Resplendent rays
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Comment from Ogden
That is all well and good for the dancing flowers, but what can those resplendent rays do for the millions of shut-ins who have been told to avoid exposure to the outside world?
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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That is all well and good for the dancing flowers, but what can those resplendent rays do for the millions of shut-ins who have been told to avoid exposure to the outside world?
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Don, a very good query!
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Yes, it must be very frustrating for them.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a lovely poem illustrated with a lovely picture. Golden rays and golden flowers--what a beautiful match in words ad thoughts. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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This is a lovely poem illustrated with a lovely picture. Golden rays and golden flowers--what a beautiful match in words ad thoughts. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Rebecca, thank you.
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My pleasure.
Comment from DeboraDyess
I love the image of flowers dancing for the joy of the sun!How beautiful and well written this is. I cannot think of anything to suggest or correct because it's perfectly lovely!
Blessings, health and peace,
Deb
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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I love the image of flowers dancing for the joy of the sun!How beautiful and well written this is. I cannot think of anything to suggest or correct because it's perfectly lovely!
Blessings, health and peace,
Deb
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Deb, I do thank you very much!
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Lovely piece and a beautiful reminder to be grateful for the beauty that surrounds us. This poem is especially meaningful as we all hunker down in our individual spaces during the pandemic. The picture you chose is beautiful and your words are full of joy.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Lovely piece and a beautiful reminder to be grateful for the beauty that surrounds us. This poem is especially meaningful as we all hunker down in our individual spaces during the pandemic. The picture you chose is beautiful and your words are full of joy.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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I very much appreciate your kind thoughts.
Comment from enitsalemap
Flowers dancing in the sun is a beautiful image that intrigues me. In this time of darkness an turmoil to bask in sunshine seems dance worthy to me. Longer summer days are coming and I hope that we may all find the inspiration to dance like your flowers.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Flowers dancing in the sun is a beautiful image that intrigues me. In this time of darkness an turmoil to bask in sunshine seems dance worthy to me. Longer summer days are coming and I hope that we may all find the inspiration to dance like your flowers.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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I am very appreciative of your review and commentss
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Resplendent rays
Hello, my friend,
A fine entry for the Write a Nature 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. The lines are connected grammatically and that is good, but there is no juxtaposition between the top two lines and the last line (satori). The essence of haiku is 'cutting' (KIRU) represented by the juxtaposition of two images or ideas separated by a (KIREJI) dash or ellipsis (~, ...)
our sun rose today
with resplendent golden rays ~
breezy flowers dance or sprightly flowers dance
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Resplendent rays
Hello, my friend,
A fine entry for the Write a Nature 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. The lines are connected grammatically and that is good, but there is no juxtaposition between the top two lines and the last line (satori). The essence of haiku is 'cutting' (KIRU) represented by the juxtaposition of two images or ideas separated by a (KIREJI) dash or ellipsis (~, ...)
our sun rose today
with resplendent golden rays ~
breezy flowers dance or sprightly flowers dance
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Gypsy, thank you for this very valuable lesson. I admit I do not do haiku or senru very often simply not in my genre of style, but I do try and thus I get great lessons from someone, such as yourself, who has mastered this artful poetic style, thank you!
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You're welcome 😊
Comment from Valerie Fish
A lovely happy haiku, even without the picture, I could imagine the scene, the 'dancing flowers'. 'Resplendent''s a good strong description. Well Done
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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A lovely happy haiku, even without the picture, I could imagine the scene, the 'dancing flowers'. 'Resplendent''s a good strong description. Well Done
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Valerie, thank you, delight in your weekend of discoveries forthcoming.
Comment from Minglement
This is a lovely entry for the 5-7-5 nature contest. I enjoyed the personification of the flowers dancing in the sunshine. Beautiful presentation, as well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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This is a lovely entry for the 5-7-5 nature contest. I enjoyed the personification of the flowers dancing in the sunshine. Beautiful presentation, as well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Minglement, thank you, I realize while this one is not perfect ---the attempt was made in earnest.
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Not to worry, it's doing well in the contest. We learn by doing. I enjoyed it. Take care :)
Comment from Julia Telep
The poem is really beautiful and I love the photo that went along with it. I love the words you used to describe those rays. Great Job!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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The poem is really beautiful and I love the photo that went along with it. I love the words you used to describe those rays. Great Job!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Julia, I am very appreciative of your kind words.
Comment from royowen
I suppose you'll be heading into your spring right now, into that great season of renewal, of wondrous blooms and brand new growth. A beautifully written entry in this 5/7/5 nature poetry contest, great entry, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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I suppose you'll be heading into your spring right now, into that great season of renewal, of wondrous blooms and brand new growth. A beautifully written entry in this 5/7/5 nature poetry contest, great entry, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Yes are just beginning the sunny days and after noon thunder showers, aha!
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Well done