To Take Our Leave
Loop Poem: One Last Look...42 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a sad song about leaving a house you lived in forever. They hope the new owners will love it as much as they. It would hurt to much to return to see the changes in the house and the memorized and loved rooms.
Congrats on placing in the contest and keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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This is a sad song about leaving a house you lived in forever. They hope the new owners will love it as much as they. It would hurt to much to return to see the changes in the house and the memorized and loved rooms.
Congrats on placing in the contest and keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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Hello Joan!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
And thank you for the congratulations!
diane
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You're welcome on all accounts, Diane.
~Joan
Comment from LG Wolfe
I'm so glad I discovered your writing here. What a heartfelt, beautiful poem. Sad but at the same time the narrator is hopeful and full of acceptance.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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I'm so glad I discovered your writing here. What a heartfelt, beautiful poem. Sad but at the same time the narrator is hopeful and full of acceptance.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Hello LG!
Thank you so much!
diane
Comment from justjo66
I enjoyed your poem very much. It reminded me so much of my feelings when my husband and I sold our land and country home of 31 years to move closer to my 90 yr old mother.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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I enjoyed your poem very much. It reminded me so much of my feelings when my husband and I sold our land and country home of 31 years to move closer to my 90 yr old mother.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Hello!
Thank you for your excellent rating and empathetic review!
So appreciated!
diane
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Diane, what a very lovely poem so full of poignant feelings and memories of a life lived. You did a fine job of depicting their emotions on selling there place to others. Your author's notes added depth to this piece and made a difference. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Hello Diane, what a very lovely poem so full of poignant feelings and memories of a life lived. You did a fine job of depicting their emotions on selling there place to others. Your author's notes added depth to this piece and made a difference. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Hello Melissa!
So pleased my words resonated with you. I have been feeling very nostalgic about my parents and grandparents. All grew up on farms. My grandparents farmed all of their lives until...
Thank you for your excellent rating and review.
Miss you!
diane
Comment from Judy Swanson
This loop poem takes my breath away - and I am not usually a fan of the style and often find its tilting to read. Here, the words, flow beautifully and the repetition serves to emphasize the point of each thought so clearly.
There is specificity in the words - yet there is a universal understanding of the grief of any moment of departure when leaving your own treasures in the hands of a new caretaker.
Well done.
Judy
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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This loop poem takes my breath away - and I am not usually a fan of the style and often find its tilting to read. Here, the words, flow beautifully and the repetition serves to emphasize the point of each thought so clearly.
There is specificity in the words - yet there is a universal understanding of the grief of any moment of departure when leaving your own treasures in the hands of a new caretaker.
Well done.
Judy
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Hello Judy!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review. This piece is silently dedicated to my parents and grandparents = all were stewards to the land the loved until...
So pleased my words resonated with you.
An interesting poetic form... yes?
Thank you!
diane
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You are welcome - my privilege. Judy
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
No, we can never go back, even if we wanted to. It's never the same if we do. This is a lovely 'loop' poem, sad, but well written. I liked your author's notes too, that made me stop and think how many moments of joy and happiness I've had in my life. I hadn't looked at it like that. A brilliant contest entry, my friend. Good luck! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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No, we can never go back, even if we wanted to. It's never the same if we do. This is a lovely 'loop' poem, sad, but well written. I liked your author's notes too, that made me stop and think how many moments of joy and happiness I've had in my life. I hadn't looked at it like that. A brilliant contest entry, my friend. Good luck! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Hello Sandra!
So pleased you enjoyed!
There is so much of my parents' and grandparents' lives tied to this piece...
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...
diane
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written, moving poem vividly conveys the theme of leaving behind
the things we love when it's our time to go. We pray those who receive will love and care for what they inherit.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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This well-written, moving poem vividly conveys the theme of leaving behind
the things we love when it's our time to go. We pray those who receive will love and care for what they inherit.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Hello Janice!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Helena Frances
I love this! The poem flows well and the picture is made for the poem, or the poem is made for the picture-just perfect.
You have met the challenge of a Loop poem beautifully.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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I love this! The poem flows well and the picture is made for the poem, or the poem is made for the picture-just perfect.
You have met the challenge of a Loop poem beautifully.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Hello Helena!
The poem came first; I have been feeling very nostalgic lately for my parents and grandparents and the land they all loved...
Thank you for your excellent rating and review!
diane
Comment from LisaMay
Clearly, you have written something wonderful here. You have perfectly captured the emotions of having to let go after all the hard work and the memories created. I love the Thomas Wolfe quote too... very appropriate. This is the first loop poem that has not annoyed me with its repetitions. I like it, clearly...
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Clearly, you have written something wonderful here. You have perfectly captured the emotions of having to let go after all the hard work and the memories created. I love the Thomas Wolfe quote too... very appropriate. This is the first loop poem that has not annoyed me with its repetitions. I like it, clearly...
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Hello Lisa!
So very honored that you find this piece exceptional. I have been feeling very nostalgic about my parents, grandparents, and the land they all loved...
These Loop Poem can be annoying! I am pleased mine resonated with you!
Thank you!
diane
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You have portrayed that nostalgia very well.
Comment from susand3022
Hi Mrs. KT, This feels a little bitter-sweet... I'm so glad that my parents aren't ever going to have to go through this phase. We won't ever make them leave home. It must be hard for people to say goodbye to a home they have loved for their entire lives, I don't know how they do it really. We can only hope for the best I expect. :)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Hi Mrs. KT, This feels a little bitter-sweet... I'm so glad that my parents aren't ever going to have to go through this phase. We won't ever make them leave home. It must be hard for people to say goodbye to a home they have loved for their entire lives, I don't know how they do it really. We can only hope for the best I expect. :)
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Hello Susan!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
diane