True Vision
20-syllable Poem Entry12 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
Hopefully the change is for the better for the heart is a fickle sensation that changes from light to darkness. I like your poem. This is a good entry for the 20 Syllables contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Hopefully the change is for the better for the heart is a fickle sensation that changes from light to darkness. I like your poem. This is a good entry for the 20 Syllables contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Jose, for your review on this one -- and, yes, we all hope for that transition! ) ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! ;) ;)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the way we see things can be changed from time to time when we can see something from a different perspective to make life better.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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A very well-written poem about the way we see things can be changed from time to time when we can see something from a different perspective to make life better.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this short write, Sandra -- you know I always appreciate your stopping by! ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! ;)
Comment from Loren .
Well done. Succinct and yet holding a value of truth in the message. It does remind me of the phrase paradigm shift. Walking in another person's shoes can certainly change not only the way we look at things, but indeed change our hearts as well. James
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Well done. Succinct and yet holding a value of truth in the message. It does remind me of the phrase paradigm shift. Walking in another person's shoes can certainly change not only the way we look at things, but indeed change our hearts as well. James
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this short write, Fulton -- I do so appreciate your stopping by for the R&R on this one! ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! ;)
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ooh! Good one! I like this a lot. Twenty syllables (check), commentary (check) and philosophy (check). Plus the accompanying graphic is terrific. Good luck with the contest!!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Ooh! Good one! I like this a lot. Twenty syllables (check), commentary (check) and philosophy (check). Plus the accompanying graphic is terrific. Good luck with the contest!!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this short write, Rachelle -- appreciate your stopping by for the R&R! ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! ;)
Comment from Shirley McLain
Very nice picture to go with your poem. Very colorful which really draws the eye to it. I agree with the premise of the poem. You did an excellent job.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Very nice picture to go with your poem. Very colorful which really draws the eye to it. I agree with the premise of the poem. You did an excellent job.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thank you. Since the rating was four stars meaning, by definition, that the poem needed work, could you please tell me how I could improve the write for future poetry? I appreciate your help in telling me what could be changed that would have made it better.
Comment from jenintorre
I like this twenty syllable poem. It portrays a lot of truth in so few words and is very thought provoking. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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I like this twenty syllable poem. It portrays a lot of truth in so few words and is very thought provoking. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this short write, Jen -- always appreciate your stopping by! ;) Take care and have a great week ahead!! ;) :)
Comment from LisaMay
This is a good point to make, and the colourful graphic suits the sentiment well to show how life can be brighter with 'a change of heart', due to an adjustment of perspective (often gained by standing in someone else's shoes for a while).
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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This is a good point to make, and the colourful graphic suits the sentiment well to show how life can be brighter with 'a change of heart', due to an adjustment of perspective (often gained by standing in someone else's shoes for a while).
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this short write, Lisa -- always appreciate your stopping by! ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! ;)
Comment from Randa Dayle
Great poem, 20 syllables is not very long, but you put it together very well. We all need a change of heart at some time or another! And using the hyphen in different was genius! Good job!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Great poem, 20 syllables is not very long, but you put it together very well. We all need a change of heart at some time or another! And using the hyphen in different was genius! Good job!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Good of you to drop by for this short write, Robert -- appreciate your stopping by! ;) Take care and have an awesome remainder of the week! ;)
Comment from 24chas
This was a good read, unknown poet. I think the sentiment was exactly right in the piece. The artwork also enhanced your words perfectly. Nice job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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This was a good read, unknown poet. I think the sentiment was exactly right in the piece. The artwork also enhanced your words perfectly. Nice job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Good of you to drop by for this short write, 2-4 -- good to hear from you!! ;) Take care and have an awesome remainder of the week! ;)
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
You've managed to share a bit of truth in just 20 syllables. The artwork also shines a light on your words. Best of luck in the contest. You should do well.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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You've managed to share a bit of truth in just 20 syllables. The artwork also shines a light on your words. Best of luck in the contest. You should do well.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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So good of you to drop in on this short write, Stephanie -- always appreciate your stopping by! ;) Take care and have an awesome wee! ;)
