Loud Louie
A boy brings a new perspective to the girls in his life28 total reviews
Comment from susand3022
And Rachelle... I LOVE THIS STORY! BECAUSE SOMETIMES BEING QUIET IS HIGHLY OVERRATED!!! lol, This is just great. I love that Loud Louie found a way to make Caroline laugh and the one thing that everyone always saw as his worst attribute was suddenly his greatest asset! Funny how kids work isn't it? ;)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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And Rachelle... I LOVE THIS STORY! BECAUSE SOMETIMES BEING QUIET IS HIGHLY OVERRATED!!! lol, This is just great. I love that Loud Louie found a way to make Caroline laugh and the one thing that everyone always saw as his worst attribute was suddenly his greatest asset! Funny how kids work isn't it? ;)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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Yes, this is why I love being a teacher SO very much! Thanks for the fun review, Susan. xo
Comment from Shirley McLain
A wonderful family story that I enjoyed reading. I know having a young family makes you want to pull your hair out sometimes, but where would we be if we didn't have them. You did a great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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A wonderful family story that I enjoyed reading. I know having a young family makes you want to pull your hair out sometimes, but where would we be if we didn't have them. You did a great job. Shirley
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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I agree with that! Children make life fun and a daily adventure. Plus, they're so POSITIVE!!
Thank you for your very nice review, Shirley. xo
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Rachelle,
This is a fun story to read. I can imagine it as a picture book for children. Children and adults would have fun reading it together :) Your characters are wonderfully warm and charismatic. At least that is my own humble opinion.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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Hi Rachelle,
This is a fun story to read. I can imagine it as a picture book for children. Children and adults would have fun reading it together :) Your characters are wonderfully warm and charismatic. At least that is my own humble opinion.
Joy xx
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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I LOVE YOUR OWN HUMBLE OPINION!
(See what I did there - nice and loud!)
xo
Comment from moongirlwriter
Anything is better than a screaming baby. Mom's have to pick their battles and when it comes to kids being loud and babies screaming. . .you know what is better.
Even Loud Louis was invited to make loud noises to entertain the baby. Cute and well written.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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Anything is better than a screaming baby. Mom's have to pick their battles and when it comes to kids being loud and babies screaming. . .you know what is better.
Even Loud Louis was invited to make loud noises to entertain the baby. Cute and well written.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Moongirlwriter. I sense you have lots of experience on this topic?
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yes I do. . .grandchildren too. Fortunately, they all do grow out of the screaming stage. . .I never got used to it. :)
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Lol. Nor should you have to!!
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Well, I do think sometimes. . .that choice isn't really ours. lol :)
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You are SO very right! xo
Comment from Michele Harber
Hi Rachelle. Boy you're on a writing streak. Of course, I'm right on your tail (three posts in two days on your part to zero on mine - but I'm right behind you; OK, waaaaaaaaay behind you). This is a really sweet and very believable story, that shows no indication of the issue I had in your personal history of your piano lessons. This one is told completely from the child's point of view, in a very recognizable way. I love that he thought his baby sister's crying was because their father was gone (not just because she was hungry or tired or - a baby!), and that he "got so upset ... that I ran to the upstairs hallway and made thunder." He didn't say "ran loudly across the hall" because he'd already explained that that sounded like thunder so, duh, what are we, stupid? This story is charming, and I like the happy ending (even though I'm sure the poor put-upon floorboards didn't).
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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Hi Rachelle. Boy you're on a writing streak. Of course, I'm right on your tail (three posts in two days on your part to zero on mine - but I'm right behind you; OK, waaaaaaaaay behind you). This is a really sweet and very believable story, that shows no indication of the issue I had in your personal history of your piano lessons. This one is told completely from the child's point of view, in a very recognizable way. I love that he thought his baby sister's crying was because their father was gone (not just because she was hungry or tired or - a baby!), and that he "got so upset ... that I ran to the upstairs hallway and made thunder." He didn't say "ran loudly across the hall" because he'd already explained that that sounded like thunder so, duh, what are we, stupid? This story is charming, and I like the happy ending (even though I'm sure the poor put-upon floorboards didn't).
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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Well, probably even all three children making thunder at once don't make the floorboards suffer as much as one trucker-Daddy just walking! Thank you for your thorough review...and go to your screen, Young Lady, and get busy with your OWN creations!! We, your avid readers, are becoming restless!! xo
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Yes, Mother. I actually tried to enter a poem I'm very proud of in the "Humor Poetry" contest that's coming up, but they turned me down because it seems they only want people who haven't won recently (darn you and that "Junk Mail" contest; if I hadn't won, I could have won). I'm definitely looking for a contest to enter. I don't see anything for which I have a piece already written, so I need time to specifically write for the contest. However, I've been a bit tied up this week. I'd mentioned that my dad passed away last year. Yesterday, I hosted the unveiling. Besides a few traditional prayers, my mom, sister and I each read a poem that held personal meaning. Saturday, I wrote the poem that I read Sunday, so writing for FanStory had to wait. I'll start working again today. Meanwhile, I'm happy that you were satisfied with my review, although I'm not sure that I agree that a "trucker-daddy just walking" is noisier than children making thunder. I've lived in apartment buildings since I was four, and spent many years living under very noisy kids. Trust me, they'd have had truck drivers running off in tears. FYI, I'd meant to point out a typo to you before and forgot. A quick re-read of your story just now showed me that you'd already picked up on it yourself or had it pointed out to you, but I wanted you to know that I'm aware that you corrected it (the misplaced "was"). I hate when little things like that take the attention away, even momentarily, from an otherwise excellent read.
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I know exactly what you're saying. xo
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Why does that not surprise me? Perfectionists of the world, unite!
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No, no, it's "Perfectionists of the world, Untie!" hahahahaha.
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That would explain the rope burns on my wrists.
Comment from JDRBAR
I absolutely love this. Very well written, flows smoothly, right descriptions. Overall, a superb job. This would make an idyllic children's picture book if you haven't already thought to do so.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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I absolutely love this. Very well written, flows smoothly, right descriptions. Overall, a superb job. This would make an idyllic children's picture book if you haven't already thought to do so.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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In the works, JDRBAR! Thanks for that vote of confidence! xo
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story, there are many things we can do to make a new baby fit in with the family. To make noise seems to be this baby's favorite and soon she will join the party. Poor mom. Lol.
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I'm not exactly sure what those words mean was(when) she says them
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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A very well-written story, there are many things we can do to make a new baby fit in with the family. To make noise seems to be this baby's favorite and soon she will join the party. Poor mom. Lol.
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I'm not exactly sure what those words mean was(when) she says them
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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I just saw that one (and fixed it) a moment ago. But THANK YOU, my eagle-eyed reviewer! I totally appreciate it. xo
Comment from 24chas
What a great story, Rachelle. I love the little character of Louie in this one. Your characters were very believable. The narration style was very smooth and easy to read. I felt like Louie was talking to me. I laughed at a couple of places and somebody nearby looked askance at me, so that was embarrassing. The ending was very heartwarming.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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What a great story, Rachelle. I love the little character of Louie in this one. Your characters were very believable. The narration style was very smooth and easy to read. I felt like Louie was talking to me. I laughed at a couple of places and somebody nearby looked askance at me, so that was embarrassing. The ending was very heartwarming.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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Oh, no, not askanced now at WORK!! Prithee and take heed.
And thanks for the very nice review. xo
