Memory Lane
A Free Verse poem...39 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Sometimes, memories are all you're left with, and no one can take them away. I enjoyed reading your poem, going through your childhood, teen years, and time in WAC. Well done, it was a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Sometimes, memories are all you're left with, and no one can take them away. I enjoyed reading your poem, going through your childhood, teen years, and time in WAC. Well done, it was a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you so much! Appreciate you took the journey with me! xoxo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This song brings a wonderful way to express your poem. Beautiful words sung by an exquisite voice that expresses the meaning of your life or someone else's. I love to listen to musicals, especially about memories. Great poem, Diana. I hope you do post this poem for the contest.
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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This song brings a wonderful way to express your poem. Beautiful words sung by an exquisite voice that expresses the meaning of your life or someone else's. I love to listen to musicals, especially about memories. Great poem, Diana. I hope you do post this poem for the contest.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you! Appreciate you enjoyed this! xoxo
Comment from zanya
A poetic journey in free verse evoking nostalgia and reminiscence of days gone by and the memories, some like 'perfume' and others 'bittersweet '-thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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A poetic journey in free verse evoking nostalgia and reminiscence of days gone by and the memories, some like 'perfume' and others 'bittersweet '-thanks for sharing
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thank you for stopping to take the journey with me! appreciate your kind words and stars!! xoxoxo
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem about a trip down memory lane, to become a first time mother is always scary and beautiful at the same time. From that moment we gathered bittersweet memories.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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A very well-written free verse poem about a trip down memory lane, to become a first time mother is always scary and beautiful at the same time. From that moment we gathered bittersweet memories.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thank you Sandra, appreciate you took time to journey with me! xoxoxo
Comment from Bichon
This was a very lovely poem, Diana. I really enjoyed reading your memories, so thank you for taking me with you down memory road. Our experiences really shape us.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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This was a very lovely poem, Diana. I really enjoyed reading your memories, so thank you for taking me with you down memory road. Our experiences really shape us.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Yes, they do shape us. But often the bad, can send us in the right direction. appreciate you took this journey with me! xoxoxo
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very poignant poem. I really enjoyed reading it and could relate to quite a lot of it. I expect most readers can.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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This is a very poignant poem. I really enjoyed reading it and could relate to quite a lot of it. I expect most readers can.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thanks Jen! appreciate you stopped to read. xoxoxo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You have deep fond memories of your childhood here Diana and I felt the emotion in your words and the love you have for those who cared for you, much enjoyed, this is a fine free-write with a wonderful silky flow, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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You have deep fond memories of your childhood here Diana and I felt the emotion in your words and the love you have for those who cared for you, much enjoyed, this is a fine free-write with a wonderful silky flow, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thanks, Dolly! appreciate you took this journey with me!! xoxoxo
Comment from Margaret Bednar
I think this is filled with a lot of imagery and memories that would be fun to play with... I feel there are a lot of superfluous words and at times reads like sentences. I do love free verse (it is what I write) - but poetic devices are still necessary and I'd like to see more employed here. I think you are close to a very good poem.
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reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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I think this is filled with a lot of imagery and memories that would be fun to play with... I feel there are a lot of superfluous words and at times reads like sentences. I do love free verse (it is what I write) - but poetic devices are still necessary and I'd like to see more employed here. I think you are close to a very good poem.
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Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thank you Margaret! appreciate you took time to read and leave me feedback on this! :) xoxo
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This sounds like the kind of poem that could be the frontispiece or dedication of a life story, fully written at some point. I like the imagery that comes from sitting in a grandfather's lap, and how he becomes the father who appears to have been lost at some point. The Women's Army Corps sounds kind of intriguing--and difficult!
Favorite lines:
where the deepest of love
could be found
on grandpa's lap,
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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This sounds like the kind of poem that could be the frontispiece or dedication of a life story, fully written at some point. I like the imagery that comes from sitting in a grandfather's lap, and how he becomes the father who appears to have been lost at some point. The Women's Army Corps sounds kind of intriguing--and difficult!
Favorite lines:
where the deepest of love
could be found
on grandpa's lap,
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thank you Crystie! My father was a bit of a vagabond in my early life, but my grandparents were right there to fill the gap. The WAC was the original women's corp in the Army and it ended as such the year I got out in 1978. Everyone was called enlisted men and women after that. appreciate you enjoyed the journey with me! xoxo
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I don't know why, because it was clearly announced "memory lane" , but I found this one rather confusing. I kept wanting to invent new people and seed the poem with extra generations.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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I don't know why, because it was clearly announced "memory lane" , but I found this one rather confusing. I kept wanting to invent new people and seed the poem with extra generations.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Oh boy, I have several generations going on now! Appreciate you stopped to read and offered this precious feedback. :)
