Game Day
A fun filled memorable day.16 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
Happy Birthday, Patricia, and congratulations on your continued weight loss. That is super fantastic!! I am glad you could spend the day with the Dodgers, and your family, too.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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Happy Birthday, Patricia, and congratulations on your continued weight loss. That is super fantastic!! I am glad you could spend the day with the Dodgers, and your family, too.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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Thanks for your review. It is a biographical poem, but it is of my youngest brother, not my twin brother with who m I celebrated our birthdays last year.
Comment from JudyE
What a great day this must have been for you - well worth waiting for, I would think.
I've listed some spags but they are all minor.
about what my day would hold.It was not just - space missing after 'hold'
We stopped at place where - 'stopped at a place'
Dodger fans in attendance as attested to the fact - should be 'attested by'
As the game progressed the Dodgers scored another run - comma after 'progressed'
Before the start of the sixth inning, wanting to be sure I got my necessary walking in for the day, I went around the stadium another time and as I walked I could hear the crowd cheering but I could not see the scoreboard so I did not know what happened. - commas after 'walked' and 'cheering'
As I've Got Friend In Low Place was playing - should be 'Low Places'
In the eighth inning the Dodgers scored another run tying the game at 3-3. The Diamondbacks did not score in the eighth inning, so to the ninth inning we were even at the 3-3 score. T - delete 'T' at the end
In the tenth inning neither team scored - comma after 'inning'
So my special day was complete and had provided me with some good memories of a wonderful day thanks in large part to Penny, Larry and my beloved Dodgers. - comma after 'day'
Congratulations too on your 81st birthday.
Judy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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What a great day this must have been for you - well worth waiting for, I would think.
I've listed some spags but they are all minor.
about what my day would hold.It was not just - space missing after 'hold'
We stopped at place where - 'stopped at a place'
Dodger fans in attendance as attested to the fact - should be 'attested by'
As the game progressed the Dodgers scored another run - comma after 'progressed'
Before the start of the sixth inning, wanting to be sure I got my necessary walking in for the day, I went around the stadium another time and as I walked I could hear the crowd cheering but I could not see the scoreboard so I did not know what happened. - commas after 'walked' and 'cheering'
As I've Got Friend In Low Place was playing - should be 'Low Places'
In the eighth inning the Dodgers scored another run tying the game at 3-3. The Diamondbacks did not score in the eighth inning, so to the ninth inning we were even at the 3-3 score. T - delete 'T' at the end
In the tenth inning neither team scored - comma after 'inning'
So my special day was complete and had provided me with some good memories of a wonderful day thanks in large part to Penny, Larry and my beloved Dodgers. - comma after 'day'
Congratulations too on your 81st birthday.
Judy
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from judiverse
That did turn out to be a long game. No wonder you were ready to leave. You must have been so pleased that the Dodgers won. It was your right to have a hot dog. You deserve a treat once in a while, especially at a baseball game. Glad you enjoyed. You did a great job of telling the story of your trip to the ball game. judi
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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That did turn out to be a long game. No wonder you were ready to leave. You must have been so pleased that the Dodgers won. It was your right to have a hot dog. You deserve a treat once in a while, especially at a baseball game. Glad you enjoyed. You did a great job of telling the story of your trip to the ball game. judi
Comment Written 03-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome. judi
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from brenda faye curtis
It sounds like you had a fantastic day! I'm so happy that you are with your loving family, and that you have another memory of fun and fellowship to treasure. Your story was well told in chronological order, and detailed in a way that conveyed true emotion. Nice one!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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It sounds like you had a fantastic day! I'm so happy that you are with your loving family, and that you have another memory of fun and fellowship to treasure. Your story was well told in chronological order, and detailed in a way that conveyed true emotion. Nice one!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're very welcome, Patricia.
Comment from Mistydawn
It sounds like you had a wonderful day. I'm so glad. It was well- deserved. I bet the hot dog was delicious. probably one of the best you've ever had.
I'm so glad you were able to make a lot of great memories.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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It sounds like you had a wonderful day. I'm so glad. It was well- deserved. I bet the hot dog was delicious. probably one of the best you've ever had.
I'm so glad you were able to make a lot of great memories.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Patricia. Congratulations on being able to have such a great day at the ball game. You got to do all of the things that make baseball fun. I want to mention you had the hot dog dressed up the way it should be. Anything but mustard and chopped onions is too much. :) Robert
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Hello Patricia. Congratulations on being able to have such a great day at the ball game. You got to do all of the things that make baseball fun. I want to mention you had the hot dog dressed up the way it should be. Anything but mustard and chopped onions is too much. :) Robert
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjo9yed your story, Patricia. Thank you for sharing your day with me. It seems you had a very busy, but fun day. I enjoyed your account of the game in those crucial innings. You look amazing for your 81st birthday. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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I enjo9yed your story, Patricia. Thank you for sharing your day with me. It seems you had a very busy, but fun day. I enjoyed your account of the game in those crucial innings. You look amazing for your 81st birthday. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Janetsue
Happy belated birthday! I am so glad your baseball adventure turned out to be a winner. You look very happy in the picture and it might be that you had a premonition that the Dodgers would come home the victor. Way to go! xoxo Janet
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Happy belated birthday! I am so glad your baseball adventure turned out to be a winner. You look very happy in the picture and it might be that you had a premonition that the Dodgers would come home the victor. Way to go! xoxo Janet
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm glad you enjoyed your birthday present and the game where you team won and you enjoyed your hotdog too Patricia, and you are continuing to lose weight which is a bonus for you. All in all you had a good time and you shared your experience with us, nice photo too, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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I'm glad you enjoyed your birthday present and the game where you team won and you enjoyed your hotdog too Patricia, and you are continuing to lose weight which is a bonus for you. All in all you had a good time and you shared your experience with us, nice photo too, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, your life has been so blessed since you moved in with Penny and Larry! Thank you so much for sharing your big day with us, Patricia! And congratulations on the continued weight loss. May the Lord give you success in reaching your goal!
"I ask if we could go home" (asked)
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Oh, your life has been so blessed since you moved in with Penny and Larry! Thank you so much for sharing your big day with us, Patricia! And congratulations on the continued weight loss. May the Lord give you success in reaching your goal!
"I ask if we could go home" (asked)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind review.
