Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Eric And Herbie Are Off Again!"Eric And The Lost City of Atlantis
39 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Sandra,
This is a good build up for the trip. It will be interesting to see how Eric wrties this up in his history theme. I can't wait to see how he explains his appearance and his bike to the Atlantians.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Sandra,
This is a good build up for the trip. It will be interesting to see how Eric wrties this up in his history theme. I can't wait to see how he explains his appearance and his bike to the Atlantians.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for reading part one of this book. This story was the last one for the time being. I've written four books for my grandson now, and I'm going to leave it in my portfolio for the time being. I'm delighted that you thought is a good build up, that is that hardest part, the first page. Thank you again, my friend, and you stay safe, too. :)) Sandra xx
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You are most kiindly welcome, Sandra.
Joan
Comment from Gert sherwood
Sandra, please don't stop with your fascinating stories of Eric and Herbie. I 'm sure with the help of your husband as your Muse you will continue
Well my searching eyes, I didn't find any nits in your story.
"Lost City of Atlantis." Which I enjoyed very much.
Gert
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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Sandra, please don't stop with your fascinating stories of Eric and Herbie. I 'm sure with the help of your husband as your Muse you will continue
Well my searching eyes, I didn't find any nits in your story.
"Lost City of Atlantis." Which I enjoyed very much.
Gert
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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Aw, Bless you, Gert. I'm having a break from them just for a jew weeks. I need Graham to come up with another idea, :)) he's good at that. But they will be back. Eric will make sure of that! lol.
Thank you so much for the lovely six stars, dear friend, and your lovely comments. Your encouraging words have put a big smile on my face. Have a wonderful day with your lovely husband! :)) Sandra xxx
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sandramitchell
you are so welcom. And I will be waiting for Graham to come up with another idea.
Gert
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I will tell him, Gert. Lol. He will be so pleased. Enjoy the rest of you day, dear friend. xxx
Comment from robyn corum
Sandra,
I'm late, but I'm here! Things have been a little hairy lately. Ugh. But I knew I had to make time for this. *smile*
Highly intriguing premise. I'm anxious to find out about Atlantis, myself! I'm taking notes and I'll be ready to go with you to present all your findings to the scientists of the world. YAY! haha
Notes:
1.) Eric picked up his glass of sugar-free coke from his bedside table
--> either 'sugar-free Coke' or 'sugar-free cola'
2.) You'd be lost without me," he told him,
--> he/him - better to make it more clear?
3.) Eric leapt off the bed and stripped off his clothes.
--> 'off x2
That's it. I'm on to the next!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Sandra,
I'm late, but I'm here! Things have been a little hairy lately. Ugh. But I knew I had to make time for this. *smile*
Highly intriguing premise. I'm anxious to find out about Atlantis, myself! I'm taking notes and I'll be ready to go with you to present all your findings to the scientists of the world. YAY! haha
Notes:
1.) Eric picked up his glass of sugar-free coke from his bedside table
--> either 'sugar-free Coke' or 'sugar-free cola'
2.) You'd be lost without me," he told him,
--> he/him - better to make it more clear?
3.) Eric leapt off the bed and stripped off his clothes.
--> 'off x2
That's it. I'm on to the next!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you Robyn, I've made the changes on my MS Word, and will do it on here now. I don't know why I missed those nits. lol. Two 'offs' in the one sentence!!! That's bad! Thank you, dear friend, for this lovely review and coming to catch up, that was so very nice of you. More hugs coming your way. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, LMBO. No wonder when I read the second chapter... I felt like I missed something....like I came in late for the movie....but now I see where Eric got the idea.....and it wasn't just from Graham...this explains a lot....lol...and like Herbie would ever leave Eric...not....I'm so glad I checked back to see if I read them all...I think I'm losing my mind....I'm going to love this story....I feel it in my finger....I feel it in my toes.....it's awesome my wonderful sweet friend...soooooooooooo very well written you...and I. Love your story told...perfect picture my amazing friend....love you to bunches.....Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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Hi Sandra, LMBO. No wonder when I read the second chapter... I felt like I missed something....like I came in late for the movie....but now I see where Eric got the idea.....and it wasn't just from Graham...this explains a lot....lol...and like Herbie would ever leave Eric...not....I'm so glad I checked back to see if I read them all...I think I'm losing my mind....I'm going to love this story....I feel it in my finger....I feel it in my toes.....it's awesome my wonderful sweet friend...soooooooooooo very well written you...and I. Love your story told...perfect picture my amazing friend....love you to bunches.....Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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LOL! You're a crazy lady!! But I love you anyway!!! Thank you so much for the six stars, my lovely friend, and your really funny, lovely, wonderful review. Sending you loads of hugs, and ten times as much love. :)) Tell Noah, his book is coming along nicely. I'm waiting for the final edit and for the cover to be done. So exciting. :)) xxxxxx Sandra xxxx
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HI Sandra, I'll see Noah Friday...so I'll tell him then...I can't wait to see your books in the library in person...I'm going to stand in front of them and point to them...tell everyone...I know this lovely lady...and when I get done smothering Noah and Abby with hugs and kisses...I'll throw yours in there for them...can't wait to see Noah's book...this is good stuff...ok...back to packing...I was doggy sitting the last for days for my neighbor...they have the sweetest dog...his name is Peanut...he is this little guy...but he sure misses them...when they open their door...he runs to my house...he loves chicken and hamburgers...LOL...I'll catch you later my wonderful sweet friend...bunches of love to ya...smiling big back at you...xxoo Linda
Comment from wordsfromsue
Hi Sandra! I must be honest... I shall keep reading this book in the hope that eventually Jason Momoa will pop in when Eric gets to Atlantis! Now there's a lovely thought. :-)
This sounds like an exciting adventure, sure to keep Eric and his friends on the edge of their seats.
