Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Drozig's Good News is Questioned"Eric And The Lost City of Atlantis
31 total reviews
Comment from Rylie McBride
I really enjoyed the chapter. I thought it was very well written and flowed nicely. To my understanding, as I have read no previous chapters, I perceived Eric to be young (12-15) from his dialogue and actions. He obeys authority and when he talks about his history, the things he says are very much what I feel younger people would say. I thought I let you know this, just in case that was not what you were going for. Great work! Thanks for sharing it!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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I really enjoyed the chapter. I thought it was very well written and flowed nicely. To my understanding, as I have read no previous chapters, I perceived Eric to be young (12-15) from his dialogue and actions. He obeys authority and when he talks about his history, the things he says are very much what I feel younger people would say. I thought I let you know this, just in case that was not what you were going for. Great work! Thanks for sharing it!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Hello, Rylie, thank you so much for reading this part. Yes, Eric has just turned 12 years old, and he is my grandson, (who would love to be doing all this! lol.) That you could come into the story at this stage and be able to 'get him' spot on, is so encouraging. Have a wonderful day and stay safe! :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Today we are learning about the perfect habitats from preserving life :"The most important thing the planet will need to have is the right water. The mermen must be able to breathe and swim in it. Making sure the waters are safe for their kind, and that the food they need is plentiful in the seas and on land, is at the top of the list."
"Oh, I thought water would be the same everywhere,"
Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Today we are learning about the perfect habitats from preserving life :"The most important thing the planet will need to have is the right water. The mermen must be able to breathe and swim in it. Making sure the waters are safe for their kind, and that the food they need is plentiful in the seas and on land, is at the top of the list."
"Oh, I thought water would be the same everywhere,"
Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, Iza, for this lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading this part. Take care, and stay safe, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from alexisleech
I love the way you entwine little bits of Eric's 'real' life into the story, and I'm sure he does too, because it makes the story come to life even more. Of course Drozig hasn't made a mistake - or has he? I can't wait to find out! No nits that I could see, just great writing from start to finish.
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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I love the way you entwine little bits of Eric's 'real' life into the story, and I'm sure he does too, because it makes the story come to life even more. Of course Drozig hasn't made a mistake - or has he? I can't wait to find out! No nits that I could see, just great writing from start to finish.
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Alexis. It's easy to bring his real self into it, because the character of Eric is like the real one. Except he can't time travel and his Herbie doesn't fly and talk! LOL. Thank you, sweet thing, for another six stars, I am so humbled by your generosity. Biggest hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Excellent image and chapter to go with it, Sandra.
-I like the opening section about the water,
and the difference for the aqua-beings.
-Eric had good thoughts about it, too.
-He will be very pleased:)
-There is excitement as the being's ship arrives.
-They are anxious to see what Drozig has
discovered for them, and expectations are high.
-I am sure the beings enjoyed Eric's banter, too,
it was very entertaining.
-Of course, with high's come low's.
-The beings are not too happy about looking
at a black void with Drozig insisting there was
something there, and no one could see it!
-I am guessing the drone searchers sent back images,
but if it isn't visible to the naked eye, I'm not sure
the beings are going to want to embark on any journey.
-Great suspense at the end; I will be pulling for Drozig!!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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-Excellent image and chapter to go with it, Sandra.
-I like the opening section about the water,
and the difference for the aqua-beings.
-Eric had good thoughts about it, too.
-He will be very pleased:)
-There is excitement as the being's ship arrives.
-They are anxious to see what Drozig has
discovered for them, and expectations are high.
-I am sure the beings enjoyed Eric's banter, too,
it was very entertaining.
-Of course, with high's come low's.
-The beings are not too happy about looking
at a black void with Drozig insisting there was
something there, and no one could see it!
-I am guessing the drone searchers sent back images,
but if it isn't visible to the naked eye, I'm not sure
the beings are going to want to embark on any journey.
-Great suspense at the end; I will be pulling for Drozig!!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Thank you so very much for this wonderful review, and all those shiny stars, Pam. I'm delighted you enjoyed this part. I'm rooting for Drozig, too!! LOL Sending you a big hug, my friend, thank you. :)) Sandra xxx
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You are very welcome and deserving, Sandra. I was surprised to see the crab on Tues.:) Hope everything is okay.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Could Drozig have made a mistake? Good grief, Charlie Brown,
does the sun shine, the moon glow, and stars twinkle?
Drozig is as reliable as starlight.
I love the idea of a fold in space, like a wrinkle in time.
The aqua people's new planet will be unseen and safe from spying eyes.
Eric's concern for his friend Zig is perfect and there's a nice inclusion of some science lessons, too.
"He he made a mistake?" [Has]
Your story should spark interest in the wonders of space.
Well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Hello Sandra,
Could Drozig have made a mistake? Good grief, Charlie Brown,
does the sun shine, the moon glow, and stars twinkle?
Drozig is as reliable as starlight.
I love the idea of a fold in space, like a wrinkle in time.
The aqua people's new planet will be unseen and safe from spying eyes.
Eric's concern for his friend Zig is perfect and there's a nice inclusion of some science lessons, too.
"He he made a mistake?" [Has]
Your story should spark interest in the wonders of space.
Well done.
