Lemons
Adult Poem8 total reviews
Comment from victor 66
Tear Mystery Poet/writer, this is a very nice poem. However, reading the prompt entry rules, it says something about writing your piece in a script format. The other thing, is that you have stated in the authors notes that there is a photo of a painting by a Russian surrealist. I don't see a picture. Good luck.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Tear Mystery Poet/writer, this is a very nice poem. However, reading the prompt entry rules, it says something about writing your piece in a script format. The other thing, is that you have stated in the authors notes that there is a photo of a painting by a Russian surrealist. I don't see a picture. Good luck.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Okay, when life gives us lemon we make lemonade. I added the photo and wrote a script to meet the requirements. Thanks for the review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from LeannaP
Hi there, You have time , but remember the entry for the contest shoulfmd be in the form of a script.
I think it definitely serves well as a poem but again, this isn't a poetry contest. Its an adult/ erotic script.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Hi there, You have time , but remember the entry for the contest shoulfmd be in the form of a script.
I think it definitely serves well as a poem but again, this isn't a poetry contest. Its an adult/ erotic script.
Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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I do have time and corrected my errors. Now, to move forward in greener pastures. Thanks.
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Your welcome
Comment from LisaMay
I checked into this contest to see how on earth anyone could come up with a SCRIPT to match the prompt's instructions, as they were so specific. It seems that whoever initiated the script probably had an offering written to the brief already and anyone else's would have to be as specific to be in the contest. Yours is neither a script, is less than the 200 words asked for, is hardly erotic, and where's the illustration? You have probably wasted your entry fee.
But having said all that, I did enjoy your poem, and who indeed can disqualify 'a love so warming'? I liked your work because it is not a script (I find all those instructions intrusive), because it is brief, the rhyming and rhythm appealed to me, and because it is not pornographic like the only other entry. But I would have liked to see the young Russian's artwork.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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I checked into this contest to see how on earth anyone could come up with a SCRIPT to match the prompt's instructions, as they were so specific. It seems that whoever initiated the script probably had an offering written to the brief already and anyone else's would have to be as specific to be in the contest. Yours is neither a script, is less than the 200 words asked for, is hardly erotic, and where's the illustration? You have probably wasted your entry fee.
But having said all that, I did enjoy your poem, and who indeed can disqualify 'a love so warming'? I liked your work because it is not a script (I find all those instructions intrusive), because it is brief, the rhyming and rhythm appealed to me, and because it is not pornographic like the only other entry. But I would have liked to see the young Russian's artwork.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Yes, I realized my mistake, and have corrected it. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
While pains me to do this, the entry falls short of all the contest requirements and will most likely be disqualified by the CEC prior to judging unless it is fixed prior to deadline.
Contest Rules:
1. Write an adult/erotic script that starts with the sentence, "The Lemon was..." - This begins with "Lemons smell was in the air."
2. All entries must be in the form of a script and must contain at least two hundred words. - This is a poem and not a script which consists of characters, settings, and dialog. It also 70 words and not the required minimum of 200 words.
I hope you are able to fix this so as not to have wasted your hard earned dollars. Good luck!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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While pains me to do this, the entry falls short of all the contest requirements and will most likely be disqualified by the CEC prior to judging unless it is fixed prior to deadline.
Contest Rules:
1. Write an adult/erotic script that starts with the sentence, "The Lemon was..." - This begins with "Lemons smell was in the air."
2. All entries must be in the form of a script and must contain at least two hundred words. - This is a poem and not a script which consists of characters, settings, and dialog. It also 70 words and not the required minimum of 200 words.
I hope you are able to fix this so as not to have wasted your hard earned dollars. Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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I made corrections and back in the running. Thanks for the review.
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My pleasure. I am happy you could fix it as I hate to see anyone throw their hard earned reviewing bucks away.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer, (3)
I think you need to go back and re-read the qualifications for this contest. You missed on all three:
1.) script
2.) 200 words
3.) adult/erotic
I wish you good luck in the editing!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Dear Mystery Writer, (3)
I think you need to go back and re-read the qualifications for this contest. You missed on all three:
1.) script
2.) 200 words
3.) adult/erotic
I wish you good luck in the editing!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Dang!!!!
Comment from Ben Colder
Evil Eddy wishes to leave its mark of AAA in certain places. This comes by cutting and pasting. I find nothing wrong with the wording. Strong stanzas. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Evil Eddy wishes to leave its mark of AAA in certain places. This comes by cutting and pasting. I find nothing wrong with the wording. Strong stanzas. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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I usually type my work and then cut and past it on the site. I have been doing this since I started, but recently AAA keeps coming up. Thanks.
Comment from Sara R.
Your poem brought me peace. That yellow round thing has amazing power. It wasn't your typical, "when life gives you lemons" poem. You took it to a beautiful place of serenity.
Because you copied and pasted, it picked up some weird characters. It's happened to me. In case you want to edit it.
Sara R.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Your poem brought me peace. That yellow round thing has amazing power. It wasn't your typical, "when life gives you lemons" poem. You took it to a beautiful place of serenity.
Because you copied and pasted, it picked up some weird characters. It's happened to me. In case you want to edit it.
Sara R.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Thank you, I will correct that.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
This offering for the writing prompt is a poem. The prompt calls for a script that begins with the words "The Lemon was ..." -- the poem does not begin with the correct words. I am not sure of the meaning of all the capital A's at the end of the lines toward the end...?
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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This offering for the writing prompt is a poem. The prompt calls for a script that begins with the words "The Lemon was ..." -- the poem does not begin with the correct words. I am not sure of the meaning of all the capital A's at the end of the lines toward the end...?
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Thanks