Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Herbie Wants to Mind-Merge"Eric And The Lost City of Atlantis
34 total reviews
Comment from wordsfromsue
I can not give 6 stars until I see Jason. ;-)
Ooh, good stuff kiddo! I'm anxious to hear what their questions are. Probably: "Do you want to meet Aquaman?" :-)
This chapter flew by and I detected no errors.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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I can not give 6 stars until I see Jason. ;-)
Ooh, good stuff kiddo! I'm anxious to hear what their questions are. Probably: "Do you want to meet Aquaman?" :-)
This chapter flew by and I detected no errors.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Keep reading, Jason will be coming soon, he's signed the Hollywood deal to play Kon! LOL!! I wish! Thanks Sue! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from StellaAnastasia
I love this! The story is easy to follow, has great imagery and so relatable. It is very well written. I currently teach so I smiled picturing Eric as one of my students on an epic adventure. I am very interested in seeing where this story goes!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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I love this! The story is easy to follow, has great imagery and so relatable. It is very well written. I currently teach so I smiled picturing Eric as one of my students on an epic adventure. I am very interested in seeing where this story goes!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you so very much, Stella, for this lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. It's National Book Day today in the UK, it might be everywhere, but not sure. At my grandson's school the children have been told to come dressed like a character in a book. Eric said he's going dressed as himself and is taking one of the books I've written for him to prove he has come as a character in the book, the picture on the cover is him, too! LOL. I'm waiting to hear how it went down. Thanks again, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is an excellent chapter, Sandra,
that gives us a better look into this strange place.
-I like the image, too.
-The description is very good, and we
can picture ourselves in what seems to
be a lovely fantasy world with an amazing pool.
-It reminds me of what the rain forest would be like.
-I also like Eric's thoughts about his paper; the
teacher and class would probably enjoy an
imaginative piece, as he had said do we believe it or not!
-But the object at hand is to try and communicate
with the beings who live here, and also decide if
they want to stay to do that.
-After Herbie reassures Eric, they decide on their plan.
-It's interesting that the one creature steps forward
to indicate it wants to communicate, and Eric agrees,
but what happens next sounds like pure pandemonium!
-"Oh, crikey, what will they do now?!
-An excellent chapter that I enjoyed.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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-This is an excellent chapter, Sandra,
that gives us a better look into this strange place.
-I like the image, too.
-The description is very good, and we
can picture ourselves in what seems to
be a lovely fantasy world with an amazing pool.
-It reminds me of what the rain forest would be like.
-I also like Eric's thoughts about his paper; the
teacher and class would probably enjoy an
imaginative piece, as he had said do we believe it or not!
-But the object at hand is to try and communicate
with the beings who live here, and also decide if
they want to stay to do that.
-After Herbie reassures Eric, they decide on their plan.
-It's interesting that the one creature steps forward
to indicate it wants to communicate, and Eric agrees,
but what happens next sounds like pure pandemonium!
-"Oh, crikey, what will they do now?!
-An excellent chapter that I enjoyed.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Pam, for another of your wonderful reviews. I like the rain forest reference. :)) Now Herbie must try to sort this communication problem out. I don't think Eric will want to do it if it's going to be like this. Lol. I know I wouldn't! Big hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra. xxxx
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You are very welcome and deserving, Sandra. I thought the rain forest fit pretty well. I don't think Eric would want to, either, but I bet Herbie will get it fixed.
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I'm sure Herbie will come up with something. :)) He likes being needed, lol. xx
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I definitely think Herbie will come up with something.
Comment from alexisleech
Wow! What a fantastic chapter. You really have let your imagination go wild with this one, Sandra, and the effect is fabulous. Great descriptive detail (but not too much) No nits that I can see, but I hardly drew breath as I was reading it so quickly.
I'm sooooooo proud of you!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Wow! What a fantastic chapter. You really have let your imagination go wild with this one, Sandra, and the effect is fabulous. Great descriptive detail (but not too much) No nits that I can see, but I hardly drew breath as I was reading it so quickly.
