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Heart Cafted Poems - 2020

Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Tasks Yet to do"
Musings of an old man -2020

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Comment from Elaine Chiodi
Exceptional
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absolutely wonderful rendition of this complicated form. Reading the verses, I tried to figure the scheme on my own and was happy to see the explanation listed beneath it. Halfway through, and totally confused, I reread your words and just let the beauty and meaning of them wash over me. Either way, it was a totally incredible experience... ...ec

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2020
    ec I value your reading and commenting on this special poetic verse. Your kind words do make this for me a personal achievement.
reply by Elaine Chiodi on 05-Jul-2020
    You're welcome... ...ec
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
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"Tasks yet to do", is an extremely well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
    Smiling back!
reply by duchessofdrumborg on 28-Jun-2020

    I'm so very pleased to hear it!
Comment from royowen
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You've moulded this one Jim. The interlocking theme, keeps it on track, and it doesn't rhyme necessarily, unlike its related poetic cousins. I like the theme, which gets back to the basics of our time on earth, beautifully written, well dine, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much, delight in your weekend
reply by royowen on 27-Jun-2020
    Bless you
Comment from BeasPeas
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Hi Jim. Great job. You've written a fine poem about the lessons we are to learn sent by God. Can we figure out what they are? We do our best, I think. You've picked up the challenge with this complicated form. There is a little typo here:
"More goods (good) days, sure to come"
Marilyn

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much, delight in your weekend
Comment from Suzanna Ray
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Dear JLR, you are a bear, working on these demanding poetic dances, but are you getting any satisfaction from your art?
It seems they have you dancing the tarantula, should you be doing this at your age?

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much, delight in your weekend Smiling back
reply by Suzanna Ray on 27-Jun-2020
    If you are smiling, you are happy.and I am glad that I find you so!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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I like messing around with meanings that are changed by the rearrangement of lines. I also like how repeating certain lines gives the meaning a specific emphasis. The last verse was the most powerful and the summary. In reading it aloud, which I love to do, it can be a very dramatic reading. I can even see the facial expressions and gestures. Very well written.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
    Liz, Right you, nailed it...Thank you so much, delight in your weekend
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Tasks Yet to do
by JLR

Hello my friend

A wonderful entry for the A-Pix This Challenge Terzanelle poem. It's a fine poetic form..it sounds so good when you say...God's tasks were assigned to me. Well done.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much, delight in your weekend
Comment from harmony13
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The author's words are thought provoking, clear and creative. I
pondered on the words of this poem. I thought about God's tasks.
Many times the tasks are clear - I just need to be aware. Great topic -
the artwork is awesome! Have a great weekend!

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
    Thank you for reviewing and comments. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I enjoyed the sentiments here as you learn to listen and follow the faithful path and complete those tasks, a fun form which I am not familiar with, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
    Thank you for reviewing and comments. Have a great weekend.
Comment from lyenochka
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This is an interesting form. Thanks for introducing it to us. I like how you remind us that we are all assigned tasks by God to do. My favorite line was: "living large with borrowed days."

"His Breathe of life was my start" (Breath) breathe is the verb.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
    Thank you for reviewing and comments. Have a great weekend.