Okay, preparing to meet Aquaman! :-)
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Hi Sandra! I must be honest... I shall keep reading this book in the hope that eventually Jason Momoa will pop in when Eric gets to Atlantis! Now there's a lovely thought. :-)
This sounds like an exciting adventure, sure to keep Eric and his friends on the edge of their seats.
Okay, preparing to meet Aquaman! :-)
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Oh, thank you, Sue! I'm so pleased you're joining me on this adventure. Jason is rather yummy, isn't he? Hmm the mind boggles. lol. Thank you, dear friend, for reading my new book. Big hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from Lu Saluna
A very exciting opening chapter. I certainly didn't see any errors. I am glad your husband coaxed you into writing more. You are always a joy to read.
There was great imagery, wonderful flow and the story felt alive.
I am looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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A very exciting opening chapter. I certainly didn't see any errors. I am glad your husband coaxed you into writing more. You are always a joy to read.
There was great imagery, wonderful flow and the story felt alive.
I am looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for you lovely review, Lu! I'm so pleased you are coming along on this adventure. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from alexisleech
I'm so glad your husband encouraged you to get stuck into another great adventure for Eric. And what a wonderful subject for him to investigate and possibly discover.
I can't wait to see what happens next!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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I'm so glad your husband encouraged you to get stuck into another great adventure for Eric. And what a wonderful subject for him to investigate and possibly discover.
I can't wait to see what happens next!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, Alexis, for the lovely six stars. I'll let Graham know you approve of his starting me off again!! LOL I'm so pleased you'll be coming along with this adventure. Big hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Sylvia Page
Hello Sandra, this is a good topic to explore and educate children as well. I like the way they started out arguing on whether it s real or not and finally decided to explore. Good start and I'm sure you must be brimming with ideas.
Best wishes on this journey
Sylvia
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Hello Sandra, this is a good topic to explore and educate children as well. I like the way they started out arguing on whether it s real or not and finally decided to explore. Good start and I'm sure you must be brimming with ideas.
Best wishes on this journey
Sylvia
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, Sylvia, for your lovely review. Thank you for reading this first chapter in my new book. I hope you continue to come with us as Eric learns the truth about Atlantis!! Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and first chapter, Sandra.
-I like how you begin with the classroom
scene and the assignment.
-It leads to a lot of discussion between Eric and Herbie.
-Each makes good points, but Eric doesn't give up,
and shows how, in previous trips, they never had a
reason ahead of time, and then uses his top card-
Herbie had been called a "Great Spirit."
-He knew he had been bested, so he agreed to the trip.
-I like the bit about the holiday and all the rationales
behind it, like taking a bike across the sea!
-The ending is good with "a tornado of twists and turns."
-Let the adventure begin!
-I look forward to learning about Atlantis!
-Well done!
Gizmo took us there^ we'd both [comma needed]
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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-Good image and first chapter, Sandra.
-I like how you begin with the classroom
scene and the assignment.
-It leads to a lot of discussion between Eric and Herbie.
-Each makes good points, but Eric doesn't give up,
and shows how, in previous trips, they never had a
reason ahead of time, and then uses his top card-
Herbie had been called a "Great Spirit."
-He knew he had been bested, so he agreed to the trip.
-I like the bit about the holiday and all the rationales
behind it, like taking a bike across the sea!
-The ending is good with "a tornado of twists and turns."
-Let the adventure begin!
-I look forward to learning about Atlantis!
-Well done!
Gizmo took us there^ we'd both [comma needed]
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, Pam, for another of your lovely reviews. I've put the comma in, well spotted! lol. I loved how you picked out the important bits in this first part, you are always most encouraging. :)) Now they are going to find out if it's the Garden of Eden, or the absolute opposite. Thank you for those lovely stars, my friend, I really do appreciate your friendship. Big hugs! :)) Sandra xxx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. I enjoyed the story and look forward to how it unfolds.
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
I've always been interested in the tales of Atlantis. This is a wonderful story. I like the way it focuses at this point on the argument of whether the place actually exists or not rather than a quickly agreed upon "let's go there". It's fun to listen to their debate and the give-and-take of their conversation. You can tell that they're good friends.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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I've always been interested in the tales of Atlantis. This is a wonderful story. I like the way it focuses at this point on the argument of whether the place actually exists or not rather than a quickly agreed upon "let's go there". It's fun to listen to their debate and the give-and-take of their conversation. You can tell that they're good friends.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for the 6 stars, my friend, and this lovely review. There is going to be a lot of fun in this story. I hope you come along with us. Big hugs, my friend. (what is your name?) xxx Sandra :))
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my name irl is Karmin. And yes, I did get a lot of slack for it as a child in the 70s. *sigh*.
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Aww, I know what names can do to you. My maiden surname was Mannakee, and my so called school 'friends' used to call me monkey. It was awful. I think Karmin is a pretty name. :))
