Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Aqua-Beings Tell Their Story"Eric And The Lost City of Atlantis
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Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Sandra, more good work from you - your imagination never wavers - aqua-beings and mermaids. Your note on italics and how it would fair with dyslexic readers. That's a good point. I don't know, apart from difficulty in reading, if they have any other disability ie colour recognition. Perhaps colour for the speech aspect or a bolder font. Whatever, you tell a great story that will have great appeal to children like Eric. But, of course, you want to make it as easy as possible so they can enjoy it with ease. How are you fairing regarding the coronavirus? A worrying time. Take care. Love Dorothy xxx
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hello Sandra, more good work from you - your imagination never wavers - aqua-beings and mermaids. Your note on italics and how it would fair with dyslexic readers. That's a good point. I don't know, apart from difficulty in reading, if they have any other disability ie colour recognition. Perhaps colour for the speech aspect or a bolder font. Whatever, you tell a great story that will have great appeal to children like Eric. But, of course, you want to make it as easy as possible so they can enjoy it with ease. How are you fairing regarding the coronavirus? A worrying time. Take care. Love Dorothy xxx
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hello Dorothy, thank you so very much for the six stars, and wonderful comments. A few readers have, like you, mentioned a bold font, that might just do it. I have the books printed on cream coloured paper, as that also helps. I've decided to ask Eric's teachers.
The virus, well we decided to go and do a shop this morning, buying things that will keep a while and some freezer food. Fish, mince, etc. It is a nightmare, especially if us senior ladies and gentlemen are told to stay inside for four months!! HUH? That'll drive me nuts! You take care, too, my friend, I think if we use our common sense we will be fine. Lot so love, Sandra xxx
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Hi Sandra, Yes, 4 months - we'd go round the bend. You don't suppose that's the idea - finish off the oldies? LOL! Seriously, we are doing just that - taking it seriously and keeping our distance from the madding crowd. Like you we have stuff that keeps and stuff in the freezer. Catherine, my daughter delivered a cooked leg of lamb - yummy, but she kept her distance - she's a farmer's wife - it was one of their lambs. We have family close by who will shop if needed - we went out at 9pm shopping and supermarket was quiet (kept my gloves on LOL!)- Take care, love Dorothy xxx
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I kept my gloves on too. Graham told me to put them straight in the washing machine as the germs will be on them. I never of that, lol. I've now got out all my gloves and will use them once, wash them and then use the next pair. You have to be so careful. There was a woman on the radio this morning, she described how she felt whilst she had the infection. She said it felt like she'd gone three rounds with Mike Tyson! I'm not going to take any risks as I'm asthmatic and the flu (even after having the jab) knocks me for six. Take care, Dorothy. xxx
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
What a marvelous, imaginative chapter filled with surprises.
I'd rather see a mermaid myself, though Eric is probably to young to think that way. :)
Love the "Yellow Pages. Easy to remember. Kon's name is probably Koievanic.
I like the mental projection of their merworld. Just like computer animation.
The expansion of their sun as it ages is right on the money. Our own sun will one day engulf the Earth, just like Vakza. Land and water, you must be a science teacher.
I think I'll look for that red sea-plant and go explore the oceans like Jacques Cousteau.
The differences in the two worlds is important, and will be a good explanation of why they had to eventually leave.
A few minor typos:
e oceans for an [imprortant] red sea-plant.
amazing! The colour of the water, Eric was [surpried] to see, was sort of a pinkish, purple
realised it was [down] to us. In the US we'd say it was up to us.
I'd like to be in your science class along with Jules Verne and HG Wells.
Wonderful chapter, my friend.
Six red sea-plants
Robert
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Hello Sandra,
What a marvelous, imaginative chapter filled with surprises.
I'd rather see a mermaid myself, though Eric is probably to young to think that way. :)
Love the "Yellow Pages. Easy to remember. Kon's name is probably Koievanic.
I like the mental projection of their merworld. Just like computer animation.
The expansion of their sun as it ages is right on the money. Our own sun will one day engulf the Earth, just like Vakza. Land and water, you must be a science teacher.
I think I'll look for that red sea-plant and go explore the oceans like Jacques Cousteau.
The differences in the two worlds is important, and will be a good explanation of why they had to eventually leave.
A few minor typos:
e oceans for an [imprortant] red sea-plant.
amazing! The colour of the water, Eric was [surpried] to see, was sort of a pinkish, purple
realised it was [down] to us. In the US we'd say it was up to us.