Robert
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Of course he can't! He's as clever as I am!! lol. Thank you so much for another of your wonderful, fun reviews, Robert. And another for the 6 stars and picking up that nit! I've sorted that one out!! lol. I'm ahead of myself this week, next Sunday post is all ready and raring to go. :)) Thank you, my friend. Have a lovely day, and take care. :) Sandra xx
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Sandramitchell,
Nice piece in continuation having smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the facts about the earth and the possibilities on the future planet through conversation between Eric and Drozig.
Interesting!
I'm looking for the next part of this voyage.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Hello Sandramitchell,
Nice piece in continuation having smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the facts about the earth and the possibilities on the future planet through conversation between Eric and Drozig.
Interesting!
I'm looking for the next part of this voyage.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, RP, for another lovely review and for pointing out what you liked about it. That is very encouraging!! Have a lovely day, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Sandra, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from tfawcus
The fold in space is a great idea. Definitely a leap of faith for those who haven't seen or experienced such a thing. No wonder they're cautious!
I thought your explanation of water and its variations was excellent. Very clear.
I loved Eric's logical explanation of history (once each day was over, everything that had happened would then be history).
Suggestions
Add hyphen: Earth had below(-)freezing cold water
Add comma: A link was made between them(,) and Kon's face came on the screen.
It wasn't long before they were under way (underway)
Awkward phrasing: he told them about the things he knew a lot about and that was his Internet games, Mobile phones, Ipads and his PlayStation. (Maybe: he told them about the things he knew a lot about: internet games, Mobile phones, Ipads and his PlayStation).
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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The fold in space is a great idea. Definitely a leap of faith for those who haven't seen or experienced such a thing. No wonder they're cautious!
I thought your explanation of water and its variations was excellent. Very clear.
I loved Eric's logical explanation of history (once each day was over, everything that had happened would then be history).
Suggestions
Add hyphen: Earth had below(-)freezing cold water
Add comma: A link was made between them(,) and Kon's face came on the screen.
It wasn't long before they were under way (underway)
Awkward phrasing: he told them about the things he knew a lot about and that was his Internet games, Mobile phones, Ipads and his PlayStation. (Maybe: he told them about the things he knew a lot about: internet games, Mobile phones, Ipads and his PlayStation).
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Hi again! LOL! I've made the corrections, and made the change in that sentence, thank you so very much for all that, Tony! Your reviews are fabulous and I really appreciate the time and thought you put into them. Sending another hug!! Thank you, also, for the six shiny stars! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ross E Silke
I think our Canadian English is the same as in UK so it was written well from my end. I always like space expedition stories and the picture caught me eye so well detailed. Your characters are well developed and have very creative names that help draw in the reader that sound other-wordly like Drozig. I could relate to Eric in this. My favourite line was "and that was his Internet games, Mobile phones, Ipads and his PlayStation."-Somehow I can really relate to that, lol. The story is compelling and sounds like a good read for young adults/teens. You develop the plot well and I do not see any grammatical or spelling errors. A great quest
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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I think our Canadian English is the same as in UK so it was written well from my end. I always like space expedition stories and the picture caught me eye so well detailed. Your characters are well developed and have very creative names that help draw in the reader that sound other-wordly like Drozig. I could relate to Eric in this. My favourite line was "and that was his Internet games, Mobile phones, Ipads and his PlayStation."-Somehow I can really relate to that, lol. The story is compelling and sounds like a good read for young adults/teens. You develop the plot well and I do not see any grammatical or spelling errors. A great quest
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Hello, Ross. Thank you so much for this very complimentary review, I'm delighted you could come into it and enjoy it at this stage. Yes, Canadian English is the same as the UKs, I'm often having to explain that the meaning of some our words, although spelt the same, are totally different in meaning. My biggest shock when reading a story on here, was the use of thongs, that really threw me! How does a person use a thong on their feet? LOL. Thanks again, for reading, I really appreciated it. Sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
A great chapter Sandra. I found this to be delightfully educational as well. You had the character of Drozig show a great level of patience as he explained the many differences of water to Eric. And it was a refreshing surprise to hear that the searchers had found a compatible planet for Kon, who wanted to check things out before he told his people. This was of course understandable. Great job, big hugs and smiles, be well, be safe. Alie.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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A great chapter Sandra. I found this to be delightfully educational as well. You had the character of Drozig show a great level of patience as he explained the many differences of water to Eric. And it was a refreshing surprise to hear that the searchers had found a compatible planet for Kon, who wanted to check things out before he told his people. This was of course understandable. Great job, big hugs and smiles, be well, be safe. Alie.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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What a lovely review, Alie, thank you so much! Now Drozig must prove it to Kon. Watch out for the next part, my friend. Big hugs, and smiles back! Take care and stay safe. :) Sandra xx
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You are so welcome Sandra, I do so hope Eric is doing well and not getting bored, this was so enjoyable. Be safe.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I hope this new planet is a fit. I like the thought of the mermen going to another planet instead of becoming extinct. You did a great job. Take care and stay well. Shirley
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I hope this new planet is a fit. I like the thought of the mermen going to another planet instead of becoming extinct. You did a great job. Take care and stay well. Shirley
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you so very much for the lovely six stars, Shirley! Yes, although mermaids have been mentioned through the years, no one really knows the truth about them. I do!! LOL. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying this story, my friend, not far to go now and you'll know everything there is to know about the aqua-beings. I'll share it with you!! Thank you for you continued support, my friend, I really appreciate it. Big hugs. Sandra xxx
