haiku (winged chaos shimmers)
Dare you not to be mesmerized...16 total reviews
Comment from patsolstad
What a lovely 'take' on this perhaps not uncommon happening. I wanted to say winged (two syllables), maybe because it is easier to say than the one-syllable pronunciation. I am not familiar with the term 'aces.' Can you tell me what you meant by it? I ADORE 'moth spotlight disco.' EXCELLENT!!!
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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What a lovely 'take' on this perhaps not uncommon happening. I wanted to say winged (two syllables), maybe because it is easier to say than the one-syllable pronunciation. I am not familiar with the term 'aces.' Can you tell me what you meant by it? I ADORE 'moth spotlight disco.' EXCELLENT!!!
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Aces are top-notch pilots... Thank you for your review!
Comment from Bill Schott
This nature 5-7-5, Winged Chaos Shimmers, has the right set up and finds the dazzling death lights that bring the moths in to draw too close to the heat.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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This nature 5-7-5, Winged Chaos Shimmers, has the right set up and finds the dazzling death lights that bring the moths in to draw too close to the heat.
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
haiku (winged chaos shimmers)
Hello my friend
I live your entry for the Write a Nature 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. The presentation is beautiful. The Syllables count is right. Nice connection between lines. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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haiku (winged chaos shimmers)
Hello my friend
I live your entry for the Write a Nature 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. The presentation is beautiful. The Syllables count is right. Nice connection between lines. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you, Gypsy, your comments mean a lot to me!!
Comment from DeboraDyess
Oh, WOW! That's amazing. :)
I used to love to watch the moths darting in and out of the light...right up until my hubby told me that some of those moths' were bats! lol. Not really - still love it. :)
A wonderful entry to the contest!
Blessings, peace and health,
Deb
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Oh, WOW! That's amazing. :)
I used to love to watch the moths darting in and out of the light...right up until my hubby told me that some of those moths' were bats! lol. Not really - still love it. :)
A wonderful entry to the contest!
Blessings, peace and health,
Deb
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Shirley McLain
Very clever little poem. I've watched those summer bugs for many years and have never thought of writing poetry about them. Great job. Good luck in the contest. Shirley
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Very clever little poem. I've watched those summer bugs for many years and have never thought of writing poetry about them. Great job. Good luck in the contest. Shirley
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from Minglement
I enjoyed this lighthearted entry for the 5-7-5 haiku on nature. You have made a unique observation here, likening the swarming moth to the appearance of a disco ball. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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I enjoyed this lighthearted entry for the 5-7-5 haiku on nature. You have made a unique observation here, likening the swarming moth to the appearance of a disco ball. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you so much!!
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My pleasure. It's doing well in the contest :) Take care.
Comment from Dawn Munro
LOL -- I think this is an image that will stay with me a long time. There are certainly some beautiful moths, but I never considered their flight around light to be dancing, and it is, it really is!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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LOL -- I think this is an image that will stay with me a long time. There are certainly some beautiful moths, but I never considered their flight around light to be dancing, and it is, it really is!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written nature 5-7-5 poem about the flying moths around the light with tiny wings they have a spotlight disco in the evening sky the only concert for miles to enjoy.
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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A very well-written nature 5-7-5 poem about the flying moths around the light with tiny wings they have a spotlight disco in the evening sky the only concert for miles to enjoy.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Thanx for your review on this shorty, Sandra -- you have a wonderful weekend over there! ;) Yvette
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is in great form, Mystery Author. Your syllables are correct per line. The image is great. I like the black background (the night) with the white font (the light), Your words sum up this 'dance' nicely. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Your contest entry is in great form, Mystery Author. Your syllables are correct per line. The image is great. I like the black background (the night) with the white font (the light), Your words sum up this 'dance' nicely. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Thank you for such thoughtful comments! May you have a beautiful day!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The first two lines of this Haiku are well grammatically described a scene in action from Nature and the third line is a fantastic description in action, but I think it does not appear to have an 'Aha' moment.
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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The first two lines of this Haiku are well grammatically described a scene in action from Nature and the third line is a fantastic description in action, but I think it does not appear to have an 'Aha' moment.
Typo:
haiku (winged chaos shimmers) (Haiku (Winged Chaos Shimmers) )
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Thank you.