Released from Darkness
a short story13 total reviews
Comment from Stephanie Paige
This was a very impactful short story. Becky is a remarkable woman who is free. You did a fantastic job considering the sixty word limit. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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This was a very impactful short story. Becky is a remarkable woman who is free. You did a fantastic job considering the sixty word limit. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well-written story for the 60 word flash fiction contest. This is a dark yet necessary story to tell regarding sexual abuse.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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This is a well-written story for the 60 word flash fiction contest. This is a dark yet necessary story to tell regarding sexual abuse.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your review. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
That took a dark turn quickly! Good on Becky that she remained strong no matter the things she faced and yes, to further avoid that kind of torture...she deemed that dying would still be on her own terms!
Best wishes for the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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That took a dark turn quickly! Good on Becky that she remained strong no matter the things she faced and yes, to further avoid that kind of torture...she deemed that dying would still be on her own terms!
Best wishes for the contest!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Patty Palmer
How terrible that is! I hope she made it to freedom. I agree, better to die free instead a sex slave for some ugly shriveled old man! Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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How terrible that is! I hope she made it to freedom. I agree, better to die free instead a sex slave for some ugly shriveled old man! Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Cindy Decker
I love this story. It may be about human trafficking--a very serious issue. I loved the courage displayed by the antagonist in the story. I had just a small issue about the sun shining brightly as seen through a forest? Excellent work in all.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I love this story. It may be about human trafficking--a very serious issue. I loved the courage displayed by the antagonist in the story. I had just a small issue about the sun shining brightly as seen through a forest? Excellent work in all.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your review. I said the sun was shining brightly to somehow show that she has been kept in a dark place for a long time. When you go without light for so long any amount of it is blinding to you when you enter back into it. Maybe I didn't convey that correctly.
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I loved the poem, Mia. It made me feel and was fantastic. I erred about the sun thing. I?m fairly new to poetry.
Comment from LisaMay
Your story is such a dark one, from the setting itself in the endless forest to the terrible life Becky has been forced to endure. There is hope and future brightness though, with her achievement of freedom and a new day dawning with its hopeful possibilities.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Your story is such a dark one, from the setting itself in the endless forest to the terrible life Becky has been forced to endure. There is hope and future brightness though, with her achievement of freedom and a new day dawning with its hopeful possibilities.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this. You've presented something here that could be developed into so much more. Who is she? Who did she escape from? How did it happen? I like what you've done with this and enjoyed reading this engaging and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I like this. You've presented something here that could be developed into so much more. Who is she? Who did she escape from? How did it happen? I like what you've done with this and enjoyed reading this engaging and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I like what this story is about. I would like a slightly clearer understanding of what's at stake at the beginning of the story, and slightly less about the dark day. Something as simple as she escaped at dawn, perhaps? Just my 2-cents worth.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I like what this story is about. I would like a slightly clearer understanding of what's at stake at the beginning of the story, and slightly less about the dark day. Something as simple as she escaped at dawn, perhaps? Just my 2-cents worth.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Hmm. have her escape at dawn. That is an idea. And yes you are right there could be more at the beginning to make you understand the stakes, but I only had so many works and tried to make it all fit. Thank you for your thoughts.
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I know, word limits can be so tough! It was an intriguing p oem.
Comment from Sanku
You have done it! In 59 words you have written a tiny story a that conveyed a serious theme. Sexual exploitation of women will never end ,even though this is 21st century and we talk about breaking glass ceilings. All the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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You have done it! In 59 words you have written a tiny story a that conveyed a serious theme. Sexual exploitation of women will never end ,even though this is 21st century and we talk about breaking glass ceilings. All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Released from Darkness"
Is a 60 Word Dash writing prompt entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Thanks and good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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"Released from Darkness"
Is a 60 Word Dash writing prompt entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
...
Thanks and good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your review.
