Lazy River
ABC Poetry30 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Melissa, again I am late in my review but... a BIG CONGRATULATIONS to you on your fine win. This is so well written. An ABC poem that took me to floating on a calm river. Refreshingly relaxing and a good read. ~DD
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Melissa, again I am late in my review but... a BIG CONGRATULATIONS to you on your fine win. This is so well written. An ABC poem that took me to floating on a calm river. Refreshingly relaxing and a good read. ~DD
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Hi DD. For this contest, I was trying to showcase summertime... haha. It is either the grill or a lazy river.. those mean summer to me.
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
You use such description and calming words, you can almost feel the cooling effect of the water. The words and the picture match well.
Congrats on the second place finish in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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You use such description and calming words, you can almost feel the cooling effect of the water. The words and the picture match well.
Congrats on the second place finish in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Hi Joan... thank you for this lovely review. I appreciate your encouragement on this verse.
Melissa
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No problem, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from tempeste
Near the woods we have a stream that runs ..the water comes from above the valley from the snow melting in the warmer weather ..it's not deep enough to swim in it (I'm not a fond swimmer, anyway) but I have at times dipped my feet in.
There are (chesnuts) trees all around like in your pic and often I have sat with my dog in the past under the limbs ( I love this terms you used .. it's very poetic.)
They are peaceful moments ( like those when I walk in the woods).
I 'm happy your poem made the podium ..a meritable win , indeed!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Near the woods we have a stream that runs ..the water comes from above the valley from the snow melting in the warmer weather ..it's not deep enough to swim in it (I'm not a fond swimmer, anyway) but I have at times dipped my feet in.
There are (chesnuts) trees all around like in your pic and often I have sat with my dog in the past under the limbs ( I love this terms you used .. it's very poetic.)
They are peaceful moments ( like those when I walk in the woods).
I 'm happy your poem made the podium ..a meritable win , indeed!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much, tempeste! I loved reading your own story about your peaceful place. I am grateful that you took the time to review.
Melissa
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I wouldn't be able to live in a city ..Milano is less than an hour's drive away but.... all the smog, polution and choatic noise are just not for me..
You describe it well the " haze "one falls "victim" to...all you can hear is the melody of the stream, a chirp and sometimes the breeze caressing the leaves....and somethimes you actually take note that you are breathing and your heart is pumping.
Comment from juliaSjames
Beautiful poem that conveys a sense of refreshment in the context of nature's beauty. The rhyme and metre flow smooth as the tranquil river. Love this line
"Submerged in the coolness as it creeps around my skin"
Congratulations on your second place win in the contest.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2019
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Beautiful poem that conveys a sense of refreshment in the context of nature's beauty. The rhyme and metre flow smooth as the tranquil river. Love this line
"Submerged in the coolness as it creeps around my skin"
Congratulations on your second place win in the contest.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 24-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2019
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Thank you, Julia. I am glad you liked this Lazy River verse.
Melissa
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Apt reference in my reading today, " out of the believer's heart shall flow rivers of living water."
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a very nicely described, rhymed, and composed ABC poem. I wish you much luck in the contest. The image combined with your words make for tranquil and interesting post. Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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This is a very nicely described, rhymed, and composed ABC poem. I wish you much luck in the contest. The image combined with your words make for tranquil and interesting post. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Hi Marilyn. I was thinking about floating on a peaceful, lazy river on a hot day. It sounds like the perfect thing to do on a summer day. Thanks for the great review.
Melissa
Comment from MamaBebop
This is a wonderful ABC poem. You create a lovely picture and a sense of calm through your word choices. Good selection of accompanying image as well. Best of luck in the contest. MB
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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This is a wonderful ABC poem. You create a lovely picture and a sense of calm through your word choices. Good selection of accompanying image as well. Best of luck in the contest. MB
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Thanks so very much, MamaBebop!!!
Melissa
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Well done. I think one of these ABC poems would take me forever to write. I'd get the wrong letter in the wrong place. This is a lovely poem and sounds so relaxing. Hope you do well in the contest. rox
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Well done. I think one of these ABC poems would take me forever to write. I'd get the wrong letter in the wrong place. This is a lovely poem and sounds so relaxing. Hope you do well in the contest. rox
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much!! I enjoyed writing this lazy dazy float down the stream poem. Haha.
Melissa
Comment from kahpot
What a peaceful picture your words put in the readers mind, tranquillity, floating, and daydreaming, excellent and your artwork is wonderful, very well presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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What a peaceful picture your words put in the readers mind, tranquillity, floating, and daydreaming, excellent and your artwork is wonderful, very well presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thank you. I am so glad you liked it. I hope you find a place of relaxation too!!
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
Melissa, right now with the weather being what it is, I also wish to dive into a cool lazy river. I'm working on my house and painting it. The weather is in the hundreds and I just got home. I'm tired. My neck, back and hands hurts. I got paint all over me and I stink. :) this is a good entry for the ABC Poetry Contest.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Melissa, right now with the weather being what it is, I also wish to dive into a cool lazy river. I'm working on my house and painting it. The weather is in the hundreds and I just got home. I'm tired. My neck, back and hands hurts. I got paint all over me and I stink. :) this is a good entry for the ABC Poetry Contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Haha... Jose, too funny. You should have gone to the river and floated for a while after you finished for the day. I hope you cool off and feel better!! Thanks so much for the review!!
Melissa
Comment from Joy Graham
You have convinced me to jump in for a swim :) The people cture is gorgeous and inviting. I love your richly descriptive lines. I'm no good at diving so I'll just jump in. I have always had issues with my ears and water. This poem is so well done that I forgot it is an ABC poetry form. I'm sorry to be out of sixes. Will a virtual six do?
Best wishes in the contest. You have a winner in my humble opinion!
Joy xx
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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You have convinced me to jump in for a swim :) The people cture is gorgeous and inviting. I love your richly descriptive lines. I'm no good at diving so I'll just jump in. I have always had issues with my ears and water. This poem is so well done that I forgot it is an ABC poetry form. I'm sorry to be out of sixes. Will a virtual six do?
Best wishes in the contest. You have a winner in my humble opinion!
Joy xx
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Hi Joy... thanks for the virtual gift. Ha. Thank you for the lovely review. I was at the pool when I wrote it and would go float, come back and write, and so on... it was fun! Thanks.
Melissa