A Woman Scorned
Be careful of the pranks you pull25 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"A Woman Scorned", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Being a woman scorned is absolutely NO excuse! I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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"A Woman Scorned", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Being a woman scorned is absolutely NO excuse! I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Duchess, you honor me with the kind six star review.
Comment from lyenochka
That's a great take on the picture challenge! The picture in the back could be something that she was relating but the retelling in the office makes her seem quite unlike the expression in the picture.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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That's a great take on the picture challenge! The picture in the back could be something that she was relating but the retelling in the office makes her seem quite unlike the expression in the picture.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Ivenochka, thank you for traveling in a new direction with my entry.
Comment from crzypnter
I like the unique take on the artwork for the challenge. It was well written and flows well from line to line. Thank you for sharing. Blessings
August
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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I like the unique take on the artwork for the challenge. It was well written and flows well from line to line. Thank you for sharing. Blessings
August
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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August, thank you it was fun to take this in a new possible direction.
Comment from Sallyo
And you'd believe someone who looked like that, definitely. Maybe. On a good day. If you had nothing better to do! I like your take on this challenge, and suspect Rachel is soon going to swap her fancied woes for some real ones!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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And you'd believe someone who looked like that, definitely. Maybe. On a good day. If you had nothing better to do! I like your take on this challenge, and suspect Rachel is soon going to swap her fancied woes for some real ones!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Sal, one would certainly hope this be the case, Its always fun to put a spin on some things. Keep us honest :)
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, an absorbing narrative, requiring a bit more attention in its rhyming rhythm, which is easily achieved by reading aloud at least a couple of times. For example, with your permission:
"as she saw that girl in the arms of her beau,"
"the gun, she thought, was loaded with blanks,"
" and to them, she was going to unleash a prank,"
"the detective sat riveted, her eyes glistening,
"ever so intently, she was listening,"
"to Rachel's reveal, she felt so forlorn,"
again, my opinion, but you can see and hear what I mean...
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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In my opinion, an absorbing narrative, requiring a bit more attention in its rhyming rhythm, which is easily achieved by reading aloud at least a couple of times. For example, with your permission:
"as she saw that girl in the arms of her beau,"
"the gun, she thought, was loaded with blanks,"
" and to them, she was going to unleash a prank,"
"the detective sat riveted, her eyes glistening,
"ever so intently, she was listening,"
"to Rachel's reveal, she felt so forlorn,"
again, my opinion, but you can see and hear what I mean...
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Eve, yes, yes! Thank you for your clear and concise remarks. I understand, thank you.
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You are very welcome indeed. I must say, it is always so much easier to see and hear imperfections objectively in others' works. Ours are often viewed too subjectively...Eve
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and an excellent interpretation of the picture. Rather just walk away when someone betrays us it is not worth giving them any more of your attention of your time.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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A very well-written poem and an excellent interpretation of the picture. Rather just walk away when someone betrays us it is not worth giving them any more of your attention of your time.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Sandra, thank you p, it was fun to play this out.
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
Interesting piece. The image worked great with this poem. The rhyme and rhythm flowed nicely. This was a clever little piece and the crime was solved by the end of the poem. Good job. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Interesting piece. The image worked great with this poem. The rhyme and rhythm flowed nicely. This was a clever little piece and the crime was solved by the end of the poem. Good job. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Brenda, thank you.
Comment from Barbaraj1
This is a great poem and told an excellent story. The poem is
unique. It tells a great story and your rhyming is perfect.
Mysteries are my favorite books.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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This is a great poem and told an excellent story. The poem is
unique. It tells a great story and your rhyming is perfect.
Mysteries are my favorite books.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Barbara, thank you...I felt a bit dodgy with the approach, but I am a risk taker and it was fun to run something quite different.
Comment from Sandtana Kay
I liked this poem very much. I can relate to the woman scorned. My husband was a skirt chaser. After my divorce I found that a great deal
of men, as well as women, have a problem with fidelity. While I was married I wanted to make my ex sorry but never planned to shoot him.
Maybe the "her" he was involved with. It's true what they say, "It takes
two to tango". I would have to take them both out.
Sandtana Kay
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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I liked this poem very much. I can relate to the woman scorned. My husband was a skirt chaser. After my divorce I found that a great deal
of men, as well as women, have a problem with fidelity. While I was married I wanted to make my ex sorry but never planned to shoot him.
Maybe the "her" he was involved with. It's true what they say, "It takes
two to tango". I would have to take them both out.
Sandtana Kay
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Sandtana Kay, I am at a loss for words, as I have been most fortuitous to have had a loving wife and sustained marriage for 36 years.
Comment from robyn corum
JLR,
Nice entry for the Pix This challenge. Somehow, when I saw this picture, I thought that was a guitar he was holding. Weird me. I have no idea how that happened. Well, obviously, I just didn't look closely, huh?
But this is a cool and classic take on the old detective story. Nice job! Thanks. I enjoyed!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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JLR,
Nice entry for the Pix This challenge. Somehow, when I saw this picture, I thought that was a guitar he was holding. Weird me. I have no idea how that happened. Well, obviously, I just didn't look closely, huh?
But this is a cool and classic take on the old detective story. Nice job! Thanks. I enjoyed!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Robyn, thanks much, it was fun to play a bot with this..
