A Broken Heart Won't Kill Ya
[Meant to be sung, folks - not precise meter...]67 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ouch! You must inform your muse that there IS such a thing as Broken Heart Syndrome though, and while it rarely kills, it can...
All kidding aside, my friend, how are you? I'm not here a lot right now, preferring Zoom meetings at this awful time, and so on, but pc issues are discouraging too. I'm glad I stopped by today, though I won't be staying long. I wish I could hear you sing this lovely (sad) song. :) Beautiful, Yvette.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Ouch! You must inform your muse that there IS such a thing as Broken Heart Syndrome though, and while it rarely kills, it can...
All kidding aside, my friend, how are you? I'm not here a lot right now, preferring Zoom meetings at this awful time, and so on, but pc issues are discouraging too. I'm glad I stopped by today, though I won't be staying long. I wish I could hear you sing this lovely (sad) song. :) Beautiful, Yvette.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much for the review and your inquiry, Dawn - sorry so late in responding... let's just say the song was written from the heart... ;) :) But she's getting better. :) Those bright stars are certainly a welcome smile! ;) Take care over there - Yvette :)
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I don't know if you had a tune in mind. Mine worked just jfine. Idon't know what it is but it worked well. I love your chorus. It is perfectly placed. It could be a country song genre. This is a little off the topic, but I can't resist. What do you get when you lay a country song backwards? You get your car back, your farm back, your love back, your marriage back... Isn't that funny. Well written song. A+
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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I don't know if you had a tune in mind. Mine worked just jfine. Idon't know what it is but it worked well. I love your chorus. It is perfectly placed. It could be a country song genre. This is a little off the topic, but I can't resist. What do you get when you lay a country song backwards? You get your car back, your farm back, your love back, your marriage back... Isn't that funny. Well written song. A+
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much for the review, Liz - sorry so late in responding... things have been a little topsy-turvy over here... :) Those bright stars are certainly a welcome smile! ;) Take care out there - Yvette :)
Comment from Loren .
So now I expect to see you on a segment of "Songland" on tv and I can proudly say, "Hey, I knew her when" :) Your talent never ceases to amaze me, Yvette. I personally can't carry a tune and my talent on timing when playing on the piano just leaves people shaking their heads and quietly leaving the room. Therefor, un precise meter is no problem for me. Something I can identify with :) Loren
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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So now I expect to see you on a segment of "Songland" on tv and I can proudly say, "Hey, I knew her when" :) Your talent never ceases to amaze me, Yvette. I personally can't carry a tune and my talent on timing when playing on the piano just leaves people shaking their heads and quietly leaving the room. Therefor, un precise meter is no problem for me. Something I can identify with :) Loren
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much for the review, Loren - sorry so late in responding... let's just say the song was written from the heart... ;) :) But she's getting better. :) Those bright stars are certainly a welcome smile! ;) Take care over there - Yvette :)
Comment from Bill Schott
These song lyrics, A Broken Heat Won't Kill Ya, are compelling as a 'somebody done somebody wrong song'. One imagines there's always a root to them, but hopefully one that has withered.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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These song lyrics, A Broken Heat Won't Kill Ya, are compelling as a 'somebody done somebody wrong song'. One imagines there's always a root to them, but hopefully one that has withered.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Bill, for stopping by on this one -- always so good to hear from you over here! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
It must be nice to pick a tune right out off your head, give it moment to recall that feeling of dying from the one that went away. Yet some have died from a broken heart. It called roulette when you spin the chambers. :) Not bad, Yvette.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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It must be nice to pick a tune right out off your head, give it moment to recall that feeling of dying from the one that went away. Yet some have died from a broken heart. It called roulette when you spin the chambers. :) Not bad, Yvette.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Jose, for stopping by on this one -- always so good to hear from you over here! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sally Law
Yes, this may be one of your best, my dear lady. Outstanding in every way. Beautifully penned and drenched with sadness. I felt this one. Whew.
Nrava!
Sending you my best today as always, and six stars for your crown.
Sal xoxo
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Yes, this may be one of your best, my dear lady. Outstanding in every way. Beautifully penned and drenched with sadness. I felt this one. Whew.
Nrava!
Sending you my best today as always, and six stars for your crown.
Sal xoxo
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much for those beautiful stars, Lady Sal -- it is definitely easy to find a 'melody' when you're immersed in an emotion... ;) :) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - gonna spend some time here today... :) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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You are most welcome e. I've been having major chiropractic work done which had been painful. Today will be session three of four and then an evaluation. It's a lot of work to heal this and exhausting. It was nice to have such a beautiful written poem to review. Take care, me lady!
Sal xoxo
Comment from Xia Thornwood
This is very well done. Despite never hearing it sung, I have the words stuck in my head already. I like that the rhymes were natural, instead of being forced, which is the bane of many songs and poems. The only thing I could see being improved are some of the metaphors. The world fading to black and gray is no longer as powerful because it is overused.
I do appreciate the tight theme of the song that the repeated lines in the chorus give, while you still varied each one.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This is very well done. Despite never hearing it sung, I have the words stuck in my head already. I like that the rhymes were natural, instead of being forced, which is the bane of many songs and poems. The only thing I could see being improved are some of the metaphors. The world fading to black and gray is no longer as powerful because it is overused.
I do appreciate the tight theme of the song that the repeated lines in the chorus give, while you still varied each one.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Xia, for stopping by on this one -- good to see your name again! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Minglement
I cant imagine writing a song! Wow, I love this but it's so sad! I would hope nothing and no one would have the power to steal the will to live. Great job.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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I cant imagine writing a song! Wow, I love this but it's so sad! I would hope nothing and no one would have the power to steal the will to live. Great job.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much for those beautiful stars, Marcia -- songs are something I do rarely as they have to have a 'push' behind them... ;) :) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - gonna spend some time here today... :) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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My pleasure, always :) All is well here. I've been AWOL, too. Trying to get settled after the move. Ugh. Take care :)
Comment from richie b
Yvette,
Having had a broken hear, I understand your poem
completely. You write of the pain and losing the will to
live, the feelings can be suffocating.
It is a lot harder to go all in, on the next relationship.
Your poem will bring back many heart breaking memories.
Thank you for a very well written poem.
Stay well, Stay safe,
Richie
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Yvette,
Having had a broken hear, I understand your poem
completely. You write of the pain and losing the will to
live, the feelings can be suffocating.
It is a lot harder to go all in, on the next relationship.
Your poem will bring back many heart breaking memories.
Thank you for a very well written poem.
Stay well, Stay safe,
Richie
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Richie, for stopping by on this one -- always so good to hear from you over here! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
Even before I read your author notes (I usually read them first) I felt a Tune in the theme rather than a word. You obviously set the correct tone, for me at least. I was 8 years when I experienced my first broken heart. Can't blame her though, she never knew I cared. I was shy. Best regards.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Even before I read your author notes (I usually read them first) I felt a Tune in the theme rather than a word. You obviously set the correct tone, for me at least. I was 8 years when I experienced my first broken heart. Can't blame her though, she never knew I cared. I was shy. Best regards.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Kermit, for stopping by on this one -- that whole 'speaking up' thing makes all the difference in the world! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
