An Angel in the Meadow
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "A Brown Recluse!"A Tennessee Romance!
15 total reviews
Comment from StellaAnastasia
When my man sleeps, love creeps into my heart as well. This was very well written! I absolutely loved it. My only comment is that I wish the font was easier to read. It took me a little longer to read only because of the font. I love the story though! I can't imagine a panther attack.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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When my man sleeps, love creeps into my heart as well. This was very well written! I absolutely loved it. My only comment is that I wish the font was easier to read. It took me a little longer to read only because of the font. I love the story though! I can't imagine a panther attack.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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A "SALUTE," Stella!
Welcome to FanStory our friend. It is an honor meeting you. Thanks for the excellent review, kind words, feedback on the font, and taking the time to read our work. Should we get another comment about the font, we'll change it. Tomorrow, we're posting another chapter of "Love Long Distance," and would appreciate your review. Best wishes and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Cathy and Bill
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Another delightful chapter, you two. I've never heard of Brown Recluse spiders, I don't think we have them in the UK, not that I'm complaining! lol. I don't like spiders, snakes or rats. I enjoyed reading your words of love for each other, I wonder how long it took him to catch up with Angel in the field. LOL Well done, I lood forward to the next part. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Another delightful chapter, you two. I've never heard of Brown Recluse spiders, I don't think we have them in the UK, not that I'm complaining! lol. I don't like spiders, snakes or rats. I enjoyed reading your words of love for each other, I wonder how long it took him to catch up with Angel in the field. LOL Well done, I lood forward to the next part. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Look, Sandra. . . a "SALUTE," to you, for the review, kind words and taking the time to read our work. Now, how long did it take Bret to catch up with Angel in the meadow? Hmm! Best I remember it was real quick, 'cause Angel slowed down and let him--goody, goody! Oh, and by-the-way! You won't believe what happens in Chapter 4. Sheee!!! Great hearing from you, our dear friend. Best wishes for an awesome week and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Cathy and Bill.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Commando,
This piece of Romance Fiction has lucid as well as matching the theme phraseology, nice imagery at some places, but not so captivating flow as is generally found in your chapters.
Anyways, Let's think for better about Chapter 4.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Hello Commando,
This piece of Romance Fiction has lucid as well as matching the theme phraseology, nice imagery at some places, but not so captivating flow as is generally found in your chapters.
Anyways, Let's think for better about Chapter 4.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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A "SALUTE," RP!
Thanks for the review, kind words, feedback, and taking the time to read our work. Great hearing from you, our friend. Best wishes for an awesome week and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Cathy and Bill
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Cathy & Bill, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Ulla
Hi to both of you. I commend you on this writing endeavour, but to be honest, it's all the same. If it's not a snakebite then it's something other. When is real life kicking in? Sorry to be a bit critical. I know, I could just hit the skip, but I think you both deserve better. It all comes across rather flippant. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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Hi to both of you. I commend you on this writing endeavour, but to be honest, it's all the same. If it's not a snakebite then it's something other. When is real life kicking in? Sorry to be a bit critical. I know, I could just hit the skip, but I think you both deserve better. It all comes across rather flippant. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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A "SALUTE," Ulla!
Thanks for the review, kind words and suggestion. We have edited our chapter and there is no cliff-hanger. You are "AWESOME," and we appreciate your expertise. Best wishes for a great week and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Cathy and Bill.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Recluse spiders aren't a good thing to have near. We have them around here although I think they are very rare. I like the idea that you enter new characters as you write your story.....unto the next chapter.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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Recluse spiders aren't a good thing to have near. We have them around here although I think they are very rare. I like the idea that you enter new characters as you write your story.....unto the next chapter.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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A "SALUTE," Rosemary!
Thanks for the review, kind words and taking the time to read our work. Best wishes for an awesome week ahead and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Cathy and Bill
Comment from BethShelby
This pair sounds like Daisy Mae and Lil' Abner living in DogPatch. Your story is amusing but every time you post a chapter someone else is in a whole lot of pain. I do enjoy reading them though.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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This pair sounds like Daisy Mae and Lil' Abner living in DogPatch. Your story is amusing but every time you post a chapter someone else is in a whole lot of pain. I do enjoy reading them though.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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A "SALUTE," Beth!
Daisy May and Lil' Abner, huh? :) Great hearing from you, our dear friend. Thanks for the review, kind words and taking the time to read our work. Best wishes for an awesome week ahead and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Cathy and Bill.
Comment from Henry King
The story is moseying along down a path to only the authors know where. The dialog between Brett and Angel, and Angel and God seems natural. The setting is fairly described as Smoky Mountain cabin. I can almost smell the smoke from the chimney and feel the ground beneath my bare feet. The cliff hangers, one right after the other seems a little fast. That short time between them lessens their impact. What's the next one going to be, a mule shoe in the face or feral hogs in the corn patch?
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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The story is moseying along down a path to only the authors know where. The dialog between Brett and Angel, and Angel and God seems natural. The setting is fairly described as Smoky Mountain cabin. I can almost smell the smoke from the chimney and feel the ground beneath my bare feet. The cliff hangers, one right after the other seems a little fast. That short time between them lessens their impact. What's the next one going to be, a mule shoe in the face or feral hogs in the corn patch?
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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A"SALUTE," Henry!
First off, thanks for your service to God and Country. I read your profile, "About." Quite impressive! Over twenty-six years--what Branch? I did thirty years with the USAF. Now, I thank you for the review, kind words (I think) and taking the time to read our work. You asked: "What's the next one (cliff hanger?) going to be, a mule shoe in the face or feral hogs in the corn patch?" Were you being facetious? Yes or no? I'll be waiting for your answer. Best wishes for an awesome week ahead and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Bill and Cathy.
