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Comment from dragonpoet
This is a scary look into the mind of a date rapist. I feel sorry for the girl. Maybe she will decide to leave after going to the bathroom. I think the rapist is trying to justify his actions a little by saying she might have said 'yes' without the drugs. Though, if he really believed that he wouldn't even think about slipping her a rufie.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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This is a scary look into the mind of a date rapist. I feel sorry for the girl. Maybe she will decide to leave after going to the bathroom. I think the rapist is trying to justify his actions a little by saying she might have said 'yes' without the drugs. Though, if he really believed that he wouldn't even think about slipping her a rufie.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thanks very much for your review.
Geoff
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You are most kindly welcome, Geoff.
Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Chilling! Well done in a flash--hadn't foreseen the stunning ending--masterful buildup to the evil deed--congrats on your well-deserved prize. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Chilling! Well done in a flash--hadn't foreseen the stunning ending--masterful buildup to the evil deed--congrats on your well-deserved prize. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thanks very much for your review.
Geoff
Comment from Sally Law
Date drugging is such a heinous crime. A great flash and I think I'm looking at the winner. Not a word
was wasted, dear Geoff. The key to a flash.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the flash,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Date drugging is such a heinous crime. A great flash and I think I'm looking at the winner. Not a word
was wasted, dear Geoff. The key to a flash.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the flash,
Sal xo
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Thanks Sally, for your very positive review. Glad you enjoyed.
Geoff
Comment from Dick Narvett
A brutally good story. You created a vivid atmosphere, built up some tension, and left us with a smug perpetrator, foreshadowing bad things to come. A worthwhile entry.
Dick
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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A brutally good story. You created a vivid atmosphere, built up some tension, and left us with a smug perpetrator, foreshadowing bad things to come. A worthwhile entry.
Dick
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thanks a lot for the very positive review
Geoff
Comment from gramalot8
Wow... what a creepy, little pervert you have saved this girl from. I can totally envision the entire situation! Great storyline in only 100 words! Thanks for sharing this with us and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Wow... what a creepy, little pervert you have saved this girl from. I can totally envision the entire situation! Great storyline in only 100 words! Thanks for sharing this with us and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your comments. Sadly there are too many of these perverts around today.
Geoff
Comment from RShipp
What detail you used to set up the 'crime'. WELL DONE!
I enojy reading flash ficiotn and this one is excellent!
Best of luck in the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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What detail you used to set up the 'crime'. WELL DONE!
I enojy reading flash ficiotn and this one is excellent!
Best of luck in the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your very positive review, and of course the six stars.
Geoff
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I use to go out to dance halls that served drinks many years ago. I don't think that many of the things that are out today were available. I know that their were some things out and would encourage any women that would listen not to leave their drink unattended. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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I use to go out to dance halls that served drinks many years ago. I don't think that many of the things that are out today were available. I know that their were some things out and would encourage any women that would listen not to leave their drink unattended. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thanks a lot for your comments. Much appreciated
Geoff
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a good entry with a surprise ending for the 100 Words Flash Fiction prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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This is a good entry with a surprise ending for the 100 Words Flash Fiction prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your comments.
Geoff
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You're welcome.