Treasure Chest
A Loop poem...19 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Aaaaah, treasure -- it's a nice dream!! :) LOL! A lovely presentation, my lady! ;) Okay, so the blonde is just gonna show her 'non-poet' side here: so, it's okay to have each stanza independently looped and not connected to the others? After reading yours, I went off and did a little 'researchin' and I found both kinds: continuous loop and individual stanza loops (like yours).... do you know if this website requires one or the other or does it matter? :) Thanx for your patience with me -- and such a wonderful poem.... this is one of the kinds I lose my patience with, but I didn't know of the independent stanza style until reading yours! ;) :) So, there might be enough patience to do a small one... LOL! ;) Good luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Aaaaah, treasure -- it's a nice dream!! :) LOL! A lovely presentation, my lady! ;) Okay, so the blonde is just gonna show her 'non-poet' side here: so, it's okay to have each stanza independently looped and not connected to the others? After reading yours, I went off and did a little 'researchin' and I found both kinds: continuous loop and individual stanza loops (like yours).... do you know if this website requires one or the other or does it matter? :) Thanx for your patience with me -- and such a wonderful poem.... this is one of the kinds I lose my patience with, but I didn't know of the independent stanza style until reading yours! ;) :) So, there might be enough patience to do a small one... LOL! ;) Good luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you! It is not specific. It must have follow specific rhyme pattern within each stanza, but does not say that each stanza must be connected by last word of previous stanza. Last contest, I learned there could even be more than one stanza. It was my first try. Ha! xoxo
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Yeah, well, they take a lot of time for me so, depending on my schedule when the contest is near, I may or may not tackle mine! ;) But at least I've got choices on style this time! ;)
Comment from judiverse
Excellent use of the loop format, and best of luck in the contest. Your lines flow smoothly. What a treasure chest that is! Diamonds, gold, and all kinds of precious stones are in it. I hope the narrator will be able to enjoy this treasure, as we don't know how she found it. She looks forward to keeping it, anyway. Excellent rhyme. judi
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Excellent use of the loop format, and best of luck in the contest. Your lines flow smoothly. What a treasure chest that is! Diamonds, gold, and all kinds of precious stones are in it. I hope the narrator will be able to enjoy this treasure, as we don't know how she found it. She looks forward to keeping it, anyway. Excellent rhyme. judi
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much! This I hope is what every heart is filled with! So appreciate your kind words and awesome review!! xoxo
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You're welcome. Have a great Sunday. judi
Comment from Drew Delaney
Quite an interesting form of poetry. I have never attempted one of these but it looks like a fun play with words. The picture used is pretty awesome. And your choice of wording words out so well.
Drew xx
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Quite an interesting form of poetry. I have never attempted one of these but it looks like a fun play with words. The picture used is pretty awesome. And your choice of wording words out so well.
Drew xx
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Appreciate! This is not an easy form at all! But I love the challenge! Thanks for your precious stars too! xoxo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Like the idea of your poem. We have been going through a friend's treasure chests these past few days/weeks. Your poem reminded me of the many things that she had.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Like the idea of your poem. We have been going through a friend's treasure chests these past few days/weeks. Your poem reminded me of the many things that she had.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Wow! How cool you get to do that. Not why you have to, but just the opportunity to know the person so much better. Sorry for your loss too! xoxo
Comment from Bicpen
Excellent it excels in its development of the narrative and does not detract nor succumb to a cumbersome monotony but deliberates well and executes its flow and delivery in its self same manner to which the stanzas are equalised and pronounced. It has a quiet charm and a quite emotional understanding to which the poise and almost refrained way of direction speaks with its clear and vocal presentation.It moves with a good adequate pace and justifies its short education with a more longing and deeper understanding once fully read and understood.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Excellent it excels in its development of the narrative and does not detract nor succumb to a cumbersome monotony but deliberates well and executes its flow and delivery in its self same manner to which the stanzas are equalised and pronounced. It has a quiet charm and a quite emotional understanding to which the poise and almost refrained way of direction speaks with its clear and vocal presentation.It moves with a good adequate pace and justifies its short education with a more longing and deeper understanding once fully read and understood.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you! I truly love how you can pull out so many qualities about a piece. Your reviews are poetry in themselves! xoxo
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a lovely poem and a great illustrating picture. Stones and gold. This poem flows smoothly and is easy to read. Good post. Have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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This is a lovely poem and a great illustrating picture. Stones and gold. This poem flows smoothly and is easy to read. Good post. Have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you sincerely! this was a difficult form, but appreciated the challenge! So glad you enjoyed! :) xoxo
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I sure did!
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xoxoxo!
Comment from Sally Law
A glittery entry for the loop poetry contest. Your loop poem flows so smooth just as it should, the real key to this style of poetry. Well done, and as always, a beautiful presentation.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sal xoxoxo
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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A glittery entry for the loop poetry contest. Your loop poem flows so smooth just as it should, the real key to this style of poetry. Well done, and as always, a beautiful presentation.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sal xoxoxo
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you, I learned from last time to offer at least two stanzas. My one stanza was ok, but probably would have been better with two. But I didn't know we could do more than one. But when I saw others work, I realized, but just a bit too late! haha! xoxo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a neat loop Diana, and they are much more difficult to write that we imagine and you wrote yours with such a smooth flow and I loves the sentiments of a treasure chest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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This is a neat loop Diana, and they are much more difficult to write that we imagine and you wrote yours with such a smooth flow and I loves the sentiments of a treasure chest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thanks Dolly! they are very hard, but I love the challenge. I didn't realize the first time I did one that it could be more than one stanza, so i tried to give it more depth this time. appreciate you enjoyed! xoxo
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written loop poem about the treasure chest that we all would like to discover filled with precious stones and wonderful jewelry with gold and diamonds.
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A very well-written loop poem about the treasure chest that we all would like to discover filled with precious stones and wonderful jewelry with gold and diamonds.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Amen! I need a little of that gold myself! haha! appreciate your kind words! xoxo
Comment from Janetsue
I've never written a loop poem and this is an excellent example of one. The title caught my attention right away! lol I think it's a wonderful contest entry and I send my best wishes for super results!
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I've never written a loop poem and this is an excellent example of one. The title caught my attention right away! lol I think it's a wonderful contest entry and I send my best wishes for super results!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you so very much! This is the second one I've done, and the first one I only did one verse as I didn't know you could do more, so I tried to give it more depth this time. appreciate you enjoyed this! A challenge for sure, but love it! xoxoxo