Tanka: mud sticks
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Belated congrats, Lisa on yet another win. I'm so far behind--six weeks in FS Land and overwhelmed by the wealth of material. Now go wipe that mud off already! Cheers. LIZ
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Belated congrats, Lisa on yet another win. I'm so far behind--six weeks in FS Land and overwhelmed by the wealth of material. Now go wipe that mud off already! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
Comment from dragonpoet
This tanka tells the story that shows this person doubts the love of his/her partner. Maybe she believes he loves her and others say he is cheating and she starts believing even though she doesn't really see it.
Congrats on the honorable mention in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
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This tanka tells the story that shows this person doubts the love of his/her partner. Maybe she believes he loves her and others say he is cheating and she starts believing even though she doesn't really see it.
Congrats on the honorable mention in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing an unfamiliar idiom with us as well as the thought-provoking poem. I admired your 5-7-5-7-7 tanka format. Congratulations on having the entry well received in the contest. Cheers- Joan
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Thank you for sharing an unfamiliar idiom with us as well as the thought-provoking poem. I admired your 5-7-5-7-7 tanka format. Congratulations on having the entry well received in the contest. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
Comment from Bill Schott
This tanka, Mud Sticks, has the right set up and finds that a relationship must undergo the trust test as wagging tongues grease up love bonds.
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This tanka, Mud Sticks, has the right set up and finds that a relationship must undergo the trust test as wagging tongues grease up love bonds.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This tanka says a lot in-between the lines, so to speak. The author notes helped immensely with the motivation. I get some 'ue/oo' assonance with 'true' and 'boots.' That fourth line is like irony or something that is known but not obvious yet, and the last line is a sort of flashback. Interesting tanka.
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This tanka says a lot in-between the lines, so to speak. The author notes helped immensely with the motivation. I get some 'ue/oo' assonance with 'true' and 'boots.' That fourth line is like irony or something that is known but not obvious yet, and the last line is a sort of flashback. Interesting tanka.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
Comment from juliaSjames
I like the multilayered meaning of your well composed tanka. The pivot line works fine. But perhaps it flows better with the second half of the poem than with the first two lines.
Very nicely done, LisaMay.
Best of luck in the contest.
Blessings Julia
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I like the multilayered meaning of your well composed tanka. The pivot line works fine. But perhaps it flows better with the second half of the poem than with the first two lines.
Very nicely done, LisaMay.
Best of luck in the contest.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Tanka about a lover who profess his love not knowing if it is true as he wipes his boots leaving mud sticks on the welcome mat, but he makes you smile.
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A very well-written Tanka about a lover who profess his love not knowing if it is true as he wipes his boots leaving mud sticks on the welcome mat, but he makes you smile.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Well done tanka! I love that pun that you put in with the "mud sticks" and wouldn't have known anything about the other meaning without your explanation. Wiping the boots is a perfect pivot for questioning love.
Best wishes in the contest!
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Well done tanka! I love that pun that you put in with the "mud sticks" and wouldn't have known anything about the other meaning without your explanation. Wiping the boots is a perfect pivot for questioning love.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Tanka Poetry contest.
This short verse tells of "mud sticks" with a different meaning.
Well done and I wish you lots of luck with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Tanka Poetry contest.
This short verse tells of "mud sticks" with a different meaning.
Well done and I wish you lots of luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
Comment from Patty Palmer
Your poem is good, now that I know what mud sticks are. It was good to see your author's notes explaining it. Good luck with the contest!
Have a great day!
Luv,
Patty
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Your poem is good, now that I know what mud sticks are. It was good to see your author's notes explaining it. Good luck with the contest!
Have a great day!
Luv,
Patty
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020