Daydream Seduction
twenty-line free verse poem. A man's daydream.15 total reviews
Comment from Tim Noble
Very seductive. Lovely use of words to achieve this, and typical ending with the female merely using the male to achieve something for herself. I would have given it six stars if it had rhymed as well.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Very seductive. Lovely use of words to achieve this, and typical ending with the female merely using the male to achieve something for herself. I would have given it six stars if it had rhymed as well.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Tim, Thank you very much for this lovely review. I am not a good rhyming poet. My style is almost always a free verse. But I appreciate your thoughts!
Comment from dmt1967
This reminded me of mills and boon books. They, like you, used to lead one to dizzy heights only to have the doorbell ring at the wrong time lol. Great poem and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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This reminded me of mills and boon books. They, like you, used to lead one to dizzy heights only to have the doorbell ring at the wrong time lol. Great poem and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Thanks a lot for the review!
Comment from Eternal Muse
A very seductive poem. Your descriptive imagery paints quite a picture for the reader.
Excellent visuals in this
Silk slipped away
inch by seductive inch
revealing alabaster flesh.
Rose-petal smooth, flawless glass.
She reached for him, drew him in
It is erotic without being vulgar and crude. Subtle and done with taste.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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A very seductive poem. Your descriptive imagery paints quite a picture for the reader.
Excellent visuals in this
Silk slipped away
inch by seductive inch
revealing alabaster flesh.
Rose-petal smooth, flawless glass.
She reached for him, drew him in
It is erotic without being vulgar and crude. Subtle and done with taste.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for the review!
Comment from richie b
Marjon,
Clever and well written poem. You set the stage
luring your readers with potent imagery.
Everyone enjoys day dreaming and a little fantasy.
But reality sets in and the window dressing drops.
Nice work and good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Richie
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Marjon,
Clever and well written poem. You set the stage
luring your readers with potent imagery.
Everyone enjoys day dreaming and a little fantasy.
But reality sets in and the window dressing drops.
Nice work and good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Richie
Comment Written 30-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Richie, for the review!
Comment from Ogden
Not bad for a beginner, Marjon.
Somehow, it seems to be a pleasant memory of occasions oft-repeated, not daydreams. Of course, I could be mistaken.
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2020
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Not bad for a beginner, Marjon.
Somehow, it seems to be a pleasant memory of occasions oft-repeated, not daydreams. Of course, I could be mistaken.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 30-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2020
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I'm not going to tell you (lol) Thanks a lot for the review.
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You're very welcome, Marjon. We all have our little secrets.
Don
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Hahaha. :))
Comment from R. Hiland
Beautifully done! And the destination worthy of the journey. For me you captured the concept that people are most beautiful when they are not conscious of their beauty; when they are just being themselves. Thank you for this charming post. R
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Beautifully done! And the destination worthy of the journey. For me you captured the concept that people are most beautiful when they are not conscious of their beauty; when they are just being themselves. Thank you for this charming post. R
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Oh! Thanking for this lovely review!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sensual and erotic write about a sweet encounter, you set the scene and drew our imagination into a world of pleasure and sweet satisfaction, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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A sensual and erotic write about a sweet encounter, you set the scene and drew our imagination into a world of pleasure and sweet satisfaction, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Thanks, Dolly, for your review.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Well, the best evenings are often well-thought-out fantasies... ? I don't think this needs a warning - it is a poem that hints at things, really more sensual than outright erotic...
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Well, the best evenings are often well-thought-out fantasies... ? I don't think this needs a warning - it is a poem that hints at things, really more sensual than outright erotic...
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Margaret, thank you for the comment and review.
Comment from Diana Kane
Great word choice is to build a sexy scene. The reader wants to keep reading, wants to know what's going to happen next. Love the ending! Reality bites sometimes. LOL
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Great word choice is to build a sexy scene. The reader wants to keep reading, wants to know what's going to happen next. Love the ending! Reality bites sometimes. LOL
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Diana, thank you for the review.
Comment from ESOSTINE
This poem would keep me spell-bound till the end. I also found very interesting the way the poem was ended, leaving the reader with imaginations and demanding for more. Great work!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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This poem would keep me spell-bound till the end. I also found very interesting the way the poem was ended, leaving the reader with imaginations and demanding for more. Great work!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Thanks very much for the review!