I'd like to be in your science class along with Jules Verne and HG Wells.
Wonderful chapter, my friend.
Six red sea-plants
Robert
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for the six sea-plants, LOL,
I don't think I could pronounce Kon's full name if that's what it is, LOL!! I went searching for something rare in our oceans and found this algae. It was found in Australia on the coral reef but was first discovered in the Phllippines. It looks like coral with branches but instead on being hard, it was very soft to touch, that's when they realised it was a rare algae. Red, too. Perfect for my pink ocean, lol. If you want to look it up, it's called, Eucheuma arnoldii. I have to say, my stories are so educational!!! LOL.
We do say, it's 'up to you/us' to make the decision, but we say, it's 'down to you/us' to get it done. Does that make sense?
Thank you for finding those nits, I've made the corrections. Well, this was a fabulous review, and fun as well. Thank you so much, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxxx
Comment from royowen
I was wondering if you've thought of the Red Sea plant Sandra, and indeed if you've thought how to proliferate? But it probably doesn't matter. I've noted one or two writers, make vertical leaps in their stories, without thinking them through, but not you, you cleverly cover your backs. Brilliant girl. Well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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I was wondering if you've thought of the Red Sea plant Sandra, and indeed if you've thought how to proliferate? But it probably doesn't matter. I've noted one or two writers, make vertical leaps in their stories, without thinking them through, but not you, you cleverly cover your backs. Brilliant girl. Well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hello, Roy, you might be surprised to learn that after doing some research into rare sea plants, one in particular came up. An algae was discovered in the Philippines a few years ago, and later, on your very own Great Barrier Reef. A lady diver was exploring the reef and saw what looked like a coral plant, and decided to investigate as she hadn't seen one like it before. Expecting it to be hard, she was very surprised to find it was really soft. She took a sample and learnt that is was, in fact, algae. It's red, so that went in nicely with the pink-purple sea on the Atlanteans world. I love it when a plan comes together!!! LOL. Yes, I did cover proliferating the plant, as Kon told Eric, they have begun their own farm. I have to cover everything, because I have wonderful readers like you, who like to know about these things. I might just as well add a few intriguing lessons in my stories!! LOL. Thank you, my dear friend, for another one of your usual lovely review. You know how much I appreciate them. Sending you my famous hugs. :)) Sandra xxx
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Yes you are a genius writer, I do remember that
Comment from Pantygynt
I think the italics is something you would need to take up with your publisher or perhaps an educationalist with dyslexic experience. There might be such a person at Eric's school. There are plenty of ways you could difference the thought transference, underlining, use of coloured or bold font.
I loved the climate change route you are going down, a very clever idea.
I did notice a couple of typos.
'an imprortant red sea-plant.' -- One too many 'Rs' in imprortant.
'Eric was surpried to see,' -- Middle 'S' missing in surpried.
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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I think the italics is something you would need to take up with your publisher or perhaps an educationalist with dyslexic experience. There might be such a person at Eric's school. There are plenty of ways you could difference the thought transference, underlining, use of coloured or bold font.
I loved the climate change route you are going down, a very clever idea.
I did notice a couple of typos.
'an imprortant red sea-plant.' -- One too many 'Rs' in imprortant.
'Eric was surpried to see,' -- Middle 'S' missing in surpried.
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for finding those nits, Jim, I've made the corrections. You're not the only one who thinks bold text would work, I think I'll go that way. I will ask Eric's head teacher as the school is basically for dyslexic children. Why didn't I think of that????
Thanks for the lovely review, I'm glad you like the global warming theme in this part, I don't want it to take the story over, but just drop hints in every now and then. Thanks again, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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I was by no means a dyslexia specialist but I have had some experience with dyslexic kids and if you start mucking about with the shape of the letters as italics tend to do it could cause problems.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Still love this story and the wonderful creativity you are bringing to it. Great job. My suggestion on the italics is not to use it, maybe use bold instead. I think it would be easier to read.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Still love this story and the wonderful creativity you are bringing to it. Great job. My suggestion on the italics is not to use it, maybe use bold instead. I think it would be easier to read.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Aw, thanks, Barbara. It only crossed my mind today that it might be hard for them to read. I'll do what you suggested.
Thank you so much for the lovely six stars, I think we were reviewing each other at the same time!! lol. Sending you a big hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
