Vanished
A Rima Dissolutas Poem21 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Your poem made me realize that Bonzi trees look like they are dancing ballet. I wish I had more to say. It's difficult to satisfy the character counters.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Your poem made me realize that Bonzi trees look like they are dancing ballet. I wish I had more to say. It's difficult to satisfy the character counters.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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I know. Thanks for reviewing. You should write about dancing Bonzai trees.
Comment from Bill Schott
This rima dissolutas poem, Vanished, follows the explained format and sets a sad tone as the images of laughter and magic shrivel when exposed to the cold realities of life. Much like the fairies and the enchanted forest fade to a silence pine.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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This rima dissolutas poem, Vanished, follows the explained format and sets a sad tone as the images of laughter and magic shrivel when exposed to the cold realities of life. Much like the fairies and the enchanted forest fade to a silence pine.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Sally Law
How unique and creative this is. I enjoyed this so much and learning a new form of poetry. Thank you so much for sharing this and I apologize for lack of a six. Sending you my best today as well, Sally xo
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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How unique and creative this is. I enjoyed this so much and learning a new form of poetry. Thank you so much for sharing this and I apologize for lack of a six. Sending you my best today as well, Sally xo
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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I appreciate this great review. Don't worry about that ole six.
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Your too sweet!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rimas dissolutas poem about the vanished trees that left behind one single crooked tree on the hill until the village is always vanished one day.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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A very well-written rimas dissolutas poem about the vanished trees that left behind one single crooked tree on the hill until the village is always vanished one day.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much.
Comment from humpwhistle
I'm afraid your explanation of the form soars far over my head, but I know what I like. The lone twisted trunk is all that remains of a once vibrant, magical community. I wish I knew the circumstances of this loss, but I realize that's for another verse.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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I'm afraid your explanation of the form soars far over my head, but I know what I like. The lone twisted trunk is all that remains of a once vibrant, magical community. I wish I knew the circumstances of this loss, but I realize that's for another verse.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for this great review. I'm happy you liked it, and yes, I might have another story later.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne. The poem very aptly describes the picture of the well worn tree. The descriptive narrative certainly paints a verbal picture that needs no visual. Nicely done. Robert
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Hello Yvonne. The poem very aptly describes the picture of the well worn tree. The descriptive narrative certainly paints a verbal picture that needs no visual. Nicely done. Robert
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you for saying so. I appreciate it.
Comment from Michele Harber
Wow. I've never seen this type of poetry, where you rhyme the lines in the second stanza to the corresponding lines in the first, but you did it beautifully. I like how the last two lines summed up the story, while rhyming the last two lines of the other stanzas. I enjoyed your use of alliteration, i.e., "village vanished" and "ancient arbor."
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Wow. I've never seen this type of poetry, where you rhyme the lines in the second stanza to the corresponding lines in the first, but you did it beautifully. I like how the last two lines summed up the story, while rhyming the last two lines of the other stanzas. I enjoyed your use of alliteration, i.e., "village vanished" and "ancient arbor."
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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I'm so happy you liked it this much. Thanks for picking up on the alliteration.
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You're welcome. It was a very well done work.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
very mournful way in a way . Had to look up the style as I had no idea what to look for. It is very well done and the description is very well stated for effect
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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very mournful way in a way . Had to look up the style as I had no idea what to look for. It is very well done and the description is very well stated for effect
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you. I forgot to list the style.
Comment from RodG
You have fashioned an excellent Rima Dissolutas, a poetic form I was not familiar with. I enjoyed hearing about all that remains of this once-enchanted land. Rod
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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You have fashioned an excellent Rima Dissolutas, a poetic form I was not familiar with. I enjoyed hearing about all that remains of this once-enchanted land. Rod
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Rod. I appreciate this review. It was a new form for me, too.
Comment from Ulla
Ah, Yvonne this is a well written poem and I liked it a lot. I've never heard about the form but knowing you, I'm sure you're mastering the form. All the best. Ulla:)))
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Ah, Yvonne this is a well written poem and I liked it a lot. I've never heard about the form but knowing you, I'm sure you're mastering the form. All the best. Ulla:)))
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Awwwww, thank you so much, Ulla, for the review and for the lovely compliment.