I'm sooooooo proud of you!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Aww, thank you so very much, Alexis, that is such a lovely thing to say. I really appreciate that. (Even though Graham said my head is too big already! lol!) Thank you so much for the six stars, my friend, that was so nice of you. Biggest hugs! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Sandra, a terrific Tuesday to you. I hope this finds you and Eric well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for another chapter of Eric's latest adventure. It is as good as it's been, I look forward to reading more. Good job and have a good day!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Hello Sandra, a terrific Tuesday to you. I hope this finds you and Eric well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for another chapter of Eric's latest adventure. It is as good as it's been, I look forward to reading more. Good job and have a good day!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you for another of your lovely reviews, my friend. I do appreciate your kind words a lot! :) Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from susand3022
Oh, my! That must be like being an uncontrolled Empath! All of that emotion crashing in on you all at once from all sides. I hope they understand his panic and realize they need to take turns and bring him along slowly. :) I love Eric's adventures... You sure have a great imagination! :)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Oh, my! That must be like being an uncontrolled Empath! All of that emotion crashing in on you all at once from all sides. I hope they understand his panic and realize they need to take turns and bring him along slowly. :) I love Eric's adventures... You sure have a great imagination! :)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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What a lovely review, Susan, thank you so very much for those kind words. I tried to imagine how awful it would be to have all those voices hit your brain at once. I don't think I'd like it! I'm glad you are still enjoying Eric's adventures. Thanks my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, dear, I'm guessing that's got to be quite a shock, yeah? At least when it's verbal you have your other senses to assist with processing -- telepathy you got nothing but the brain (and his isn't used to it!)... ;) Great chapter, my lady! :) Thanx for sharing and being on the next one with the water critters! :) Yvette
"Woah!" Eric's --> "Whoa!" Eric's
working on was similar --> working on were similar
It was bizarre! "Crikey! My --> It was bizarre! [new paragraph here] "Crikey! My
moment we only use --> moment, we only use
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Oh, dear, I'm guessing that's got to be quite a shock, yeah? At least when it's verbal you have your other senses to assist with processing -- telepathy you got nothing but the brain (and his isn't used to it!)... ;) Great chapter, my lady! :) Thanx for sharing and being on the next one with the water critters! :) Yvette
"Woah!" Eric's --> "Whoa!" Eric's
working on was similar --> working on were similar
It was bizarre! "Crikey! My --> It was bizarre! [new paragraph here] "Crikey! My
moment we only use --> moment, we only use
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for pointing these nits out, Yvette, you know how much I appreciate it. I've made all the corrections. Whoa, lol, I knew mine was wrong and tried so many variations, and they all looked wrong. Thank you for giving me the right one! lol. The rest, I've followed what you've told me. Thanks again, my friend, I'm so pleased you are still with me. :) Big hugs, (and a gentle hint... how's my garden shed doing?) For that, you get another hug! lol. Sandra xxx
Comment from robyn corum
Sandra,
Wow. Right into the fire. haha He sure doesn't like to stick with the boring parts of life, does he? Eric, I mean.
This was interesting and well written. I think you could do a bit better on the descriptions of when he went into the building that got bigger. (Last chapter) Does it immediately show an outdoor scene? That wasn't clear.
Also, near the bottom, you mentioned that things changed quickly - but you had just used 'change' a sentence or two before that.
That's all. Looks good!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Sandra,
Wow. Right into the fire. haha He sure doesn't like to stick with the boring parts of life, does he? Eric, I mean.
This was interesting and well written. I think you could do a bit better on the descriptions of when he went into the building that got bigger. (Last chapter) Does it immediately show an outdoor scene? That wasn't clear.
Also, near the bottom, you mentioned that things changed quickly - but you had just used 'change' a sentence or two before that.
That's all. Looks good!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Those were good points, Robyn, I will go over the descriptions of the building and the outside. Thank you for mentioning them. Sometimes we carry on regardless without taking care of where we're going. That's when I'm really grateful to reviewers like you. Thanks, my friend. All the other nits I've corrected now :)) Thank you for this lovely review, I hope you come again! Big hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from Lu Saluna
This chapter should be very intriguing to kids. A big world inside a world. Aliens who mind merge. Although Eric isn't too happy about it. Four talking at the same time must be awful. This was a fun chapter and I really enjoyed it. I didn't see anything amiss with spelling or grammar. You are an excellent writer.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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This chapter should be very intriguing to kids. A big world inside a world. Aliens who mind merge. Although Eric isn't too happy about it. Four talking at the same time must be awful. This was a fun chapter and I really enjoyed it. I didn't see anything amiss with spelling or grammar. You are an excellent writer.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Lu, for another lovely review, I'm so pleased you are enjoying this story. Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
Comment from rspoet
I think Doctor Who might have done a mind-merge which Sandra Mitchell.
Hello, my friend. Are you still there?
Great chapter in the book of Atlantis. There are click languages in various parts of the world, including the Zulu in Africa. Maybe they all descended from Atlantis.
Eric should go right ahead and write his story. He may just become a great fantasy writer. Love the vast inner-world spaceship.
I guess if Eric was a politician in the House of Lords, he'd have thought nothing much about everyone talking at the same time. :)
Teachers often feel this way, too.
I think Herbie may be over-matched in this new world of Atlantis.
Wonderful chapter, my friend.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I think Doctor Who might have done a mind-merge which Sandra Mitchell.
Hello, my friend. Are you still there?
Great chapter in the book of Atlantis. There are click languages in various parts of the world, including the Zulu in Africa. Maybe they all descended from Atlantis.
Eric should go right ahead and write his story. He may just become a great fantasy writer. Love the vast inner-world spaceship.
I guess if Eric was a politician in the House of Lords, he'd have thought nothing much about everyone talking at the same time. :)
Teachers often feel this way, too.
I think Herbie may be over-matched in this new world of Atlantis.
Wonderful chapter, my friend.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Robert, for the lovely array of stars! Now, Herbie will not allow them to better him, his pride won't let that happen, even though he is a machine. Lol. He's got to sort this problem out now, so that the Atlanteans can communicate with Eric without blowing his brain to bits! The House of Lords??? I wouldn't let my Eric anywhere near that lot of @&*#s that's sign language for bad people! :)) LOL! Sorry I've been so long coming back to you, I've not been here most of the day. Thank you, my dear friend, for your lovely review. Big hugs. Sandra xxxx