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Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4

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Eric And The Lost City of Atlantis

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Comment from aryr
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This was absolutely amazing, Sandra. You definitely provided all the details of each step. And each step was followed correctly by the next one. I loved the picture, Eric will indeed be proud. Whew it was a relief that Herbie was not going to be scraped and that Drozig was simply thinking that it would be interesting to have the scientists learn from him. It was great that everyone was being helpful to others (something that is missing in our world). Big hugs and smiles, be safe, be well. Oh I think in the last full paragraph you missed the 'i' in Drozig. Great job.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you so much, Alie, for this wonderful review! Your review really made my day, my friend. And thank you for telling me about the missing 'I' another reviewer told me about it, but I couldn't find it. You made it so much easier and now it has been corrected. So thank you for that, too. Have a lovely day, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by aryr on 14-Apr-2020
    It was great reading, entertaining and educational and so enjoyed. Be well.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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Eric is going to love this one, Sandra! Outer space is what the kids are interested in now it seems. What a great picture. How did you learn to do that? Do you wait until the book is done to show it to him? I notice a few behavioral hints tucked in between the lines. Good job! Well done, Dear. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    I didn't do it, my friend did it for me. I just had Chris take a photo of Eric and send it to me and my friend magically put him in that 'suit' and put him on the bridge of a picture I managed to find on Pixabay. Clever, isn't he!! lol. I think Eric will be more than pleased when he sees it. Thank you so much for the six stars, my dear friend, and the lovely review. Eric never wants to see the story until I've finished and published it. I do get him to choose the book cover picture my friend does for me, though. He has a choice of three. Thanks again, my dear friend. Have a lovely day. Sandra xxx :))
Comment from rspoet
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Hello Sandra,
This is like Andy Hardy meets Star Trek. When I was young,
it was Flash Gordon, then came Star Wars, and Star Trek,
now it's one of the Epic Adventures of Eric.
(love the Epic/Eric in the title, with the 'p' moving up one letter to 'r')
It's good to see that there is humor in other places of the universe.
God must have a great sense of humor, after all, he created you and me. :)
Great interplay with Drozig, Eric and Herbie and lots of sections to make kids laugh, like having the body parts switch places when reassembled, and eating all that chocolate and ice cream.

"Drozig sat watching the open shield and pointed to Eric where the aqua-beings would be when it arrived."
Perhaps:
Drozig sat watching the open shield and pointed [out] to Eric where the aqua-being['s ship] would be when it arrived. (or pointed to where)
Another exciting chapter.
Well done.
Stay safe, my friend.
Robert

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Hello Robert,
    Thank you so much for picking those points out, I've made the changes. Do you think 'Marvel' would be interested?? LOL,
    I hadn't noticed the ERic and EPic That was clever of me without even knowing I was, lol! Thank you so much for another lovely review, and all the stars, your fun review has put a big smile on my face. You stay safe as well. my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
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It is such a catching story, Sandra, and not just for children! I feel myself being addicted to it by now. A particular exciting chapter, sitting in a space ship and taking off to a new planet! Wow, I am jealous of Eric.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    I'm jealous too, I have always wanted to go into outer-space. Perhaps if I get another life, I'll be an astronaut then. :)) lol. Thank you so much for the six stars, and the lovely review, my friend. Have a lovely day! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by Marjon van Bruggen on 13-Apr-2020
    Welcome, Sandra.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Oh no, is a disaster going to happen? You did a great job as usual and I'm giving you one of my sixes. I am enjoying your Grandson's story very much. These are great kid adventure books. Are you planning to publish?
Shirley

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you so much, Shirley for your lovely review, and virtual six. I laughed my socks off when I saw what you'd written and gave me a five, I did exactly the same thing last week!! We had a good laugh about it. It was better than the time I did think I'd given a 5 and the darned thing jumped to a 3! Talk about embarrassed, but another good laugh once I'd put it right. These stars do their own thing most of the time! Yes, I'll be publishing it, I hope to have it done in time to give a copy to my grandson for his Birthday at the end of October. I want to put them all together. Four stories now. :) I hope you had a lovely Easter, my friend, have a really lovely day! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by Shirley McLain on 13-Apr-2020
    Great about publishing. I would like one for my Grandson when you get through with the process. I had a happy but quiet Easter. All is well here. Shirley
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    I'll let you know when it's finished and on Amazon. Thanks so much, Shirley. xxx
reply by Shirley McLain on 13-Apr-2020
    Thanks, you already have a promised purchase.
Comment from Pantygynt
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An age old question popped back into my mind as Eric was, how shall I put it, absorbed into that space suit. The question? Yes, the same old one, how do you go to the loo in that lot?

I am not sure I would want to live in a society where everyone could read my thoughts, even if I able to read those of others. I suppose the trick is to think about something innocuous like chocolate!

Another fun episode. Keep them coming.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    LOL! Trust you to think that one up! No, I wouldn't like people digging around in my thoughts either. Thanks for reading, Jim, and the fun review. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from lyenochka
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Since I'm a trekkie, I had no trouble imagining Eric being beamed up to the ship. And also, Galaxy Quest has a scene where some ooze covers the travelers into a tight-fitting space traveling pod. So that was easy to imagine. Looking forward to his next adventure on this new trip.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    I'm a trekkie too, and I really wish I could travel the universe. How wonderful that would be! So until then, I live it through writing my grandson's adventures. :)) I don't think I've ever watched Galaxy Quest, is it a new one? Thanks so much for the lovely review, my friend. Have a lovely day. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by lyenochka on 13-Apr-2020
    If you're a trekkie, you HAVE to watch Galaxy Quest - it's absolutely hysterical as it spoofs all of the old Star Trek idiosyncrasies. It came out in 1999.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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Again, another great chapter in this full adventure book. The plot moves fast, and the characters speak in such a way that they are believable. Much fun!

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you, Rebecca, for another lovely review. Your comments about how believable they speech is, was so encouraging. Thank you. Have a lovely day. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 13-Apr-2020
    You're quite welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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This was an exciting chapter, Sandra. The action seemed non-stop. I like the way all the characters interacted in a positive way. Interesting that Eric was allowed to accompany them, but he would return in the same time he left. Your 'sci-fi' things worked well to spped them off in search of the home for the Aqua-beings. I look forward to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you so much for this lovely review, Jan! Your reviews always mean a lot to me, because they are most encouraging. If you ever told me something didn't work, I can take them on board knowing you are telling me the truth. Thank you, my friend. Have a lovely day! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from JudyE
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Another fascinating chapter. Wouldn't it be great in these times to have PPE suits that just flowed up the body like Eric's space suit?

Just a few small points:
Drozig put his hands on his hips and threw back his head and laughed. - replace first 'and' with a comma.

He then rose up and looked at Herbie who was hovering behind Eric - comma after 'who'

and would be attached to Drozig's huge star-ship once they were out of Earth's atmosphere - earlier, you wrote 'star-ship' as one word.

Back on the bridge, Eric went and made himself comfortable on his seat - I'd delete 'went and'

Almost straight away, metal-like straps came out of the armrests, and from the back of the seat and locked him in - comma after 'seat'

Stay safe
Judy

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you so much, Judy, for another excellent, and very helpful review. I'll go and sort those errors out now. Yes, to be able to the PPEs as easily as that would be a boon! Have a wonderful day, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx