Love Long Distance
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Grandpa's Genes - Chapter 8"A Wartime Romance
33 total reviews
Comment from Janilou
Men! Can't live with them, can't live without them. LOL I had to come back and see what happened in this chapter after reviewing the next one.
Once again, I found nothing to correct. Great story and I am enjoying it very much. Some women really do go over the top. Just to prove something to themselves I guess. Well written.
Write on!
Jan
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Men! Can't live with them, can't live without them. LOL I had to come back and see what happened in this chapter after reviewing the next one.
Once again, I found nothing to correct. Great story and I am enjoying it very much. Some women really do go over the top. Just to prove something to themselves I guess. Well written.
Write on!
Jan
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Hi Janilou! We really appreciate you going back to read this previous chapter. We're so glad you are enjoying Love Long Distance, and we thank you for your awesome review here. Men! Women! What strange breeds! (LOL!)
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from DonandVicki
I really enjoy following and reviewing your story. Very well written and the dialogue really pulls the reader into your work. The use of varied media really complements your story.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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I really enjoy following and reviewing your story. Very well written and the dialogue really pulls the reader into your work. The use of varied media really complements your story.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Hi DonandVicki! So very kind of you! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance! Also, for your continued support. We're so glad you enjoyed this chapter and the dialogue pulled you right in. Your comments here are great, and mean so much to us! Thank you also for mentioning that the varied media compliments our work. Wishing you a wonderful Sunday! We hope you come back for Chapter 9. It's in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
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Your 6-star rating is quite the honor! We both admire and SALUTE YOU! Again, thank you so much! - Bill & Cathy
Comment from Sandra Montanino
I really enjoyed your story and videos. They were great fun to watch and the music was great. Your chapter 8 feels more like a screenplay. It's almost all dialogue and then you have a block of mostly exposition. I would like to know what people are thinking or at least what the POV person is thinking. Hope this helps.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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I really enjoyed your story and videos. They were great fun to watch and the music was great. Your chapter 8 feels more like a screenplay. It's almost all dialogue and then you have a block of mostly exposition. I would like to know what people are thinking or at least what the POV person is thinking. Hope this helps.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Hi Sandra,
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance. This particular chapter was mostly dialogue (and hopefully a full chuckles), but the next chapter will delve more into the character(s) thoughts, as did some previous chapters. By using different styles and perspectives throughout this novel, we believe it will move the story along at a good pace and keeps the readers engaged. When it all comes together, the characters will become more than words on a page. We don't want you to close the book and forget you ever read it! I'm sure you understand what we mean. We really appreciate you coming by and hope you return for the next chapter. It's in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Susan Larson
This is the first time I'm reviewing a novel in the works as the characters are still being developed and up for change along the way if the story seems to lean that way. The nurse scene at the end seems extreme, but, hey, this is fiction, right?
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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This is the first time I'm reviewing a novel in the works as the characters are still being developed and up for change along the way if the story seems to lean that way. The nurse scene at the end seems extreme, but, hey, this is fiction, right?
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Hi Susan! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance. Yes, the nurse is extreme, and real life experiences can be even stranger than fiction. When I (Cathy) do book signings, customers come and tell me their stories and constantly confirm how true that statment is! The nurse will have to deal with her actions, as will Cathy. We hope you come back to read Chapter 9 to find out. It's in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Cathy
I think you got the right of Bill. He definitely is a flirt and yet I also believe when he falls in love he is true. Your story sounds like Bill speaking which isn't a bad thing if the story is kinda like an autobiography of you both. Well written and entertaining. Good luck!
xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Hi Cathy
I think you got the right of Bill. He definitely is a flirt and yet I also believe when he falls in love he is true. Your story sounds like Bill speaking which isn't a bad thing if the story is kinda like an autobiography of you both. Well written and entertaining. Good luck!
xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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So nice to hear from you, Kiwi! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review this chapter of Love Long Distance. Really appreciate what you share here, and so glad you enjoyed it and find it well written. If you haven't already done so, be sure to listen to the podcast about co-authoring here on this profile page. It explains how we write together. Wishing you all the best.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Pantygynt
Certainly full justification is the way most novels end up but Fanstory's formatting requirements are different and we are asked not to justify or indent paragraphs. Were you to enter this in any contest here you could as a result find the work disqualified. Just a well-meaning warning.
I find the nurse's conduct not really believable, to the extent of being ridiculous in fact. That would be all right if this were comedy but, although I havent seen earlier episodes I don't believe it is.
