Dream a Better World
5/7/5 Senryu for contest9 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Mystery poet , I gave you your 2vote!
I found your poem an up lifting wish.
Due to the virus threat good part of humanity has been in lockdown for weeks now and this has not gone un-noticed by Mother Nature and her ( other) children ..
...wildlife has been reclaiming lost territory ..
I can't think of a better way to celebrate Earth Day !
Dolphins and fish have returned to Venezia and the water is clean and clear
... foxes have been photographed resting in oxford gardens ....
...animals are wandering in rural towns once their habitat..
...big cats like pumas are stalking the streets of Santiago (Chile) etc
I really love the choice of your artwork too..
a beautiful entry on ever level !
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Ciao Mystery poet , I gave you your 2vote!
I found your poem an up lifting wish.
Due to the virus threat good part of humanity has been in lockdown for weeks now and this has not gone un-noticed by Mother Nature and her ( other) children ..
...wildlife has been reclaiming lost territory ..
I can't think of a better way to celebrate Earth Day !
Dolphins and fish have returned to Venezia and the water is clean and clear
... foxes have been photographed resting in oxford gardens ....
...animals are wandering in rural towns once their habitat..
...big cats like pumas are stalking the streets of Santiago (Chile) etc
I really love the choice of your artwork too..
a beautiful entry on ever level !
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and vote! You are very kind.
Comment from samandlancelot
You certainly have the idea many others have; let's get this virus over with and breathe clean air again. Those required masks are so unhealthy -- breathing in our own exhaled breath. Yuk!
Excellent entry for the senryu poetry contest.
Patricia
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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You certainly have the idea many others have; let's get this virus over with and breathe clean air again. Those required masks are so unhealthy -- breathing in our own exhaled breath. Yuk!
Excellent entry for the senryu poetry contest.
Patricia
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Thanks for sharing this well written poem with an important concept. Let's dream and pray for a better world and do our part to help make it so one day at a time. Bill
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thanks for sharing this well written poem with an important concept. Let's dream and pray for a better world and do our part to help make it so one day at a time. Bill
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
I don't agree with the poem but as a written piece it fits the Senryu style and is five/seven/five syllables. After a dream hopefully the dreamer wakes up: clean air, green earth, and love on it's own do not make a better world, and plagues come and go throughout history. giovanni
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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I don't agree with the poem but as a written piece it fits the Senryu style and is five/seven/five syllables. After a dream hopefully the dreamer wakes up: clean air, green earth, and love on it's own do not make a better world, and plagues come and go throughout history. giovanni
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review.
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y/w giovanni
Comment from J.R. Preston
Happy Earth Day! What a beautiful little poem to commemorate the special day. I thought it flowed nicely and will be a perfect entry for the contest. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Happy Earth Day! What a beautiful little poem to commemorate the special day. I thought it flowed nicely and will be a perfect entry for the contest. Best of luck!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from LisaMay
Happy Earth Day to you too! I hope we can look after her better than we did before - as in your poem, may we dream, and make, a better world.
(I like that pre-Raphaelite style illustration you have chosen. I hope she is asleep, dreaming, and not dead of the plague.)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Happy Earth Day to you too! I hope we can look after her better than we did before - as in your poem, may we dream, and make, a better world.
(I like that pre-Raphaelite style illustration you have chosen. I hope she is asleep, dreaming, and not dead of the plague.)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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LoL...no she is sleeping not dead.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Phew!
Comment from Rylie McBride
What a perfect poem for earth day and the current situation in the world today! I could feel a lot of emotion in this poem. Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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What a perfect poem for earth day and the current situation in the world today! I could feel a lot of emotion in this poem. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from RodG
A senyru that gives us HOPE on this Earth Day. Many of us have such dreams where Earth is spared, improved, and "greened" again and the virus has disappeared from our lives.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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A senyru that gives us HOPE on this Earth Day. Many of us have such dreams where Earth is spared, improved, and "greened" again and the virus has disappeared from our lives.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from January L'Angelle
This is a beautiful poem. It follows the 5-7-5 perfectly. The poem is very timely considering what is happening these days. The last line: "Plague, thing of the past" I would have put a comma after Plague. I don't do these Senryu poems so I don't know about their punctuation but that's just my suggestion. I loved the poems message. Well done. Respectfully, -January L.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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This is a beautiful poem. It follows the 5-7-5 perfectly. The poem is very timely considering what is happening these days. The last line: "Plague, thing of the past" I would have put a comma after Plague. I don't do these Senryu poems so I don't know about their punctuation but that's just my suggestion. I loved the poems message. Well done. Respectfully, -January L.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind feedback 😊 you are right, a comma goes there. With haiku it's not necessary but helpful at times. Take care my friend.
