Assassin Nation
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Planning a Weekend Getaway"A sequel to the novel Baker's Dozen
13 total reviews
Comment from N.K. Wagner
An excellent conversation--for those who read Spanish. More translation or context clues would be a big help, Bill. :) Nancy*************************
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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An excellent conversation--for those who read Spanish. More translation or context clues would be a big help, Bill. :) Nancy*************************
Comment Written 14-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Thanks, Nancy, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, this is a a great continuation to the story. As usual it has a lot of humour hidden between the lines. As I live in Spain, I have to commend you on the Spanish. Don't worry, by the way. I don't think I will be able to send the corona virus your way via FS. Now that I'm prevented to see my family in the US, I'm sure he'll [Trump] will have to come up with some other excuses when the virus spreads in your country. Didn't mean to take it out on you.
I loved the chapter. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Hi Bill, this is a a great continuation to the story. As usual it has a lot of humour hidden between the lines. As I live in Spain, I have to commend you on the Spanish. Don't worry, by the way. I don't think I will be able to send the corona virus your way via FS. Now that I'm prevented to see my family in the US, I'm sure he'll [Trump] will have to come up with some other excuses when the virus spreads in your country. Didn't mean to take it out on you.
I loved the chapter. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Thanks, Ulla. Sorry The Rump has walled off Europe. Guess he?# afraid of catching a cold
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he he, I'm sorry. I'm jst so angry
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This chapter sounds like a promising book. I would like to be a fan so when you post, I can continue with the story. You've done a good piece of writing. I like the Spanish parts too.
Thank you for using a large font!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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This chapter sounds like a promising book. I would like to be a fan so when you post, I can continue with the story. You've done a good piece of writing. I like the Spanish parts too.
Thank you for using a large font!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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It?s 22. Readable but not bulky.
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Very true.
Comment from Shirley McLain
This is the first of this book I have read. I have to admit I got lost a little bit in the chapter. I don't know if it was the Spanish/English switches. I didn't see anything wrong at all. You did a good job. Shirley
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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This is the first of this book I have read. I have to admit I got lost a little bit in the chapter. I don't know if it was the Spanish/English switches. I didn't see anything wrong at all. You did a good job. Shirley
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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What is vague now becomes clearer in the next two chapters. Thanks for giving this a look.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Bill, I got a new supply of Six Stars, so I wanted to give you one, just to let you know I am still reading your posts.
Did you read my special note, asking you about the ' script I am writing?
( or are you too busy thinking up the next twist in the plot for this one?)
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Dear Bill, I got a new supply of Six Stars, so I wanted to give you one, just to let you know I am still reading your posts.
Did you read my special note, asking you about the ' script I am writing?
( or are you too busy thinking up the next twist in the plot for this one?)
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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I actually responded to your note on the same format. I wondered if you had received it.
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I will check and report
Comment from papa55mike
I love using actual places in all of my writing. It helps set a place. What a wonderfully written chapter full of Mexican food. I need a Taco. Best of luck with your book!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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I love using actual places in all of my writing. It helps set a place. What a wonderfully written chapter full of Mexican food. I need a Taco. Best of luck with your book!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Thanks, Papa
Comment from Mistydawn
This is an interesting script. It's well-written, the characters and dialogue are believable. A promising beginning to an intriguing story. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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This is an interesting script. It's well-written, the characters and dialogue are believable. A promising beginning to an intriguing story. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Thanks, MD
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I saw the humor in your story. In Florida these days, you need to speak Spanish to survive. On construction sites, Spanish is the only way to communicate with most of your sub-contractors.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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I saw the humor in your story. In Florida these days, you need to speak Spanish to survive. On construction sites, Spanish is the only way to communicate with most of your sub-contractors.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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My nephew works in Punta Gorda. He had to learn French enough to interact with Haitian workers there too. S
Comment from Gloria ....
This worked really well, Bill. Mixing the menu items was just ambiguous enough to not know for certain, at least not to me, just exactly what was being talked about.
Defining Manuel as a silver steak knife used only on special occasions is sure to rouse a little scare particularly when wedded to the body part. That sets off a whole stream of imaginations.
Your writing is clear, and fast paced.
Great job and a most enjoyable read.
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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This worked really well, Bill. Mixing the menu items was just ambiguous enough to not know for certain, at least not to me, just exactly what was being talked about.
Defining Manuel as a silver steak knife used only on special occasions is sure to rouse a little scare particularly when wedded to the body part. That sets off a whole stream of imaginations.
Your writing is clear, and fast paced.
Great job and a most enjoyable read.
Gloria
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Gloria, for the insightful review. Bill
Comment from Iza Deleanu
English mixed with Spanish very good choice for creating a certain atmosphere and giving authenticity to this story. I am waiting eagerly for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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English mixed with Spanish very good choice for creating a certain atmosphere and giving authenticity to this story. I am waiting eagerly for the next chapter.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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Thanks, Iza
