In This Moment
A Free Verse poem...20 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
So lovely, like a whispered, worshipping prayer. I just love your feminine side, and how you embraced all of who are in this one. A grateful, beautiful person.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxoxoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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So lovely, like a whispered, worshipping prayer. I just love your feminine side, and how you embraced all of who are in this one. A grateful, beautiful person.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you my friend! I could linger long on a day like this! appreciate your precious feedback and stars! glad you enjoyed!! xoxoxoxo
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely free verse, Diana as you take us with you 'while gathering fragrant blooming lilacs'. You've let your thoughts flow with your pen and that's what I love about free verse, done well, as this is. Lovely,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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A lovely free verse, Diana as you take us with you 'while gathering fragrant blooming lilacs'. You've let your thoughts flow with your pen and that's what I love about free verse, done well, as this is. Lovely,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you so much! I love the scent of lilacs, nothing says Spring like they do! Haha!! xoxo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Diana, your image is absolutely gorgeous. The words in your poem are delightful. I love lilacs in the first place so to see a woman holding a basket full of lilacs is welcomed. Beautiful poem. He is an awesome God.
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Diana, your image is absolutely gorgeous. The words in your poem are delightful. I love lilacs in the first place so to see a woman holding a basket full of lilacs is welcomed. Beautiful poem. He is an awesome God.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Thanks, understood and corrected :) appreciate your help!
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hahahaha!! I thought i was answering another! appreciate you enjoyed and you are deserving of a nomination for always being there to support me :) xoxoxox
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I appreciate your support, too! Thank you!
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xoxo!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Diana. Very nice. Your free verse poem is well constructed and very readable. The picture is nice, but I can see your verbal images.
In the last stanza you add a spiritual image as well.
Well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Hello Diana. Very nice. Your free verse poem is well constructed and very readable. The picture is nice, but I can see your verbal images.
In the last stanza you add a spiritual image as well.
Well done.
Robert
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Thanks Robert! Appreciate that you enjoyed!! xoxo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A beautiful memory of a moment to hold onto -- those moments will be coming back soon! ;) :) Thanx for the refreshing feel of the freedom of the garden, my lady! ;) :) Yvette
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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A beautiful memory of a moment to hold onto -- those moments will be coming back soon! ;) :) Thanx for the refreshing feel of the freedom of the garden, my lady! ;) :) Yvette
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Hopefully, and actually our lilacs are just beginning to come to life. By next week, they should be in full bloom! Appreciate you enjoyed!! xoxo
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a description of all the sights and sounds of a perfect moment in nature. It is something that we won't see much of now in these days of COVID-19. It is a good entry for the Potlatch prompt.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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This is a description of all the sights and sounds of a perfect moment in nature. It is something that we won't see much of now in these days of COVID-19. It is a good entry for the Potlatch prompt.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Thank you so much! So happy you enjoyed!! Trying to keep that virus at bay! So looking forward to a better summer. You stay well also! xoxo
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Diana,
You are most kindly welcome. I think we all are looking forward to a freer summer.
Joan
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Amen! lol! xoxo
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Diana, you have so beautifully showed us the beauty of living in the moment. The sounds and beauty you have described perfectly and the picture is glorious. Four lovely stanzas in free verse and I could not name one that outshines the others. Well done - a lovely read. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Hello Diana, you have so beautifully showed us the beauty of living in the moment. The sounds and beauty you have described perfectly and the picture is glorious. Four lovely stanzas in free verse and I could not name one that outshines the others. Well done - a lovely read. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Wow! Thank you for your precious review! I appreciate you enjoyed!! xoxo
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
In This Moment
by Diana L Crawford
Hello, Diana,
Lovely poem for the Club entry for the "Author's Choice--Week challenge. You describe some beautiful images with your well chosen words.
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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In This Moment
by Diana L Crawford
Hello, Diana,
Lovely poem for the Club entry for the "Author's Choice--Week challenge. You describe some beautiful images with your well chosen words.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Thank you so much! Free Verse is my favorite style for sure. Appreciate you enjoyed this! xoxo
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Many beautiful images, and I think it has great potential. My input for the "cons" is while this poem, the flow seemed a bit off (to me) and I realized that these stanzas are complete sentences wrapped in a poetic format. For example in stanza 2 - Do you need to say "I hear" as isn't that what we are doing when an echo occurs? I find (to my way of writing poetry) the use of way to many "the's"
Beneath sky blue, silly songs echo ... (and soon)
I realize "who am I to say such things"... but that is what this site does. Encourages us to critique pros and cons. It is subjective, so keep that in mind.
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reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Many beautiful images, and I think it has great potential. My input for the "cons" is while this poem, the flow seemed a bit off (to me) and I realized that these stanzas are complete sentences wrapped in a poetic format. For example in stanza 2 - Do you need to say "I hear" as isn't that what we are doing when an echo occurs? I find (to my way of writing poetry) the use of way to many "the's"
Beneath sky blue, silly songs echo ... (and soon)
I realize "who am I to say such things"... but that is what this site does. Encourages us to critique pros and cons. It is subjective, so keep that in mind.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Thank you! Your advise is greatly appreciated! I considered not putting in the ?I hear? in that part too, so I?m glad you mentioned this. xoxo
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You are welcome
Comment from Kathleen S.
Very nice and quiet moving poetry, it reminds me of being out in nature by a slow moving riverbed, that fills you with peace. I can feel the gratitude for God's blessings as well in your words. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Very nice and quiet moving poetry, it reminds me of being out in nature by a slow moving riverbed, that fills you with peace. I can feel the gratitude for God's blessings as well in your words. Well done.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Thank you so much! Appreciate your kind words!! xoxo