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Commando. Thank you for your service sir. I was primarily an Infantryman. My occupation was Operations and Intelligence. I did that in Infantry, Armored, Cavalry and other units at Company, Battalion, Regiment, Post and Army levels. No the comments were not facetious. I have run across both and other odd perils in civilian life. One was very surprising; I was stung by a scorpion, the venom affected my like a bee sting. The person right behind me was stung by the same scorpion and came close to death.
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I "SALUTE," you Henry! I led a "Joint Services Commando Team" in Iraq. I'm presently advising our operations in Iraq, Afghanistan and Turkey. May I say, "It is an honor meeting and writing with an "AWESOME WRITER". . . YOU! Best wishes in life and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Bill
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Your very honorable service is current and packed with dangers from very unexpected perils, which I have not experienced and hope I never do. Thank you.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Oh, I am already hooked so I became a fan just to make sure I do no miss one chapter! I will read the first two chapters to add to the reviews. Have a wonderful day!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Oh, I am already hooked so I became a fan just to make sure I do no miss one chapter! I will read the first two chapters to add to the reviews. Have a wonderful day!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Back again, our dear friend! Cathy and I are honored by your review, kind words and taking the time to read our work. Best wishes for an awesome week ahead and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Cathy and Bill.
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Love these chapters!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Chapter three is an AWESOME one, Bill and Cathy. The synopsis of chapter 2 is a great reminder of the story so far. It alone is exciting and a great lead-in to this one.
The formatting of the novel is professional. I like the 'special notes, the way characters are listed, the justification of lines, and the way readers are invited to read and ponder as they are 'talked' to.
This chapter begins on a poignant note with Bret in pain in the hospital and Angel in dismay while she watches. Angel's vulnerability is shown here and in the way she asks Bret if he will leave her. Bret's actions give readers insight into his character. It shows that beneath his outward appearance of a 'strong, but flamboyant man', he is like all of us inside--desiring love and happiness. The hospital scene and that of the chapel are well-written. The details in the description of it allow readers to picture it well. I could see the chapel, the pews, the flickering lights, and the words Angel described. Her prayer was sincere. When God spoke that was an awesome inclusion to the story, too.
I like how you showed the passage of time with 'the days walked away' and the playful questioning of readers with ' Did you ever wonder what they do up there, friends?' I like that you enclosed that thought in parentheses. Readers are treated to more of Bret's character when he discusses being dropped on his head at birth and asks readers not to laugh. Not only do these bits and pieces shared add more about Bret, but, also interject the authors' intent to keep the story moving and involve readers throughout.
I loved the part of Bret's thoughts as Angel was sleeping. It read like a soliloquy from Shakespeare. Much is revealed about the relationship of Bret and Angel from his POV. His humor and Smoky Mountain roots are evident in the lines about having no shoes for the wedding.
The lead-up to the cliff hangar was succinct. It will draw readers back to find out what happens to Cecile.
Thank you, Bill and Cathy, for sharing an AWESOME chapter in your collaborative novel. I look forward to chapter 4.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Laura Jan
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Chapter three is an AWESOME one, Bill and Cathy. The synopsis of chapter 2 is a great reminder of the story so far. It alone is exciting and a great lead-in to this one.
The formatting of the novel is professional. I like the 'special notes, the way characters are listed, the justification of lines, and the way readers are invited to read and ponder as they are 'talked' to.
This chapter begins on a poignant note with Bret in pain in the hospital and Angel in dismay while she watches. Angel's vulnerability is shown here and in the way she asks Bret if he will leave her. Bret's actions give readers insight into his character. It shows that beneath his outward appearance of a 'strong, but flamboyant man', he is like all of us inside--desiring love and happiness. The hospital scene and that of the chapel are well-written. The details in the description of it allow readers to picture it well. I could see the chapel, the pews, the flickering lights, and the words Angel described. Her prayer was sincere. When God spoke that was an awesome inclusion to the story, too.
I like how you showed the passage of time with 'the days walked away' and the playful questioning of readers with ' Did you ever wonder what they do up there, friends?' I like that you enclosed that thought in parentheses. Readers are treated to more of Bret's character when he discusses being dropped on his head at birth and asks readers not to laugh. Not only do these bits and pieces shared add more about Bret, but, also interject the authors' intent to keep the story moving and involve readers throughout.
I loved the part of Bret's thoughts as Angel was sleeping. It read like a soliloquy from Shakespeare. Much is revealed about the relationship of Bret and Angel from his POV. His humor and Smoky Mountain roots are evident in the lines about having no shoes for the wedding.
The lead-up to the cliff hangar was succinct. It will draw readers back to find out what happens to Cecile.
Thank you, Bill and Cathy, for sharing an AWESOME chapter in your collaborative novel. I look forward to chapter 4.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Laura Jan
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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WOW! An "AWESOME REVIEW," Laura Jan. Two "SALUTES," for you! One from Cathy and one from me. We are in agreement, that your review of "A Brown Recluse," Chapter 3, of our book "An Angel in the Meadow," is the "BEST EVER" since we came on FanStory. It is an honor having an "AWESOME WRITER," such as yourself to express admiration for our work. As always, best wishes and God Bless. Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Cathy and Bill.
Comment from RShipp
Your story is a fun read to follow.
I enjoy both the characters adn the dialects you are using.
I think I look forward to the cliff-hangers almost as much as the readings.
Looking forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Your story is a fun read to follow.
I enjoy both the characters adn the dialects you are using.
I think I look forward to the cliff-hangers almost as much as the readings.
Looking forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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A "SALUTE," RShipp!
Thanks for the review, kind words and taking the time to read our work. All of which is an honor. May we recommend chapters 1 and 2. Have an awesome day and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Cathy and Bill