Vanished
A Rima Dissolutas Poem21 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
What a beautiful read describing this ancient tree, and I like this form of writing which you seem to have captured excellently, very well done and thank you for sharing this****kahpot
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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What a beautiful read describing this ancient tree, and I like this form of writing which you seem to have captured excellently, very well done and thank you for sharing this****kahpot
Comment Written 25-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Vanished", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but I'm never given enough of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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"Vanished", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but I'm never given enough of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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Thank you.
You're welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You see less of these old gnarled twisted trees these days, are these trees deformed because of lack of nourishment I wonder? If this is the case, then our planet is not so polluted as we thought. I enjoyed your concern for this lonely old tree being the last one and so it is bereft, but I expect it is still plagued with pixies, elves and sprites when the sun falls, I loved your choice of words here that gave an ancient feel to your poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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You see less of these old gnarled twisted trees these days, are these trees deformed because of lack of nourishment I wonder? If this is the case, then our planet is not so polluted as we thought. I enjoyed your concern for this lonely old tree being the last one and so it is bereft, but I expect it is still plagued with pixies, elves and sprites when the sun falls, I loved your choice of words here that gave an ancient feel to your poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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Thank you for this lovely review.
Comment from Pantygynt
This reminded me of the Brigadoon legend at the end where the village vanishes. This is an excellent example of the breed, with its strangely separated rhyme scheme.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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This reminded me of the Brigadoon legend at the end where the village vanishes. This is an excellent example of the breed, with its strangely separated rhyme scheme.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Thank you. I'm so happy you like it.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi DAMOMMY,
I am glad I read your notes. I read the poem and hadn't realised that the rhyming is done in the following stanza. What an interesting form. I Bet this took some working out. It was a nice smooth read with no stumbles and pleasantly presented. I think your writing this has inspired me to have a go. Sorry I have no sixes left. It does deserve them.
Brenda.x
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Hi DAMOMMY,
I am glad I read your notes. I read the poem and hadn't realised that the rhyming is done in the following stanza. What an interesting form. I Bet this took some working out. It was a nice smooth read with no stumbles and pleasantly presented. I think your writing this has inspired me to have a go. Sorry I have no sixes left. It does deserve them.
Brenda.x
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Yes, do give it a try. Thank you for the review and especially the compliments.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a mysterious poem that tells the ending with a clue of a single oak tree remaining as a proof to the believers that some mythical village of tiny beings had been there but now was vanished. Concise and compelling,for those who live tales of wee folk like fairies, sprites, pixies, or perhaps leprechauns.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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This is a mysterious poem that tells the ending with a clue of a single oak tree remaining as a proof to the believers that some mythical village of tiny beings had been there but now was vanished. Concise and compelling,for those who live tales of wee folk like fairies, sprites, pixies, or perhaps leprechauns.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very skillfully-written, beautiful poem. You have made excellent
use of vivid, specific details to contrast what once was, according to myth, and what is now.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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This is a very skillfully-written, beautiful poem. You have made excellent
use of vivid, specific details to contrast what once was, according to myth, and what is now.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from lyenochka
You always show me such interesting forms, Yvonne! I love your magical picture of the fairy village that once lived in the ancient arbor! It makes me feel a little sad for the loss of those trees and inhabitants.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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You always show me such interesting forms, Yvonne! I love your magical picture of the fairy village that once lived in the ancient arbor! It makes me feel a little sad for the loss of those trees and inhabitants.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thanks so much for reviewing this. I was a little sad for them, too.
Comment from judiverse
That seems like rather tricky rhyme, but you did excellent work with it. It reads smoothly. This is rather a sad theme with the lone tree in what had once been a lush forest and the silence when the birds have gone and the village has vanished. Only loneliness remains. Great work with this the atmosphere really comes through. juid
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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That seems like rather tricky rhyme, but you did excellent work with it. It reads smoothly. This is rather a sad theme with the lone tree in what had once been a lush forest and the silence when the birds have gone and the village has vanished. Only loneliness remains. Great work with this the atmosphere really comes through. juid
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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I'm so glad it did. Thank you.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with a complex style, Yvonne. Your notes are great to explain it. Your image is a perfect accompaniment to your well-chosen words. I like the story told in your poem. Your words flow well with great imagery. This is a bit like a sonnet (with an extra line in each verse). I could see the old tree, the fairies, elves. Your words are great at creating the atmosphere of this ancient place now gone. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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You did a great job with a complex style, Yvonne. Your notes are great to explain it. Your image is a perfect accompaniment to your well-chosen words. I like the story told in your poem. Your words flow well with great imagery. This is a bit like a sonnet (with an extra line in each verse). I could see the old tree, the fairies, elves. Your words are great at creating the atmosphere of this ancient place now gone. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
