well, it better be a boy then, because we've already got too many girls in our house."
NB:
miricle s/b miracle.
Spanish City Hall. One the other > you mean On
Ralf
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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This is a very interesting chapter. I love the descriptions of the French Quarter and other places of interest in Louisiana. You do a fine job bringing it all to life for the reader. Your children must be enjoying this conversation you are having with your deceased husband.
I like the last line...
"Well, it better be a boy then, because we've already got too many girls in our house."
NB:
miricle s/b miracle.
Spanish City Hall. One the other > you mean On
Ralf
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm glad you liked it. I anxious to see more of your story.
Beth
Comment from mermaids
I visited New Orleans on vacation many years ago and your descriptions of the city took me back there. I am enjoying your story and am looking forward to the birth of your baby and your next job.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I visited New Orleans on vacation many years ago and your descriptions of the city took me back there. I am enjoying your story and am looking forward to the birth of your baby and your next job.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for continuing to read my story. I enjoy your comments. New Orleans is a very interesting place. I'm sure glad they didn't get that Laura storm that was in the Gulf.
Beth
Comment from elchupakabra
This is a great personal piece, I think writing is an invaluable tool for our emotions and this piece is a perfect example of that. Great work and thank you for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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This is a great personal piece, I think writing is an invaluable tool for our emotions and this piece is a perfect example of that. Great work and thank you for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you for sticking with this story and continuing to read. I enjoy your comments.
Beth
Comment from Veenbee
The things we experience in our lives make or break us. You seem to be one of the strong ones. AS I read you authors note, it is made clear to me why you kept referring to your husband as you. At first I wasn't sure who the you was. Great idea as a memoir to your kids. Veenbee
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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The things we experience in our lives make or break us. You seem to be one of the strong ones. AS I read you authors note, it is made clear to me why you kept referring to your husband as you. At first I wasn't sure who the you was. Great idea as a memoir to your kids. Veenbee
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter. I'm sure that is confusing to many who haven't read it from the beginning. I glad you read my notes so you would understand. I appreciate your comments and I hope you be back to read more.
Beth
Comment from Mastery
Hi Beth. This is a well rounded chapter with a little of everything, don't you think? Very personal-sounding all the way through.
Great imagery here: "One grouchy-looking artist, sporting a white goatee and wearing a black beret, was painting landscapes with a palate knife, which makes the picture look three-dimensional with globs of oil paint raised an inch or so on the canvas."
Suggestions: Correct the spelling of heels in this: "attacking their heeals as....."
Good writing, my friend. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Hi Beth. This is a well rounded chapter with a little of everything, don't you think? Very personal-sounding all the way through.
Great imagery here: "One grouchy-looking artist, sporting a white goatee and wearing a black beret, was painting landscapes with a palate knife, which makes the picture look three-dimensional with globs of oil paint raised an inch or so on the canvas."
Suggestions: Correct the spelling of heels in this: "attacking their heeals as....."
Good writing, my friend. : ) Bob
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you Bob, I'm always happy to see you read a chapter. Yes it is personal and goes in every direction but each chapter deals with what happens during a certain time period. It wouldn't be quite so personal if I wasn't primarily writing it for my children. I appreciate your comments.
Apparently I need to reread my corrections. I'd added the extra e to heel but I forgot to remove the a. At first, I had heals. LOL
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Good write, Beth. Bob.
Comment from equestrik
I love people's life stories and I love that you are writing this for your children. My father's passing left me wanting more of his stories and to know more of his life. We siblings are getting our mother to write some of her memories down.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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I love people's life stories and I love that you are writing this for your children. My father's passing left me wanting more of his stories and to know more of his life. We siblings are getting our mother to write some of her memories down.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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I so glad that you are getting your mother to do that. My mother and and Dad and grandparents told me stories that I can't remember very but I'm planning on writing what I do remember. Thank so much for the review. I hope you read more of it.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Love Don's response!! My three grandchildren are absolutely against another sibling. They feel they have to share their parents more than enough. I like how you ended with the announcement after showing us these events that happened with the kids. So glad you all were safe in that accident. Praise God for protecting you all!
Also, glad that Blackie got a new job as cow dog. Sounds better than herding bikers.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Love Don's response!! My three grandchildren are absolutely against another sibling. They feel they have to share their parents more than enough. I like how you ended with the announcement after showing us these events that happened with the kids. So glad you all were safe in that accident. Praise God for protecting you all!
Also, glad that Blackie got a new job as cow dog. Sounds better than herding bikers.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the excellent comments. Christi will be the child who will be most effected by Connie's birth. To this day, she resents Connie for taking her place. She needed counselling but we didn't realize it at the time.
Beth
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So very hard. We look back and then we realized the things we should have done for our kids but it's all part of who they become as they overcome their own obstacles in life.
Comment from Ben Colder
Way to go Don. Sounds like my second son and something he would have said. LOL.
Glad you liked your tour of the sin soaked city. A place to remember but not for long.
So much history I love.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Way to go Don. Sounds like my second son and something he would have said. LOL.
Glad you liked your tour of the sin soaked city. A place to remember but not for long.
So much history I love.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the review. There is a lot of Spanish and French and Irish history. New Orleans is a melting pot of many cultures. It isn't a great place to raise kids but the kids in church school were decent kids.
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Yep-sin soaked city of the south. LOL
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It didn't rub off.
Beth
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, not as many tempers flared as I had feared from the title of this chapter, ( in fact I think you might want to revise it when you see how many paragraphs are dedicated to tourist info, versus flaring tempers.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Dear Beth, not as many tempers flared as I had feared from the title of this chapter, ( in fact I think you might want to revise it when you see how many paragraphs are dedicated to tourist info, versus flaring tempers.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Well there was three temper fits, The man on the bike, The artist when Don stuck his finger in the paint and my husband when the car hit us. That more that most chapters. It all happened while my waist was expanding. Do you think I had to much about the Jackson Square?
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Well if you want to make a big deal about the temper flairs ! You are going to need to leave out 3/4 of the history and descriptions of New Orleans. The way it reads now, the reader, and reviewer in particular, are torn in half.
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I've never given much thought to titles. Most get changed anyway before books go to print. I thought I had too many already that referred to the city but I did use a picture of Jackson square. Thanks for your suggestions.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(typos: heals s/b heels; there are three periods that you intended as commas: ... bite my daughter. if he had ... ; ... artist. sporting a white goatee and wearing a black beret. was painting ... )
Captivating, as always. So many adventures--wonderful local color and background info fleshes out the places--just as you do for the cast of characters. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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(typos: heals s/b heels; there are three periods that you intended as commas: ... bite my daughter. if he had ... ; ... artist. sporting a white goatee and wearing a black beret. was painting ... )
Captivating, as always. So many adventures--wonderful local color and background info fleshes out the places--just as you do for the cast of characters. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the great review and comments. I'm having some trouble with my eyes sight and sometimes I can't tell it a period that I accidentally hit. I think it is allergies.
Beth
