Accidental Hitchhiker
It takes one willing spirit to move another...28 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
Oops! So your hitchhiker was a ghost... Your story is very original and creative. The ending made me smile. Sort of. ;)
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
  |
Oops! So your hitchhiker was a ghost... Your story is very original and creative. The ending made me smile. Sort of. ;)
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
-
Thanx for your review on this one, Maria -- this one was a bit different, but I like to try new things once in a while! :) ;) Take care! :) Yvette
Comment from LIJ Red
I doubt that anyone counts the words...when the story ends just under the art, you know it is close...When identical twin John G. came over from the west coast to pay respects to Joe, many people in the funeral home did doubletakes...excellent flash fiction...
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
|
I doubt that anyone counts the words...when the story ends just under the art, you know it is close...When identical twin John G. came over from the west coast to pay respects to Joe, many people in the funeral home did doubletakes...excellent flash fiction...
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
-
Thanx for stopping in for the review on this one, LlJ -- always enjoy reading your reviews! :) ;) I appreciate your time and your smiles! :) Yvette
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was very goosepimply story, we hear these things happen yet shrug it off as nonsense, but, who really knows? I liked this flash fiction story very much, it's a great little contest entry. Well done and good luck. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
|
That was very goosepimply story, we hear these things happen yet shrug it off as nonsense, but, who really knows? I liked this flash fiction story very much, it's a great little contest entry. Well done and good luck. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
-
Hooray -- if you got goosepimples then it worked. :) I tried to make it eerie, but I wasn't sure if it even worked with only 100 words. :) LOL! :) Thanx for the vote of confidence, Sandra! :) :) Take care, ma'am! ;) Yvette
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A chilling tale, told with finesse and well written words Yvette, your end lines pack the punch in this 100 word flash fiction, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
|
A chilling tale, told with finesse and well written words Yvette, your end lines pack the punch in this 100 word flash fiction, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
-
I tried something new on this one and tried not to be too creepy - LOL! ;) Glad you enjoyed, Dolly -- thanx for stopping by on this one! :) Take care, ma'am! :) Yvette
Comment from royowen
What a brilliantly conceived poet dear Yvette, I really like this one, the short, sharp narrstive is a no nonsense plot, with the witness of a mysterious appearance and disappearance of an apparition, well done, my friend. Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
|
What a brilliantly conceived poet dear Yvette, I really like this one, the short, sharp narrstive is a no nonsense plot, with the witness of a mysterious appearance and disappearance of an apparition, well done, my friend. Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
-
Oh, Roy -- I'm so glad you enjoyed this one! :) :) It was a little something different and I wasn't sure how it worked! :) ;) Thanx for the vote of confidence! ;) Take care over there! :) Yvette :)
-
My pleasure
Comment from susand3022
Hi Yvette! I totally didn't see that coming... so many people are really surprising me with these little shorts in the last couple of days. I know the hundred-word flash is coming up... no wonder I never had a chance! I'm not this creative in such a short span yet! Good luck! :)
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
|
Hi Yvette! I totally didn't see that coming... so many people are really surprising me with these little shorts in the last couple of days. I know the hundred-word flash is coming up... no wonder I never had a chance! I'm not this creative in such a short span yet! Good luck! :)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
-
Thanx for the vote of confidence here, Susan, much appreciated! :) ;) Glad you enjoyed this one -- know it was kinda 'creepy'. :) ;) LOL! :) Take care and thanx for dropping by! :) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
Eerie story Yvette. ;) I guess everyone has one ghost in the family.
Down here we have something similar to what you wrote. The difference is that the hitchhiker is an old woman, asking for a ride next to a cemetery. She has been pick-up a few times but vanishes and appears back in the cemetery this is a good entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction..
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
|
Eerie story Yvette. ;) I guess everyone has one ghost in the family.
Down here we have something similar to what you wrote. The difference is that the hitchhiker is an old woman, asking for a ride next to a cemetery. She has been pick-up a few times but vanishes and appears back in the cemetery this is a good entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction..
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
-
Thanx so much for stopping in for this one, Jose -- it was a bit different for me, but I thought I'd try something a little different! :) Take care! :) ;)
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Yvette,
Ooooh,
This is a great flash write, my friend. I love your creatively crafted story. Nothing here to suggest editing. Good luck and thanks for a great read. Jan :-)
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
|
Hi Yvette,
Ooooh,
This is a great flash write, my friend. I love your creatively crafted story. Nothing here to suggest editing. Good luck and thanks for a great read. Jan :-)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
-
Thanx for your review on this one, Jan! :) This one was a bit different, but I like to try new things once in a while! :) ;) Take care, ma'am!! :) Yvette
Comment from JudyE
I enjoyed this and you've captured the speech patterns well. It's very well written and deserves to do well in the contest. Thanks for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
|
I enjoyed this and you've captured the speech patterns well. It's very well written and deserves to do well in the contest. Thanks for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
-
Glad you enjoyed this one, Judy! ;) Thanx for dropping by for the review -- take care! :) Yvette
Comment from Dawn Munro
I love that artwork, and it's perfect for your flash. I guess she was a ghost, but I'm not entirely sure who else was - was Bobby dead and she was going to his funeral? But she didn't know for sure where it was? Or SHE was dead (because she was on the funeral home's announcement)... I'm confused. Why would her ghost be in the Goodeetz lot after she was dead? Or the narrator killed her and didn't know it... I give up. LOL.
But good luck with the judges. It's probably just me.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
|
I love that artwork, and it's perfect for your flash. I guess she was a ghost, but I'm not entirely sure who else was - was Bobby dead and she was going to his funeral? But she didn't know for sure where it was? Or SHE was dead (because she was on the funeral home's announcement)... I'm confused. Why would her ghost be in the Goodeetz lot after she was dead? Or the narrator killed her and didn't know it... I give up. LOL.
But good luck with the judges. It's probably just me.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
-
Dunno to all ... it was just a silly flash fiction. :) Usually, a ghost is tied to the place of a tragic death... ? Sorry to confuse you, Dawn -- I do appreciate your trying. :) ;) Yvette
-
:))