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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Certainly full justification is the way most novels end up but Fanstory's formatting requirements are different and we are asked not to justify or indent paragraphs. Were you to enter this in any contest here you could as a result find the work disqualified. Just a well-meaning warning.
I find the nurse's conduct not really believable, to the extent of being ridiculous in fact. That would be all right if this were comedy but, although I havent seen earlier episodes I don't believe it is.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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Greetings, Pantygynt!
Cathy and I find your review offensive. As an FS Teacher and Marine, your remarks are unprofessional. We are aware of FS's Site Rules. 'Full Justification or Indenting of Paragraphs' are within the boundary of Site Rules. We recommend 'NIGHT SCHOOL' for you! Having said this, she and I request that you 'SKIP AROUND' our work in the future. God Bless!
Respectfully,
Bill and Cathy
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I am sorry you found my review offensive. I have reread what I wrote, which was intended to be helpful, and can see nothing there that could reasonably be classed as offensive.
Please note my remark, 'Just a well-meaning warning'. I merely wanted to spare you from the annoyance of having work disqualified from contests. How that can be considered offensive is beyond me.
I have noted your request however, and will try to avoid reviewing your work in future.
Comment from V McCrary
This is my first chapter and the story has caught my attention. I don't know of very many old-timers who would have used the word "flamboyant" though. I'm in my 60's and most people, in my neck of the woods, had a rather negative connotation for that word (equating it to outwardly & over-the top queer). I think I might have used a different word like "mannish" or "forward". But that's just my thoughts. Great story though. Entertaining.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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This is my first chapter and the story has caught my attention. I don't know of very many old-timers who would have used the word "flamboyant" though. I'm in my 60's and most people, in my neck of the woods, had a rather negative connotation for that word (equating it to outwardly & over-the top queer). I think I might have used a different word like "mannish" or "forward". But that's just my thoughts. Great story though. Entertaining.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Hi There! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance. By your profile, it is unclear where in the US you are from. Maybe that's why, in your neck of the woods, the word "flamboyant" had/has that interpretation. Glad you enjoyed the story, and we hope you return for the next chapter. It is in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a great weekend!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from tfawcus
A nice balance of humour and action in this. The dialogue is crisp and engaging. This is a love story with a difference and the co-authoring is working well.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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A nice balance of humour and action in this. The dialogue is crisp and engaging. This is a love story with a difference and the co-authoring is working well.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Hi Tony! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance. Also, thank you for your continued support. Your comments are awesome and greatly appreciated. Chapter 9 is in the works and coming soon. Have a wonderful weekend!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Love your story. Was a little humerous but it sure added to the plot. I cannot imagine a hospital with this type of flirty nurse...sounds like she is a little carefree.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Love your story. Was a little humerous but it sure added to the plot. I cannot imagine a hospital with this type of flirty nurse...sounds like she is a little carefree.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Hi Rosemary! So glad you love our story! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. We really appreciate it. Yes, the nurse is flirty and a little carefree. Also, way outta line! Glad you felt the humor added to the plot. We hope you come back to read Chapter 9. It's in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Neonewman
LOL!
"Bill was now eyeing the nurse--from head to toe, and back again. Her big blue eyes batted at him a little too much for Cathy's liking.
Bill was in the right place to put himself in a dangerous situation I suppose.
"Why, aren't you cute," the nurse said to Bill.
Nurse puts her life on the line here lol.
"Wow! Who are you?" he replied, quite intrigued.
And this seals the deal. A cat fight in a hospital.
This is a well-crafted chapter. This is the first chapter I've read. You have definitely piqued my interest.
God bless
Steve
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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LOL!
"Bill was now eyeing the nurse--from head to toe, and back again. Her big blue eyes batted at him a little too much for Cathy's liking.
Bill was in the right place to put himself in a dangerous situation I suppose.
"Why, aren't you cute," the nurse said to Bill.
Nurse puts her life on the line here lol.
"Wow! Who are you?" he replied, quite intrigued.
And this seals the deal. A cat fight in a hospital.
This is a well-crafted chapter. This is the first chapter I've read. You have definitely piqued my interest.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Hi Steve! We're so glad you stopped by to read and review this chapter of Love Long Distance. Thank you! Nice summary of it here in your comments. We're happy you enjoyed the read and we've piqued your interest. Check out the previous chapters when you get a chance. Also, we hope you come back to read Chapter 9. It's in the works and coming soon. Have a great weekend!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
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My pleasure. I look forward to reading more.
